Feeding the Ducks
A Lyle and Rufus tale.34 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
If it is up to me, you just won the contest hands down. Your ability to deliver authentic conversation with word choice and accent is remarkable and was a delight to read. Well done! I don't have six stars, but would give you a seven.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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If it is up to me, you just won the contest hands down. Your ability to deliver authentic conversation with word choice and accent is remarkable and was a delight to read. Well done! I don't have six stars, but would give you a seven.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you Ginda, I'm so pleased you liked this and consider it worthy of winning. I liked you comments.
Beth
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An awesome entry for the Dialogue Only Writing Contest. This was so much fun to read. I wasn't sure if the twang writing would ruin it for me or not but it actually made it believeable. This was humorous and charming. I feel like Rufus and Lyle could be found right now sitting in the local park feeding those ducks and thinking up names! Very well written. Good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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An awesome entry for the Dialogue Only Writing Contest. This was so much fun to read. I wasn't sure if the twang writing would ruin it for me or not but it actually made it believeable. This was humorous and charming. I feel like Rufus and Lyle could be found right now sitting in the local park feeding those ducks and thinking up names! Very well written. Good luck.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you Marilyn. I've known people who act and talk like these two guys. I'm glad the twang didn't ruin in for you.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL I couldn't help but laugh at these two, Rufus and Lyle. Their dialogue sounded completely natural for two ornery old farts. I have known gentlemen like this. I enjoyed reading this contest entry and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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LOL I couldn't help but laugh at these two, Rufus and Lyle. Their dialogue sounded completely natural for two ornery old farts. I have known gentlemen like this. I enjoyed reading this contest entry and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you Barbara. I think a lot of us have known characters like these two.
Beth
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Feeding the Ducks, sounds like the habit of feeding ducks might well lead to a free-roam duck meat opportunity that feeds both the boys bank accounts and the happy public.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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This story, Feeding the Ducks, sounds like the habit of feeding ducks might well lead to a free-roam duck meat opportunity that feeds both the boys bank accounts and the happy public.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you Bill. I got a good chuckle from you comment.
Beth
Comment from Jeano
Love this dialogue only story. It reminds me of two men who meet at the dog park every day and sit on the bench while the dogs run and play. One doesn't have a dog to take to the park so he borrows one from his neighbor. They talk politics and religion, they're nice but I steer clear of those topics with them. I'm thinking you might have a winner with this one.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Love this dialogue only story. It reminds me of two men who meet at the dog park every day and sit on the bench while the dogs run and play. One doesn't have a dog to take to the park so he borrows one from his neighbor. They talk politics and religion, they're nice but I steer clear of those topics with them. I'm thinking you might have a winner with this one.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the great review. I imagine you might find characters like these in a lot of places. I feel like I know them.
Beth
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You're welcome.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Nice work. Dialogue is a toughy for me. All dialogue! The horror! People tell me to try since there are no need for tags. I am mainly a narrator, that is my comfort zone. Good writing here. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Nice work. Dialogue is a toughy for me. All dialogue! The horror! People tell me to try since there are no need for tags. I am mainly a narrator, that is my comfort zone. Good writing here. Karen :-)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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There is nothing wrong with narration. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
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:-)
Comment from Jim Wile
I really enjoyed the gentle humor, the commentary on conditions today, and the obvious friendship of these two old guys partaking in their daily routine, Beth. It's nice to have a friend to share your experiences with and joke around with. Have you written about these old guys before?
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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I really enjoyed the gentle humor, the commentary on conditions today, and the obvious friendship of these two old guys partaking in their daily routine, Beth. It's nice to have a friend to share your experiences with and joke around with. Have you written about these old guys before?
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you Jim. I have used them a couple of times before. Someone brought the picture to a writing club I was in for us to make a story. I found them interesting. I appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
Beth.
This is perfect and I'm sure the contest winner.
The dialogue is spot on and felt like I was sitting on the next bench beside them. The story is 100% believable as well.
Phew, well done!
John
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Beth.
This is perfect and I'm sure the contest winner.
The dialogue is spot on and felt like I was sitting on the next bench beside them. The story is 100% believable as well.
Phew, well done!
John
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much John. I'm glad you like this one. When I saw this picture, I knew I wanted to write about this pair. I used it a couple of times before. I really appreciate the stars.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
Very well written. Totally engaging, with what sounded to my Aussie ears as authentic speech patterns, and humoorous exchanges between the two. I enjoyed the final suggestion, a super twist. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Very well written. Totally engaging, with what sounded to my Aussie ears as authentic speech patterns, and humoorous exchanges between the two. I enjoyed the final suggestion, a super twist. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you Wendy. I really appreciate the review and comments. I so glad you like it.
Beth
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Thank you Wendy. I really appreciate the review and comments. I so glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An inventive and fun conversation between these two elderly men struggling with the cost of living and thinking of ways to make more money! Feeding the ducks is always a generous act and I buy the proper duck feed for them as bread is no good for the ducks, a fun post Beth, I love the inventive language and I reckon this is a winner for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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An inventive and fun conversation between these two elderly men struggling with the cost of living and thinking of ways to make more money! Feeding the ducks is always a generous act and I buy the proper duck feed for them as bread is no good for the ducks, a fun post Beth, I love the inventive language and I reckon this is a winner for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thank you Dolly, I'm glad you like my little dialogue only story. I appreciate you nice comments.
Beth
