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Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Hades"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, as I've often said, I never read science fiction or fantasy, but I guess you've changed those thoughts for me. And for this being my favorite chapter so far, I'm anxious to see what happens next. :-) Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. Just wish I had the six it deserves.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Well, as I've often said, I never read science fiction or fantasy, but I guess you've changed those thoughts for me. And for this being my favorite chapter so far, I'm anxious to see what happens next. :-) Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. Just wish I had the six it deserves.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Hi Ric!! I'm so glad I've made a convert of you to fantasy, or at least for one book, lol. I'll take what I can get.
Thank you for the virtual 6. I'll take that anytime. I'm glad this was your favorite. I wrestled with it for days to keep it from being too dark, lol.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You give conquered Valley it's own life & its own power: She guessed Concorde Valley had given him, like it had her, a deeper sense of purpose than that which they had upon arrival." i am admittingly coming in cold on this story. But I'm wondering if there has been already a backstory for the Concord Valley. well expressed.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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You give conquered Valley it's own life & its own power: She guessed Concorde Valley had given him, like it had her, a deeper sense of purpose than that which they had upon arrival." i am admittingly coming in cold on this story. But I'm wondering if there has been already a backstory for the Concord Valley. well expressed.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Thank your reviewing, Liz. There is a lot of backstory on it. I have summed it up a bit in the author's notes, but it is a hidden valley you only get into by those who know the way. Sort of a world within a world. It has a sort of magical quality to it, without being a fairy world. It was once run by a Centaur, Phoebus, who is now a normal person, aside from being Immortal. I hope that helps. Echo came from outside the valley and has no known ties to the people inside.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Fascinating: "but it is a hidden valley you only get into by those who know the way. Sort of a world within a world." thank you it gives it more depth for me.
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Great. I'm glad it helped.
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***Smile***
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! This story took a very strange turn. The "enemy" turns out to be part of a love triangle around Echo. This is quite unexpected.
It makes sense the Echo urged Philip to leave and get Hannah to safety. And it's clear that Hades doesn't want to hurt Echo (although I wonder if that really can be said of a kidnapper like that). I like how you show his manipulative nature focusing on the area that would weaken Echo's relationship with Theo's family. It's like how the serpent put doubt into Eve's mind about God's commands and what she didn't know.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Oh my! This story took a very strange turn. The "enemy" turns out to be part of a love triangle around Echo. This is quite unexpected.
It makes sense the Echo urged Philip to leave and get Hannah to safety. And it's clear that Hades doesn't want to hurt Echo (although I wonder if that really can be said of a kidnapper like that). I like how you show his manipulative nature focusing on the area that would weaken Echo's relationship with Theo's family. It's like how the serpent put doubt into Eve's mind about God's commands and what she didn't know.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Hi Helen,
Thank you so much for the review. You really caught onto one of the threads I?m weaving into the storyline, that of Hades being deceptive and manipulative. He?s cunning and attractive, just as satan is described. He may find Echo a little harder to turn.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really interesting chapter as Echo bargains with Hades to keep from being forced to be his wife. He is rather reading more into the prophesy than is accurate as it doesn't say "he" must marry her, it just means a god must marry her. She has also discovered he fears Sleep and Death. I'm sure she's already plotting ways to use his fear.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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This is a really interesting chapter as Echo bargains with Hades to keep from being forced to be his wife. He is rather reading more into the prophesy than is accurate as it doesn't say "he" must marry her, it just means a god must marry her. She has also discovered he fears Sleep and Death. I'm sure she's already plotting ways to use his fear.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Hi Carol,
Thank you so much for the six stars. You are very generous!
He does twist the prophesy to his advantage. You are very observant to notice that point.
He does fear that which he cannot control.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from Begin Again
A well deserved six for this awesome chapter. You have me hooked now and I simply love the story and how it flows so smoothly. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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A well deserved six for this awesome chapter. You have me hooked now and I simply love the story and how it flows so smoothly. Great job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hi Carol, thank you so much for the lovely six stars and awesome comments! I appreciate your time and attention!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, step aside Echo, I'll have him! This is a wonderful read. I thought it was going to be more scary but the humour and derogatory remarks in your excellent dialogue conveyed more of a challenge in which Echo was confidently resisting the power of Hades. (Personally, I'd go with the flow:)) No wonder her horse name is Perseverance. She'd put the rest of us to shame! But how to get out of this one? At least Hades has someone he fears in Thanatos. The complexities of this world are becoming ever clearer. Some edits:
than that which they had upon arrival (a little better than using 'what')
In (her) periphery
irresist(i)ble
mesmer(is)ing
you had to have known that what you did to Hannah was not okay (no 'to' before 'known')
(e)nticing under different circumstances
stalked by psyc(h)opaths
dismis(s)ively
I always enjoy this fantasy story with its extra enriching layer of mythology. Thank you so much, Rhonda, for another excellent and thoroughly enjoyable read! Take care Debbie xo
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Wow, step aside Echo, I'll have him! This is a wonderful read. I thought it was going to be more scary but the humour and derogatory remarks in your excellent dialogue conveyed more of a challenge in which Echo was confidently resisting the power of Hades. (Personally, I'd go with the flow:)) No wonder her horse name is Perseverance. She'd put the rest of us to shame! But how to get out of this one? At least Hades has someone he fears in Thanatos. The complexities of this world are becoming ever clearer. Some edits:
than that which they had upon arrival (a little better than using 'what')
In (her) periphery
irresist(i)ble
mesmer(is)ing
you had to have known that what you did to Hannah was not okay (no 'to' before 'known')
(e)nticing under different circumstances
stalked by psyc(h)opaths
dismis(s)ively
I always enjoy this fantasy story with its extra enriching layer of mythology. Thank you so much, Rhonda, for another excellent and thoroughly enjoyable read! Take care Debbie xo
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Debbie,
Thank you so much for the six stars and wonderful comments. Yeah, Ol? Hades is a hottie, but he does live underground, lol. 😝
I?m glad it didn?t come off too dark. That?s what took me so long to post. I kept tweaking it until Hades seemed a little less creepy, hehe.
