For I had known her
A short story of life, death and addiction.15 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
You hooked me with this story. It grabbed my attention and held it to the end, which had a surprising twist. Marvelous writing, My friend. I look forward to reading more of the same from you.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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You hooked me with this story. It grabbed my attention and held it to the end, which had a surprising twist. Marvelous writing, My friend. I look forward to reading more of the same from you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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It is my best. Proelium is second and Adam is a struggle to edit lol. Thanks I?ll read more of you soon.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This was a good story. Here are a few puncuation problems I saw.
A little way through my journey I began again to feel the need for drink (comma needed after journey)
confidence for me, but, also not the moment for indecision or procrastination. (remove the comma after the word but)
The mother, in a very bad state, but, now conscious, (remove the comma after the word but)
I was not calm, but, she shook her head in agreement and we began this oddest of bonding experiences (remove the comma after the word but)
When writing for this site. you should put a space between each paragraph.
hope this helps. good luck
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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This was a good story. Here are a few puncuation problems I saw.
A little way through my journey I began again to feel the need for drink (comma needed after journey)
confidence for me, but, also not the moment for indecision or procrastination. (remove the comma after the word but)
The mother, in a very bad state, but, now conscious, (remove the comma after the word but)
I was not calm, but, she shook her head in agreement and we began this oddest of bonding experiences (remove the comma after the word but)
When writing for this site. you should put a space between each paragraph.
hope this helps. good luck
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Funny you should say that because I did and when I uploaded they were removed. I'll watch that and fix errors.
Comment from FurryBunny
This story delves deep into the complexities of human relationships and strength in challenging times. While it may not suit all readers, for those seeking a raw, emotional narrative, it leaves a lasting impression.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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This story delves deep into the complexities of human relationships and strength in challenging times. While it may not suit all readers, for those seeking a raw, emotional narrative, it leaves a lasting impression.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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I thought I had replied to thank you. I might have forgotten to save it. I have read some of your poems and like them. Always criticism is accepted. It doesn't have to be positive, I'm a big boy. Just make it honest so I can grow. Thanks.
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I thought I had replied to thank you. I might have forgotten to save it. I have read some of your poems and like them. Always criticism is accepted. It doesn't have to be positive, I'm a big boy. Just make it honest so I can grow. Thanks.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What an amazing story of survival. A man, at his utter last, reached out to help another. The woman died, the baby survived and the man...hopefully changed one way or another. A bond was formed beyond convention, but formed.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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What an amazing story of survival. A man, at his utter last, reached out to help another. The woman died, the baby survived and the man...hopefully changed one way or another. A bond was formed beyond convention, but formed.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Wow, I never thought of the experience changing him, but I guess it would. Thank you.
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You're welcome, and good luck and have fun on this site!
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
That was a great story I enjoyed from beginning to end, the end being the icing on the cake and a complete surprise. What a Christmas gift! Thank you.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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That was a great story I enjoyed from beginning to end, the end being the icing on the cake and a complete surprise. What a Christmas gift! Thank you.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
