Love Never Left
A renewed love.18 total reviews
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
Jodi Ann, this is just beautiful! The feeling is of comes through so clearly! And the fear of it being gone! You make it tangible, so packed with emotion! Maddy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Jodi Ann, this is just beautiful! The feeling is of comes through so clearly! And the fear of it being gone! You make it tangible, so packed with emotion! Maddy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank so much for enjoying my poem Maddy!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest.
It's very romantic with great word imagery and presentation. I'm happy they resolved their issues.
Gypsy
Good lu
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Excellent entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest.
It's very romantic with great word imagery and presentation. I'm happy they resolved their issues.
Gypsy
Good lu
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much for the nice comments!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. It is nice to read that their love is renewed. Well written poem. It is a very descriptive poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It is nice to read that their love is renewed. Well written poem. It is a very descriptive poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thanks for the great review Brenda!
Comment from gansach
This is a good entry for the Love poem poetry competition. A good description of the emotions and ups and downs of a relationship. The meter and rhyme have a good flow. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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This is a good entry for the Love poem poetry competition. A good description of the emotions and ups and downs of a relationship. The meter and rhyme have a good flow. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much for the great review!
Comment from Sally Law
This is wonderful rhyming love poetry, Jodi Ann. It could be the love story of many. I personally love a sweet ending.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the love poetry contest.
Sal Xo's
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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This is wonderful rhyming love poetry, Jodi Ann. It could be the love story of many. I personally love a sweet ending.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the love poetry contest.
Sal Xo's
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much Sally! It means a lot!
Comment from Daylily
This is a rhyming couplet poem with a beautiful message about a lasting love. I am reviewing it with five-stars because I think you have excellent potential to soon be composing outstanding works, and I also want to encourage you to continue learning.
The weakness here is with the mixed-meter presentation in that some lines have iambic beginnings _' while others are trochaic '_, which are Giving, Slowly, Deeper, and Everything.
It would be okay if the presentation were consistent--as in a firmly set pattern of ONLY using alternating iambic and trochaic lines.
I do not know how long you have been writing poems, but I think you are on a strong path and I look forward to reading more of your work. I, too, am obsessed with writing and dearly wish there were more hours in a day. Smiles, Lily
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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This is a rhyming couplet poem with a beautiful message about a lasting love. I am reviewing it with five-stars because I think you have excellent potential to soon be composing outstanding works, and I also want to encourage you to continue learning.
The weakness here is with the mixed-meter presentation in that some lines have iambic beginnings _' while others are trochaic '_, which are Giving, Slowly, Deeper, and Everything.
It would be okay if the presentation were consistent--as in a firmly set pattern of ONLY using alternating iambic and trochaic lines.
I do not know how long you have been writing poems, but I think you are on a strong path and I look forward to reading more of your work. I, too, am obsessed with writing and dearly wish there were more hours in a day. Smiles, Lily
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Thanks for your honest review! I have only just recently started really writing, and I love that you say I have potential. I will keep learning. Thanks Lily!
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Thanks for your input Lily! I changed the meter and made it have a better flow. I would love for you to reread it and see if it sounds better. I am also going to read more of your writings so I can be a better writer!
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You have done a great job upgrading your iambic tetrameter poem and that is wonderful. The only other suggestion I can make is with this line: I then started slowly to rise,
To stay consistent with iambic, you could say:
I instantly began to rise
The bonus of doing this would be eliminating using 'then' in two consecutive lines. -- This is something frequently done without realizing it gets noticed by a lot of readers.
I think you could do very well in the contest with your entry, Jodi. Best wishes!
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Thank you Lily! I will take your advice!
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Did you intend to leave in the word started--which scans:
I in' stant ly' start' ed to rise' --
using began would scan:
I in' stant ly' be gan' to rise'
If so, it will throw off the iambic meter. To be honest, however, It is understandable when poets do what they feel is the most comfortable for them. Poetry can be very subjective and that is a good thing. :-)
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I fixed it. Thanks for all your great input!
Comment from Michele Harber
It's comforting to see that a misstep doesn't have to end a relationship and that, as The Captain and Tenille so eloquently stated, "Love Will Keep Us Together." Your poem went from sad to hopeful and optimistic, and left me with a smile on my face. Granted such situations don't usually turn out that well, but it's nice to know that sometimes they can.
Your rhymes, and the image you used, are all very well chosen. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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It's comforting to see that a misstep doesn't have to end a relationship and that, as The Captain and Tenille so eloquently stated, "Love Will Keep Us Together." Your poem went from sad to hopeful and optimistic, and left me with a smile on my face. Granted such situations don't usually turn out that well, but it's nice to know that sometimes they can.
Your rhymes, and the image you used, are all very well chosen. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you! I so much appreciate it!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a nicely written love poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you with all good things and may he also bless your writing. Patricia .
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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This is a nicely written love poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you with all good things and may he also bless your writing. Patricia .
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much for the review and for the luck in the contest Patricia!
