Surprise!
Not what the thief expected12 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Well, I could ask why anyone would, old or young, put such a box on the porch, but I guess that would ruin the set up and the punchline. You certainly do have a surprise ending. The reader didn't have a clue.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Well, I could ask why anyone would, old or young, put such a box on the porch, but I guess that would ruin the set up and the punchline. You certainly do have a surprise ending. The reader didn't have a clue.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thanks for this nice review. :)
Comment from Pamusart
Hi. I hope you are well. This seems like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!
You kind of gave it away with your notes. But maybe I just have a morbid sense of humor. Tee hee
Here. I think it should be past tense because you already had it in the box when you brought it in fro the garage.
" He packed it carefully, he was always"
He'd packed ?
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Hi. I hope you are well. This seems like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!
You kind of gave it away with your notes. But maybe I just have a morbid sense of humor. Tee hee
Here. I think it should be past tense because you already had it in the box when you brought it in fro the garage.
" He packed it carefully, he was always"
He'd packed ?
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you for the suggestions and for this great review. :)
