Dodie Rae
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Bay Lynn"A young woman unwilling to submit to abuse.
18 total reviews
Comment from Erika Whittle
This is intriguing. I can't wait to find out what's in the bottle! Is it a love potion, is this all for a placebo effect? You've got my curiosity peeking
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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This is intriguing. I can't wait to find out what's in the bottle! Is it a love potion, is this all for a placebo effect? You've got my curiosity peeking
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Awesome review, my friend, thank you. You're asking the same questions the other reviewers are asking.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
OK. I remember reading chapter one and liking it very much. The story is addictive and I can see myself getting hooked. What the heck was in that bottle and where can I get one? lol Nicely done. looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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OK. I remember reading chapter one and liking it very much. The story is addictive and I can see myself getting hooked. What the heck was in that bottle and where can I get one? lol Nicely done. looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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What's in the bottle indeed. This is the topic of most reviews in this chapter. Thank you for the excellent review and I look forward to reading more of your work.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, I am totally intrigued by this tantalising post. I wonder what was in that little bottle that will change this girl's life? I have so many questions and I suppose I will have to wait for your next post to have the answers. I enjoyed this chapter, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Oh my goodness, I am totally intrigued by this tantalising post. I wonder what was in that little bottle that will change this girl's life? I have so many questions and I suppose I will have to wait for your next post to have the answers. I enjoyed this chapter, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Dolly, thank you for this excellent review, my friend. I am enjoying the reviews I am receiving thus far. They are encouraging me to continue this journey and the next chapter is insane lol. What's in the jar? This is the topic of the reviews. Dodie Rae or her grandmother never expected what the contents of the jar would do to her. One will be invigorated and the other horrified.
Thank you for the excellent review and I hope to get the next chapter up by the weekend. I'm trying to get one up weekly, hopefully that's enough to keep everyone reading.
God bless,
Steve
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Great job Steve, can't wait for the next chapter x x. x
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Great job Steve, can't wait for the next chapter x x. x
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Thank you, Dolly.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
The dialogue carries this, Steve. I could hear the voices in my head as clearly as if I'd been a fly on the wall. Looking forward to reading the next chapter and finding out what was in that bottle.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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The dialogue carries this, Steve. I could hear the voices in my head as clearly as if I'd been a fly on the wall. Looking forward to reading the next chapter and finding out what was in that bottle.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Tony, for this excellent review, my friend. I am getting more and more excited with every review. I feel I know the whole story, and now I need to get it all down.
I am working on cleaning up the next chapter and need to move forward with what comes next before sharing. This is moving a bit faster than I am used to, lol.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Steve
You left me wanting more. There are a lot of unanswered questions Like what is in the bottle and why it works on men.
A few other things. I just noticed that this is a chapter in your book Dodie Rae. So, I guess those mysteries
will be solved in future chapters.
Why do men abuse women. I was with my husband for 45 years and he never once lay a hand on me. If he had, I would've left him. I know that's easy to say, and if you get a truly abusive man, you might not make it out of the relationship, but you have to try.
I can't wait! I enjoyed reading your story
Here subject Is plural so are the first things
" The fragrance of swamp water and its residents is the first thing "
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Hi, Steve
You left me wanting more. There are a lot of unanswered questions Like what is in the bottle and why it works on men.
A few other things. I just noticed that this is a chapter in your book Dodie Rae. So, I guess those mysteries
will be solved in future chapters.
Why do men abuse women. I was with my husband for 45 years and he never once lay a hand on me. If he had, I would've left him. I know that's easy to say, and if you get a truly abusive man, you might not make it out of the relationship, but you have to try.
I can't wait! I enjoyed reading your story
Here subject Is plural so are the first things
" The fragrance of swamp water and its residents is the first thing "
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Pamusart, for this excellent and helpful review, my friend. I am enjoying the pace this piece is offering and hope to continue on this path.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from royowen
I think we all need grandparents as a living example of a life well lived and an understanding of life, love and grace, I never really knew my grandparents, we migrated when I was very young, as were my parents, beautifully written Steve, excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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I think we all need grandparents as a living example of a life well lived and an understanding of life, love and grace, I never really knew my grandparents, we migrated when I was very young, as were my parents, beautifully written Steve, excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I'm sorry you didn't know them throughout your life. I was lucky enough to have mine for some time, through the good and the bad.
God bless, my friend.
Steve
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Bless you
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Right back as you, Roy.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I love the dialogue in this, Steve! You've definitely mastered that. And your story is well expressed and prompts me to imagine all sorts of outcomes from this intriguing family chat. But now I want to know what happens next. You've left this a bit on a knife edge. Credit to you for this fascinating story that will keep me guessing! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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I love the dialogue in this, Steve! You've definitely mastered that. And your story is well expressed and prompts me to imagine all sorts of outcomes from this intriguing family chat. But now I want to know what happens next. You've left this a bit on a knife edge. Credit to you for this fascinating story that will keep me guessing! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, for this excellent review. I am currently revising the next chapter and hope to share by the weekend. I work 12 hrs a day and am off Monday and Tuesdays. This is when I have to play catch up. I don't want to lose the momentum as the reviews I am receiving are quite encouraging.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from jmdg1954
Okay... I know what just happened, though I do not know how, why or what, yet.
It read with interest in my perspective as I'm anxious to read what happens next when Dodie Rae gets home and faces her husband.
Nicely composed and presented.
John
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Okay... I know what just happened, though I do not know how, why or what, yet.
It read with interest in my perspective as I'm anxious to read what happens next when Dodie Rae gets home and faces her husband.
Nicely composed and presented.
John
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2024
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Thank you, John, for the excellent review. I toyed with adding what happens next with this chapter, but was afraid it might seem too long. I am still quite green when it comes to these issues.
God bless,
Steve
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Generally many readers shy away from longer posts really only trying to capture member dollars as quick as possible. I call the member dollar whores? (sorry).
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Ha! Ha! Well, I would have to agree. Do you think I should combine them? It would double the length. I'm looking for genuine feedback that will help me hone my craft.
