What We See
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Comment from jmdg1954
Hmph... what are they to do till dinner time? I heard the fishing was good at Kalamazoo Lake. Could that be it?
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Is it champing at the bit or chomping at the bit?
Good chapter, moving everything along nicely.
The jury is still out on Warren, so we'll see.
Enjoy your weekend.
John
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Hmph... what are they to do till dinner time? I heard the fishing was good at Kalamazoo Lake. Could that be it?
Minor point-
Is it champing at the bit or chomping at the bit?
Good chapter, moving everything along nicely.
The jury is still out on Warren, so we'll see.
Enjoy your weekend.
John
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks, John. I think he brought the chess board with him for some afternoon delight.
The original expression which came from what horses do is "champing," but "chomping" is also used by some.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ooh, what a romantic you are, Jim! Remind me, what were they there to do?:)) As ever, your story flows along skilfully with pace and interest. I like the way you remind the reader of the time periods which is always important for me to know. And, though you break in the middle to switch scenes, this is all done without any disruption to the narrative. Well done! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Ooh, what a romantic you are, Jim! Remind me, what were they there to do?:)) As ever, your story flows along skilfully with pace and interest. I like the way you remind the reader of the time periods which is always important for me to know. And, though you break in the middle to switch scenes, this is all done without any disruption to the narrative. Well done! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks very much, Debbiel.
So far, people have suggested fishing and Parcheesi. I thought maybe chess for fun.
Comment from lancellot
Well, it seems David's life is progressing and at this point in the story he has found love and gotten engaged. I would reconsider, telling us he would propose marriage in the middle of the chapter. It spoils the rest or the ending, as we know Ginnie will say yes.
Also, an employee who accumulates gambling debts is a bad sign.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Well, it seems David's life is progressing and at this point in the story he has found love and gotten engaged. I would reconsider, telling us he would propose marriage in the middle of the chapter. It spoils the rest or the ending, as we know Ginnie will say yes.
Also, an employee who accumulates gambling debts is a bad sign.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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That's a good point about not giving away the surprise. I'll think about rewriting that part.
Good instincts about the gambling debt.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am pretty sure Tommy will be happy with this new arrangement. I can't imagine he wouldn't be. I enjoyed reading this post. Of course, I'm a romantic at heart.
The next night, after dinner, (The following night)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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I am pretty sure Tommy will be happy with this new arrangement. I can't imagine he wouldn't be. I enjoyed reading this post. Of course, I'm a romantic at heart.
The next night, after dinner, (The following night)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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I was pretty sure you'd like this part, Barbara. We'll soon see how Tommy reacts to this new arrangement.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
last sentence/ paragraph three. Even knowing you want to complete it what is it you are speaking of here, the [prototype (has three t's)] or the larger tool???
And what was it you had come to do? Aaah. It took a second to clear the numbers {A Double Shot of Demented Love - have you read it? Only fair since I read yours} from my mind. Congratulations!
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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last sentence/ paragraph three. Even knowing you want to complete it what is it you are speaking of here, the [prototype (has three t's)] or the larger tool???
And what was it you had come to do? Aaah. It took a second to clear the numbers {A Double Shot of Demented Love - have you read it? Only fair since I read yours} from my mind. Congratulations!
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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I guess the third t must be silent like the p in pterodactyl, thus making it ptrototype?
Haven't read A DS of DL yet but I will today.
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??? I see I misspelled the word but still found your retort electrifying
Comment from Wayne Fowler
And what would that be? A Parcheesi marathon?
I'm surprised that Warren made it five months without issue, especially with the tease you gave about his interest in Alan's secret project.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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And what would that be? A Parcheesi marathon?
I'm surprised that Warren made it five months without issue, especially with the tease you gave about his interest in Alan's secret project.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Big smiley face here! Good one.
I guess Warren's been doing okay at the poker table. His actions seem to be governed by his fate there. I'll say this much: He's going to start losing soon.
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Money problems plus access - a bad equation.