I?ll make those changes! I knew there would be issues as I just had to quit reading it as I?d make more changes.
Thanks again,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda...Sunny the Avenger Cat for Good! And what a prize the Hades is, any girl would feel lucky to be forced to marry him, great way to build a successful marriage!
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda...Sunny the Avenger Cat for Good! And what a prize the Hades is, any girl would feel lucky to be forced to marry him, great way to build a successful marriage!
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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I?ve been in worse ones, lol!
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Ha!
Comment from Sally Law
Oh my gracious goodness! This sent chills up my spine. Y'all was used, and I am so glad. Now for some Georgia whop-ass! This hades is good looking but really bad. Theo better hurry in! She's going to have to touch him! Aaaahhh!!!
Exceptional and well worth the wait. Love, love it!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Rhonda, and love and blessings across the bridge,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Oh my gracious goodness! This sent chills up my spine. Y'all was used, and I am so glad. Now for some Georgia whop-ass! This hades is good looking but really bad. Theo better hurry in! She's going to have to touch him! Aaaahhh!!!
Exceptional and well worth the wait. Love, love it!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Rhonda, and love and blessings across the bridge,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hi Sally, thank you so much for the lovely six star review, from the lovely Sally. I'm glad you noticed the y'all, lol. Gotta throw it in now and then.
I'm glad you liked the chapter. I kept tweaking it to keep it from coming across too dark, lol. I wanted the chills, but not too many, lol.
Thank so much, and much, much love,
Rhonda
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You are so welcome! No need to tweak it for me. Not too scary, I am a drama queen, you know. Wink, wink. It was throughlly enjoyable. I just know Theo will not let anything happen to his girl. Fantastic writing. I look forward to the next chapter.
Love you!
Your biggest fan,
Sal XOs
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Awwww, you?re so sweet! Unfortunately, Theo is rather tied up at the moment. Good thing he comes from a big family, lol.
Much love from your biggest fan!
Comment from royowen
Your grasp of Greek mythology is very good Rhonda, the Gods are more wicked than humans, and the ancients have cleverly moulded as an evil, un-cohesive group, no more omniscient than humans in reality, just love, but Echo has been tricked, the Gods are no more the equivalent of Satan, with some squabbling for leadership and the lust for power, whereas God is the only one fit, that's why we can rule IN, but not apart from Him, what a good God we serve. And you're clever story will have meld it with that. Beautifully written Rhonda, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Your grasp of Greek mythology is very good Rhonda, the Gods are more wicked than humans, and the ancients have cleverly moulded as an evil, un-cohesive group, no more omniscient than humans in reality, just love, but Echo has been tricked, the Gods are no more the equivalent of Satan, with some squabbling for leadership and the lust for power, whereas God is the only one fit, that's why we can rule IN, but not apart from Him, what a good God we serve. And you're clever story will have meld it with that. Beautifully written Rhonda, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Roy, thank you for the six star review, my friend. I have studied Greek Mythology quite a bit, and study it as myths. I try to keep it Christian, and even the Immortals in the story will be that way, except Hades, of course. I know it doesn't make sense, but I am just trying to use it as a myth. Thank you for caring and sharing,
Take care,
Rhonda
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He has the same vanity as Satan...and beautifully.
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That?s exactly what I was getting at. The most beautiful of the angels, and the biggest deceiver!
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That's right
Comment from Douglas Goff
Great characters. They are interesting. The dialogue flowed nicely and was believable.
Suggestion:
You did use the word 'said' a lot. Try sink gasped, moaned, etc. just to break that up.
Interesting and enjoyable.
D
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Great characters. They are interesting. The dialogue flowed nicely and was believable.
Suggestion:
You did use the word 'said' a lot. Try sink gasped, moaned, etc. just to break that up.
Interesting and enjoyable.
D
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Hi Douglas!! Thank you for the sweet review. I appreciate it so much. I'll be honest, I took a class where they taught us to use any word other than "said" and then I was told by others that "said" is the word to use. I'll never get it right, lol.
I appreciate you,
Rhonda
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Ha! My editor said it is like pepper. You need just the right amount!
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Good point! After having been blasted for it, I always feel guilty using anything else. It?s certainly my inclination to switch them up!