Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Mail Call"Young girl with special abilities.
15 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, the cat is out of the bag now and Mrs Collete has enough venom in her to cause some trouble for poor Artie. I don't know what a (hope box) is Gretchen? Is it like saying (a bottom drawer), somewhere to collect items for becoming a future bride?
Another fine chapter and it is always a pleasure to read your work.
One small edit:
(He) never looks away
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Oh dear, the cat is out of the bag now and Mrs Collete has enough venom in her to cause some trouble for poor Artie. I don't know what a (hope box) is Gretchen? Is it like saying (a bottom drawer), somewhere to collect items for becoming a future bride?
Another fine chapter and it is always a pleasure to read your work.
One small edit:
(He) never looks away
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much Dolly. Yes a hope chest is a large trunk made out of wood. My mother had one and my sister had one. It was a thing of the past by the time I reached the normal age to start one. Thank you for the edit as well. Gretchen
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
Strong work here and character development. This grabbed my attention and held it all the way through from start to finish. I wish you all the best going forward
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Strong work here and character development. This grabbed my attention and held it all the way through from start to finish. I wish you all the best going forward
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much for the nice review. Gretchen
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is the first I have read of this story. It is an exciting and well-executed story. The end of the chapter guarantees the reader will want to find out what is next. A larger font would be easier for us older folks to read.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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This is the first I have read of this story. It is an exciting and well-executed story. The end of the chapter guarantees the reader will want to find out what is next. A larger font would be easier for us older folks to read.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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I will work on the font size. Lol. That suggestion has been made before. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Erika Whittle
It's nice to read a story from a child's perspective. Children are so innocent and they think of things adults take for granted. I think you portrayed it well. Good job
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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It's nice to read a story from a child's perspective. Children are so innocent and they think of things adults take for granted. I think you portrayed it well. Good job
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Uh-oh. Now what? Artie had better make like a tree and leave, skedaddle for the boonies.
His never looks away. - maybe 'He never looks away.'?
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Uh-oh. Now what? Artie had better make like a tree and leave, skedaddle for the boonies.
His never looks away. - maybe 'He never looks away.'?
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Wayne. I will fix that edit. Much appreciated. Gretchen
