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A wrongly accused teacher reinvents his life

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I enjoyed reading. My main comment is I had a friend when we lived in Maryland her husband wanted to adopt her son, they were military so lived all over. The child's father lived someplace in the Midwest and could have cared less about the child. Anyway, before her husband could adopt the child, she had to post is in all the local newspapers in the Midwest, wait a certain period of time for a response and then still had to figure out how to contact him and get his permission, verbal, was all right. Just sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    Wow, that's a lot of work. I wonder how she was supposed to contact him if she had no idea where he was located. Seems mighty hit or miss with the newspapers. Even if the father got one of the newspapers the ad was in, it doesn't seem very likely he would read that particular page of the paper.
reply by barbara.wilkey on 09-Apr-2024
    She had to jump through hoops and it took almost a full year.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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That's good, Jim! I did get rather lost in all the tech speak. But I'm sure it was necessary to reveal the depth of scientific knowledge in this invention. Getting it patented was also good public information. I like the way Alan is very circumspect about everything and, in particular, when it comes to Warren, weighing up the good with the bad. This sends out a clear message in life not to jump to conclusion and possibly wrongly accuse, an experience only too painfully felt by Alan. Well done, Jim. Your story is rich in positivity with a hint of danger on the horizon. Thanks for sharing. Debbie

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    Thanks very much, Debbie. I loved your analysis of the situation here. Like you said, it's difficult for Alan to condemn Warren too much at this point. He could just be a socially awkward nerdy kind of guy, but he's wise to exert some caution as the women have advised him.
Comment from jmdg1954
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Well aside from the "nerd talk" as you put it, there were a number of good things happening in this chapter-
â?¢ the two love birds got married
â?¢ engineering brainstorming
â?¢ Ginnie met Abby
â?¢ Alan's anticipated adoption of Tommy
â?¢ some form of spyware to protect himself


Good stuff, my friend. The story is moving along nicely.

Cheers,
John

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    Thanks, John. Once again we have sort of a calm before the storm situation as we will soon move into some unfortunate events that you can probably tell are coming.
reply by jmdg1954 on 09-Apr-2024
    I can sense something in the air, but only the writer and his characters know what lies ahead.
Comment from BethShelby
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I'm glad Ginny and Abby hit is off. It is nice to have a step-son who likes his mother new husband enough to excited about being adopted by him. I know at some point soon there will be problems requarding Warren.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    I think Alan and Tommy see a lot of themselves in each other which has driven them quite close. Some more of this in the next chapter.

    If you knew Abby from my other novels, there's no way she would ever try to horn in on Alan and Ginnie's relationship. No need to worry there. Good instincts about Warren, though.
Comment from royowen
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I don't mind a bit of nerdish, after all, your major characters come my be good looking but they combine together to make up a stable of all round, cool, but yet nerds, I think there's a little nerdish in all of us. Beautifully written, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    Thanks, Roy. Yeah, I figured if that was the extent of it, no one would get too upset. I don't mind it when novels do that, as long as they don't go on for pages and pages about it, because you can just skim over those parts without losing anything.
reply by royowen on 09-Apr-2024
    Well done
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Okay, I'm convinced - bullet, Warren's brainpan, pre-emptive strike.
Nicely written.
Believe it or not, I got a patent on a baseball card game. It was a board game that utilized players' baseball cards.
Best wishes.

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 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    Well, that's really cool. Did you ever pursue it, and what came of it?

    Pre-emptive bullet to the brainpan, eh? Are you sure he isn't just a harmless, socially inept nerd?
reply by Wayne Fowler on 09-Apr-2024
    yup, sure.
    He's your antagonist now that what's 'er name PG girl is gone. (smiley face here)
    Cost too much to pursue the game, but I know every grandparent would have bought it for their baseball card grandson. (Do they still collect and play with them? I had the stats memorized for nearly everybody.)
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
    I used to collect them for a while too. Sounds like it might have been a fun game.