Life, Death, Up, Down
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Comment from Mark Jackson
This is powerful writing and a compelling read. You made me feel for this lady you speak of fictional or not. I am giving it five stars. I do have a question for you if you would be so kind. Why did you choose to write on a fresh line every sentence? This approach is used in poetry. I thought that prose is arranged in grammatical sentences and paragraphs. I am not accusing you of being wrong. I am just seeking your opinion on this almost philosophical subject.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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This is powerful writing and a compelling read. You made me feel for this lady you speak of fictional or not. I am giving it five stars. I do have a question for you if you would be so kind. Why did you choose to write on a fresh line every sentence? This approach is used in poetry. I thought that prose is arranged in grammatical sentences and paragraphs. I am not accusing you of being wrong. I am just seeking your opinion on this almost philosophical subject.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your kind words. I just started awhile back, doing my writing that way, and now that is sort of my style. A reviewer once told me when speaking, every character gets their own line and I just continued. To myself, it seems easier to read.
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it is easy to read.
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I've written in other fashions as well. A lot depends on the unfolding of the story.
Comment from tfawcus
Fiction that reads like fact. How well you have described the feeling of guilt. How dispassionately you have described the horrific life experiences of this poor woman. A most excellent piece of writing.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Fiction that reads like fact. How well you have described the feeling of guilt. How dispassionately you have described the horrific life experiences of this poor woman. A most excellent piece of writing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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I'm very thankful for your fine words.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is very well done. I feel like I am the one that voted with the crowd. Remember the old saying, " All that has to happen for bad to succeed is for good folks to do nothing." Karen
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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This is very well done. I feel like I am the one that voted with the crowd. Remember the old saying, " All that has to happen for bad to succeed is for good folks to do nothing." Karen
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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I am so grateful for this review! Please continue to write!
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are you nuts or somethin? I love the story that's why I would like you to download it to me. I have already read it and reviewed it, I just want to renew it in my brain. So send it already. Up till today please.
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I will friend.
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Thanks for your always welcome words.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow! I just dropped in to read one of the contest entries and pick up $1.19 for viewing. Never dreaming I would be overcome by a story that might change my views on voting forever. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Wow! I just dropped in to read one of the contest entries and pick up $1.19 for viewing. Never dreaming I would be overcome by a story that might change my views on voting forever. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much! I hope not to disappoint you in the future.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We never know the sadness in another person's life and decisions are made and people lose their jobs or life changes and we know not how life changes just because of something as simple as this decision in your story, a poignant post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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We never know the sadness in another person's life and decisions are made and people lose their jobs or life changes and we know not how life changes just because of something as simple as this decision in your story, a poignant post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Master (or Mistress?) Poet. Your words mean much to me!
Comment from Ulla
This is so very poignant and very close to my heart and my innermost feelings.We must never forget what happened not so many years ago..but the world is moving on an not for the better. Thanks for sharing. Good luck. Ulla :)))
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This is so very poignant and very close to my heart and my innermost feelings.We must never forget what happened not so many years ago..but the world is moving on an not for the better. Thanks for sharing. Good luck. Ulla :)))
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! I'm glad there are so many readers on FS that feel like this, because the voting reflects other points of views. I write for God, not for earthly judges.
Comment from DeboraDyess
What a beautiful story. It's sad and poigent and I think we can all identify with peer pressure and a new, unsecured position. You manage to give highlight to a crime that affects our world still, and the aftereffects of it.
Best in the contest!
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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What a beautiful story. It's sad and poigent and I think we can all identify with peer pressure and a new, unsecured position. You manage to give highlight to a crime that affects our world still, and the aftereffects of it.
Best in the contest!
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much! I'm glad there are so many readers on FS that feel like this, because the voting reflects other points of views. I write for God, not for earthly judges.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I won't be able to get this poem out of my mind now! What a harrowing story! So many children actually did go through all this, some managed to escape but many were thrown into the death chamber. How human beings could do that to other human beings baffles me. I wish I could have seen them explain themselves to God. This was written so well, and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. I'll watch out for it. :) Sandra xxx
I've just voted for you! Now you go and vote for you.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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I won't be able to get this poem out of my mind now! What a harrowing story! So many children actually did go through all this, some managed to escape but many were thrown into the death chamber. How human beings could do that to other human beings baffles me. I wish I could have seen them explain themselves to God. This was written so well, and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. I'll watch out for it. :) Sandra xxx
I've just voted for you! Now you go and vote for you.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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A short while ago, in Bible Class, I was saying that I hoped there would never be an occasion like this ever again. Then the invasion of Israel occurred.
Comment from Jim Wile
This is a sad story on several fronts. It's obviously sad for the poor woman who got fired, but it's also sad that you lived in an environment in which you felt you had to go along to get along. That, to me, is a sad state of affairs if the tenure committee would have held it against you for not signing a petition to fire a cleaning woman.
Unless this was a frequent occurrence, I also wonder if perhaps the woman should have been given a warning before just firing her?
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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This is a sad story on several fronts. It's obviously sad for the poor woman who got fired, but it's also sad that you lived in an environment in which you felt you had to go along to get along. That, to me, is a sad state of affairs if the tenure committee would have held it against you for not signing a petition to fire a cleaning woman.
Unless this was a frequent occurrence, I also wonder if perhaps the woman should have been given a warning before just firing her?
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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This was loosely based on an incident in the 70's when I was teaching. As far as I know, the woman in that case wasn't given a fair warning.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. This is a thought provoking and emotional short. I can totally see some people going through something like this, focusing on who the person was, what they went through, and feeling bad about judging them on their poor work performance, instead of their identity. As if they did the wrong thing. But in today's world, perhaps that is.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Very interesting. This is a thought provoking and emotional short. I can totally see some people going through something like this, focusing on who the person was, what they went through, and feeling bad about judging them on their poor work performance, instead of their identity. As if they did the wrong thing. But in today's world, perhaps that is.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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I appreciate your very kind words and thoughts.