Life, Death, Up, Down
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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
What an incredibly sad story. I can read horror stories with pretend monsters all day and watch the scariest of movies but anything about war is off limits to me. I can't handle the truth of it and the depth of despair that mankind brings upon itself. But i thank you for sharing your writing. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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What an incredibly sad story. I can read horror stories with pretend monsters all day and watch the scariest of movies but anything about war is off limits to me. I can't handle the truth of it and the depth of despair that mankind brings upon itself. But i thank you for sharing your writing. Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I do not relish writing anything with a war background, but sometimes, for the subject matter, it seems to be the best setting. I never try to glorify war, although I did win an award for my Audie Murphy tale deep in my portfolio.
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Your Story was very good. I wasn't commenting on that. I just have trouble emotionally reading about war.
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I understand. I'm just happy you're still talking with me after those terrible puns.
Comment from BethShelby
This is and excellent story of war and can happen but the death of soldier who has a family and children means many more people will suffer. War is terrible. I'm glad I didn't meet my husband until he was safely back home.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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This is and excellent story of war and can happen but the death of soldier who has a family and children means many more people will suffer. War is terrible. I'm glad I didn't meet my husband until he was safely back home.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I am glad also. Not only were you blessed, but your tales have been a blessing to me and the others at FS!
Comment from Michele Harber
Ouch! This brought a tear to my eye, for both the situation you described, and because it made me miss my own daddy that much more.
You have such a beautiful way of creating real people with genuine emotions, and putting the reader exactly where they are, both physically and emotionally. Even Sarge, who we never truly meet except through the eyes of your narrator, is truly, fully developed. You didn't create characters as much as real people with whom the reader can identify, and that is a true credit to your writing skill.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Ouch! This brought a tear to my eye, for both the situation you described, and because it made me miss my own daddy that much more.
You have such a beautiful way of creating real people with genuine emotions, and putting the reader exactly where they are, both physically and emotionally. Even Sarge, who we never truly meet except through the eyes of your narrator, is truly, fully developed. You didn't create characters as much as real people with whom the reader can identify, and that is a true credit to your writing skill.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I get my inspiration to write from God and the beautiful words you have given me.
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Awwww, that?s so sweet.
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Oooooooh. 😊
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And right back at you!
Comment from joann r romei
Great story of admiration and self reflection, the complex relationships between parents and children are often common, private and sometimes tragic. two people make a relationship of any kind, and both parties have to be accountable for their situation, wether good or bad.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Great story of admiration and self reflection, the complex relationships between parents and children are often common, private and sometimes tragic. two people make a relationship of any kind, and both parties have to be accountable for their situation, wether good or bad.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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You are right and I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Wendy G
Very well written story, with important themes of relationships: mateship, fatherhood and the role of fathers, the essential value of a life, and sacrifice. Powerful.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Very well written story, with important themes of relationships: mateship, fatherhood and the role of fathers, the essential value of a life, and sacrifice. Powerful.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your words.
Comment from Sanku
We all want a father figure ,yet often we are at war with our own fathers..This war time story beautifully portraits that need with fine emotions and a sense of reality ...well done..
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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We all want a father figure ,yet often we are at war with our own fathers..This war time story beautifully portraits that need with fine emotions and a sense of reality ...well done..
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Often, I chose paths that were not sanctioned by my father. But I am thankful I was able to change my life.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story set in a war that allows the good guys to be losers. Only one survived, one who will miss his fatherly Sarge and not forget what he did to his own father.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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This is a good story set in a war that allows the good guys to be losers. Only one survived, one who will miss his fatherly Sarge and not forget what he did to his own father.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you! Unfortunately, Life doesn't always allow us neat, wrapped packages to resolve our ordeals.
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That is so true about life.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This was a tragic story and you chose to share it straight on father's day.... the hero who's left behind.Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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This was a tragic story and you chose to share it straight on father's day.... the hero who's left behind.Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I thank you very much for your kind review!
Comment from Claire Tennant
This story conveys emotion well. The scene is well described, and the mateship between Sarge and the writer (supposedly,) is strong. The mateship of the other comrades adds a little humour. You balance reality with emotion well. Who does not want Daddy? Most of us have said or done the wrong thing ay some stage. What I like most is that the emotion is conveyed without touching the reader's own emotions. Looking forwad to reading more.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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This story conveys emotion well. The scene is well described, and the mateship between Sarge and the writer (supposedly,) is strong. The mateship of the other comrades adds a little humour. You balance reality with emotion well. Who does not want Daddy? Most of us have said or done the wrong thing ay some stage. What I like most is that the emotion is conveyed without touching the reader's own emotions. Looking forwad to reading more.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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If I could bring my dad back, there is nothing of mine I wouldn't gladly sacrifice.
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Same here, Jim. I miss Dad every day despite a good marriage. Blessings to you
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Have a very blessed weekend!
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for a father story for this upcoming Father's Day weekend! Your narrator gives us a sense of how hard it is for those with difficult relationships with their fathers and how it helps to have a father figure we respect in life like Sarge.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thanks for a father story for this upcoming Father's Day weekend! Your narrator gives us a sense of how hard it is for those with difficult relationships with their fathers and how it helps to have a father figure we respect in life like Sarge.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words!