Right in the Eye
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Right in the Eye, ch 5"The adventures and reaches of people with a divine
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Comment from jim vecchio
Glad I saved that star! This story has the reader engrossed, sand I am glad it seems Suzanne is truly on the level. Wonder what will happen to Slim next. Hope you can keep up the momentum!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Glad I saved that star! This story has the reader engrossed, sand I am glad it seems Suzanne is truly on the level. Wonder what will happen to Slim next. Hope you can keep up the momentum!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Thank you. I hope so too!
And thank you for the six stars!
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I'm looking forward to Slim's future!
Comment from papa55mike
Now that's the way to travel, by the seat of your pants and wondering what's next. I love the dialogue in his head. Please check youR paragraph breaks in the first few. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Now that's the way to travel, by the seat of your pants and wondering what's next. I love the dialogue in his head. Please check youR paragraph breaks in the first few. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Thank you. And thanks for the heads up.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story continues to be enjoyable. I love how you share it through his eyes as he navigates the world after emerging from a long period of unconsciousness. The descriptions are strong. The dialect feels authentic. It's enjoyable to experience the disorientation and discovery alongside him.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Your story continues to be enjoyable. I love how you share it through his eyes as he navigates the world after emerging from a long period of unconsciousness. The descriptions are strong. The dialect feels authentic. It's enjoyable to experience the disorientation and discovery alongside him.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
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Thank you. I was hoping that the story line would work. Yay!
