Midnight Ride
Justice is non-negotiable.24 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was very good and I am glad I voted for it. You've used your words economically but gotten in a full story from beginning to end. Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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This was very good and I am glad I voted for it. You've used your words economically but gotten in a full story from beginning to end. Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Carol, for your vote and for this encouraging six-star review. This story was one of my favorites; I'm grateful for your feedback. Take care. - Jamison
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Weren't you the one writing about the Sheriff raising his baby daughter alone and a nuclear power plant being threatened. Did I somehow miss the rest of it. it was very good.
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yes, that was me, Carol. I have had the book on hold, but a new chapter is coming soon. Thank you for remembering.
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I really liked that story.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
So she pressed the detonator to blow up the train or the suitcase? Hmm . . .
I looked up military demolition, which basically says you're creating space for the good guys and blocking the path for the bad. Which team did Claire play for?
This story would make a great prompt for a short story! Lots of different ideas as to what is going on, I'm sure.
Congratulations on your win. Unfortunately, I've given out all my sizes for the week:-(
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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So she pressed the detonator to blow up the train or the suitcase? Hmm . . .
I looked up military demolition, which basically says you're creating space for the good guys and blocking the path for the bad. Which team did Claire play for?
This story would make a great prompt for a short story! Lots of different ideas as to what is going on, I'm sure.
Congratulations on your win. Unfortunately, I've given out all my sizes for the week:-(
xo
Pam
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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so many possibilities... it would be tough to pick just one. You uncovered some I had not even thought of... It would be fun to expand. Thanks, Pam. - Jamison
Comment from LJbutterfly
Congratulations on your well-deserved win of the flash fiction contest. Your short story, using succinct language, includes mystery and suspense, and culminates in a surprising and satisfying ending.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Congratulations on your well-deserved win of the flash fiction contest. Your short story, using succinct language, includes mystery and suspense, and culminates in a surprising and satisfying ending.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Lorraine. I had some fun creating this. - Jamison
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jamison
This is a well told story. But I don't understand why she blew up the train before she got the person she was paying the ransom for. But I can see her remembering her past at this moment.
Congrats on wining the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a nice rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Hi Jamison
This is a well told story. But I don't understand why she blew up the train before she got the person she was paying the ransom for. But I can see her remembering her past at this moment.
Congrats on wining the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a nice rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Hi, Joan. Thanks for the review. There are many possibilities to ponder. Maybe the ransom was paid for something other than a person... - Jamison
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Your welcome, Jamison. That is a probability. But to kill so many people for that payment.
Joan
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one more consideration, the thief was not on the train and had vanished from the station, minimizing any collateral damage. See-this is fun stuff, right?
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Yes, That is one reason I like reading mysteries and watching NCIS.
Joan
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon,
This is a very good 'flash' with a great twist (as flash demands).
Lots of atmosphere with the slightest of touches, and a comforting 'revenge' tale for the reader to create their own back-story.
This is a good, strong piece.
I wish you well in your contest.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Hello Anon,
This is a very good 'flash' with a great twist (as flash demands).
Lots of atmosphere with the slightest of touches, and a comforting 'revenge' tale for the reader to create their own back-story.
This is a good, strong piece.
I wish you well in your contest.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the great review, phill. I appreciate and greatly respect your feedback. Take care. - Jamison
Comment from Thesis
Great entry to the contest. This is an engaging story that captures the reader immediately. I like the intensity and the reference to her military demolition days. Her resolve to press the detonator clinched it for me. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Great entry to the contest. This is an engaging story that captures the reader immediately. I like the intensity and the reference to her military demolition days. Her resolve to press the detonator clinched it for me. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Thesis. I appreciate your kind review. - Jamison
Comment from royowen
I loved this, it was such a good story, although never quite sure how it would end, that is a good thing, because this was the perfect finish for a good flash fiction, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I loved this, it was such a good story, although never quite sure how it would end, that is a good thing, because this was the perfect finish for a good flash fiction, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I appreciate this encouraging review, Roy. Many blessings to you.
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My pleasure
Comment from Mia Twysted
Sometimes you have to do what you have to do. It sounds like Claire was in a heck of a situation and this must have been her only way out. I love how you made me see her scared but together.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Sometimes you have to do what you have to do. It sounds like Claire was in a heck of a situation and this must have been her only way out. I love how you made me see her scared but together.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Claire knew this was her only option, and she had the courage and the skill to see it through. Thank you, Mia.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Midnight Ride, has the proper word count and finds the frightening part of the tale of intrigue will likely end with bang.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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This one-hundred-word story, Midnight Ride, has the proper word count and finds the frightening part of the tale of intrigue will likely end with bang.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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A big bang, indeed. Thank you, Bill. Take care.
Comment from Sally Law
I just voted for this and had to come back and review. This is great and I dearly hope you win. Best of class in this 100 word flash! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes in the upcoming vote.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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I just voted for this and had to come back and review. This is great and I dearly hope you win. Best of class in this 100 word flash! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes in the upcoming vote.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Sal, for this wonderful review. Your words mean a great deal to me.