Summer's Lazy Rhythm
Tanka poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is so beautifully expressed it could be put to music. So evocative of summer (if only it would come here in the UK!), each word seems to be assiduously chosen with the lightest touch to reflect the scene and the sensation in the visual. What a finishing line! Another winner, I think! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This is so beautifully expressed it could be put to music. So evocative of summer (if only it would come here in the UK!), each word seems to be assiduously chosen with the lightest touch to reflect the scene and the sensation in the visual. What a finishing line! Another winner, I think! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hello Debbie. Thanks so much for your wonderful review and comments.I appreciate your thoughts... I hope you get warm, summertime weather soon. It was hot here today.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
It's amazing how much open than there is, Australia is a land of sweeping plains and open landscapes, with only a small population to occupy mainly its coastal regions, a great tanka Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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It's amazing how much open than there is, Australia is a land of sweeping plains and open landscapes, with only a small population to occupy mainly its coastal regions, a great tanka Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hello Roy. Thanks for your lovely review.
Melissa
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Well done Melissa
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Tanka Poetry Contest. What a lovely poem that completely describes the feeling of a slow, uneventful Summer's day. Very nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the Tanka Poetry Contest. What a lovely poem that completely describes the feeling of a slow, uneventful Summer's day. Very nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Marilyn!
Melissa
Comment from gansach
This is an excellent entry for the Tanka poetry competition. The syllable count is correct, it has a nice flow, descriptive words that present a clear picture and a great accompanying photo to enhance it. Very nice!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This is an excellent entry for the Tanka poetry competition. The syllable count is correct, it has a nice flow, descriptive words that present a clear picture and a great accompanying photo to enhance it. Very nice!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thanks so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
This is a beautiful tanka, my friend! You know how much I love the tanka! Yours are always exceptional as this one. A marvelous summer-themed entry for the contest. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the tanka.
Sal Xoxo's
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This is a beautiful tanka, my friend! You know how much I love the tanka! Yours are always exceptional as this one. A marvelous summer-themed entry for the contest. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the tanka.
Sal Xoxo's
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you sweet Sal. I am delighted you liked it. It was good to have those moments of creativity flowing for a bit. Take care!
Melissa
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Thank you sweet Sal. I am delighted you liked it. It was good to have those moments of creativity flowing for a bit. Take care!
Melissa
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My pleasure as always.
See ya tomorrow!
Sal xoxo
Comment from lyenochka
A skillfully crafted tanka poem! I like how you transition our gaze from the cloud shadows and help us to see islands floating. And you help us relax to the slower rhythm of summer. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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A skillfully crafted tanka poem! I like how you transition our gaze from the cloud shadows and help us to see islands floating. And you help us relax to the slower rhythm of summer. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you Helen. I am sooo in the mood for lazy summer days. I just had to put my yearning into a verse. Hugs!!
Melissa
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Thank you Helen. I am sooo in the mood for lazy summer days. I just had to put my yearning into a verse. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Erika Whittle
This poem creates beautiful word pictures. It's a wonderful summer poem. I love the descriptive words that you use, like flitter and languidly. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This poem creates beautiful word pictures. It's a wonderful summer poem. I love the descriptive words that you use, like flitter and languidly. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much Erika!
Melissa
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Thank you so much Erika!
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
I do like how your verse and photo mesh in a nice description. One just can see those clouds rolling by in the skies.
Punctuation for some posts need a look IMHO. In your case, I would add a dash or squiggle after your second line to emphasize your concluding lines. Since you capitalized Cloud, then maybe a period is also needed.
I am all in for your summertime rhythm.
Nicely done for this Tanka entry.
Mark
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Melissa,
I do like how your verse and photo mesh in a nice description. One just can see those clouds rolling by in the skies.
Punctuation for some posts need a look IMHO. In your case, I would add a dash or squiggle after your second line to emphasize your concluding lines. Since you capitalized Cloud, then maybe a period is also needed.
I am all in for your summertime rhythm.
Nicely done for this Tanka entry.
Mark
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you Mark... I will take a look at it and so appreciate your suggestions. Hugs!!
Melissa
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Thank you Mark... I will take a look at it and so appreciate your suggestions. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
When I read this I hear Ella crooning Summertime in the background ! Way to go for capturing the beauty of balmy summer days in this exquisite write in perfect tanka form.
Love the creativity of your focus on the shadows cast by the clouds that transform into islands on the expansive prairie.
I'm sure the CC will fall in love with this offering.
I have no wish to offend your muse, Melissa. But I wonder if "flicker" would be more accurate in the first line, because that's what I see in my mind's eye.
Best of luck!
Blessings, Julia - aka Marilyn to you LOL
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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When I read this I hear Ella crooning Summertime in the background ! Way to go for capturing the beauty of balmy summer days in this exquisite write in perfect tanka form.
Love the creativity of your focus on the shadows cast by the clouds that transform into islands on the expansive prairie.
I'm sure the CC will fall in love with this offering.
I have no wish to offend your muse, Melissa. But I wonder if "flicker" would be more accurate in the first line, because that's what I see in my mind's eye.
Best of luck!
Blessings, Julia - aka Marilyn to you LOL
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hey Marilyn. I pulled up Summertime on my Spotify app and I'm listening to it right now. It definitely personifies the lazy summer days. Thank you for your wonderful review.
Melissa
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Hey Marilyn. I pulled up Summertime on my Spotify app and I'm listening to it right now. It definitely personifies the lazy summer days. Thank you for your wonderful review.
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a beautiful Tanka for a lazy summer day. Your using of words are very clever and sophisticated. I like the alliteration in the short middle line.
Excellent. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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What a beautiful Tanka for a lazy summer day. Your using of words are very clever and sophisticated. I like the alliteration in the short middle line.
Excellent. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hi Lisa. Thank you so much! I really appreciate it! Hugs. Hope you continue to share your travels with us!!
Meliss
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Hi Lisa. Thank you so much! I really appreciate it! Hugs. Hope you continue to share your travels with us!!
Meliss