I Didn't Tell a Lie - Sorta
It Hurt in the End18 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This had to be a tough time for your parents and for you and Donald. I just bet that was one spanking you never forgot about. Things happen. Kids will be kids. We have three sons. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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This had to be a tough time for your parents and for you and Donald. I just bet that was one spanking you never forgot about. Things happen. Kids will be kids. We have three sons. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I always felt to be a favorite son, but not so much to my dad but to Elohim who seemingly has walked beside me sometimes, and carried me at others. He has seen me through Scarlet fever, and Whooping Cough, being bullied though childhood schools, and away from Vietnam. He guided me to find a woman that let me grow individually, and even when we could not conceive found a way for us to adopt two infant girl babies. I cannot understand how his patience has not disappeared as I continuously disappoint myself, and then must HIm as well until I think He must have more for me to do. Thanks for the review.
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Tom, I have felt the same way at times. We just have to know what a precious and real God we serve. Jesus Christ loves us all so much. I just don't want to disappoint Him. May God bless you my friend. Teri
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Tom, I have felt the same way at times. We just have to know what a precious and real God we serve. Jesus Christ loves us all so much. I just don't want to disappoint Him. May God bless you my friend. Teri
Comment from Julie Helms
Oh my gosh, I saw disaster looming at the first mention of match. You boys had such a fantastic idea up to the point--what a creative way to recycle those trees!
Great story that confirms me in my belief that I was not created to raise boys. (Had two girls).
sitting room and ask. "Thomas, did you...
(...and asked, "Thomas, did you...)
Loved your story.
:-)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Oh my gosh, I saw disaster looming at the first mention of match. You boys had such a fantastic idea up to the point--what a creative way to recycle those trees!
Great story that confirms me in my belief that I was not created to raise boys. (Had two girls).
sitting room and ask. "Thomas, did you...
(...and asked, "Thomas, did you...)
Loved your story.
:-)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thank you
What were you saying with?
sitting room and ask. "Thomas, did you...
(...and asked, "Thomas, did you...)
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Yours is the first line and is not correct.
(This line has a corrected suggestion...so change 'ask' to 'asked' and change the period to a comma.)
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Got it. Thanks. Changes have been made.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely written story.
It might have taken years, but I have to believe that your dad's trust finally healed.
I got the belt a number of times.
And a number of times I didn't when I should have.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Very nicely written story.
It might have taken years, but I have to believe that your dad's trust finally healed.
I got the belt a number of times.
And a number of times I didn't when I should have.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Wish you were right but nada he never did because his fight with the other dad ended with injury for Donald?s dad
Comment from Begin Again
There must be something about little boys and matches...My grandson's have had separate fires at my house and at their own. Neither turned out well. And the inferno you must have had with dried out Christmas trees. Glad everyone was safe even if you had to be taught a lesson.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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There must be something about little boys and matches...My grandson's have had separate fires at my house and at their own. Neither turned out well. And the inferno you must have had with dried out Christmas trees. Glad everyone was safe even if you had to be taught a lesson.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Well, I did not play with matches after that day, fer sur.
Comment from Wendy G
It's probably your style, but it may not be helpful in a contest to have grammatical or spelling errors eg "no ill intent" doesn't need to be followed by "intended", the incorrect spelling of "idere" for "idea", and "constructive" should be "constructed". These are a distraction from what is essentially a fine story and a good entry for the contest. Just my opinion, so take it or leave it. Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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It's probably your style, but it may not be helpful in a contest to have grammatical or spelling errors eg "no ill intent" doesn't need to be followed by "intended", the incorrect spelling of "idere" for "idea", and "constructive" should be "constructed". These are a distraction from what is essentially a fine story and a good entry for the contest. Just my opinion, so take it or leave it. Best wishes for the contest!
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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That is a saying I have used and declare it to be my own which I use frequently when critiquing a piece of work hoping to save hurting another's feeling. Idea had been thought however I felt with a seven year old thinking idere seemingly fit. I've made the change re: constructed.
Thanks as always for your time and suggestions.
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Idere has been amended to idea.
Comment from BethShelby
I'll bet that did make an inferno. Nothing burn hotter and faster than a dried out Christmas tree. You all a lucky you got out. In New Orleans where I lived, everone too thier dried out tree to levee and piled them high and lit they. The rose I high into the sky and the firetrucks were around to control in from the beginning.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I'll bet that did make an inferno. Nothing burn hotter and faster than a dried out Christmas tree. You all a lucky you got out. In New Orleans where I lived, everone too thier dried out tree to levee and piled them high and lit they. The rose I high into the sky and the firetrucks were around to control in from the beginning.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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and the after affects of the burn were new skeleton tree to sink so Crappies and such could nest therein. Well done.
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and the after affects of the burn were new skeleton tree to sink so Crappies and such could nest therein. Well done.
Comment from royowen
I like that, what's that saying, it's not the partial truth, of which there's no such thing, it's the sin of omission, that turns the story into a lie, plus I can say I don't blame your dad, heh heh, but I think that most of us have that partial truth, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : a good (idere) idea?
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I like that, what's that saying, it's not the partial truth, of which there's no such thing, it's the sin of omission, that turns the story into a lie, plus I can say I don't blame your dad, heh heh, but I think that most of us have that partial truth, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : a good (idere) idea?
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Thanks for the suggestion but I'll stick with idere as it was more likely the word I used when I was seven. Thanks for commenting and visiting my piece. Let's see where it goes between now and December 15th. Why such a distance future puzzles me because if a piece isn't read immediately, it likely won't be read again until the end nears.
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It seems a little strange amidst other words being correctly spelt Tom,
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That's true. Thanks again. I may reconsider.
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Idere has gone the way of T-Rex for idea has replaced it. :-)
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Well done
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the True Story Contest. What is it with little boys and matches? Great story. Glad it had a happy ending for the most part and that no bad little boys were hurt. lol good luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the True Story Contest. What is it with little boys and matches? Great story. Glad it had a happy ending for the most part and that no bad little boys were hurt. lol good luck in the contest
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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A happy ending is not what I tought my arse to be after the beat down from my dad, but I understand. Thanks.