Ballad of the Broken Hearted
Sometimes there is regret that comes with a right decision.15 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem beautifully captures complex emotions. I felt regret, longing, and introspection. The imagery you use, such as feeling adrift and the irony of a clear sky is beautiful. I could picture this all in my head. Overall, your poem captures the complexities of human emotion so well. Great job!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Your poem beautifully captures complex emotions. I felt regret, longing, and introspection. The imagery you use, such as feeling adrift and the irony of a clear sky is beautiful. I could picture this all in my head. Overall, your poem captures the complexities of human emotion so well. Great job!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your feedback! I enjoy sharing what I write :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I enjoyed your poem for the Emotions contest, Locust. The irony felt when the sky is blue and bright, the sadness at the ending of a relationship, a friendship comes through well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed your poem for the Emotions contest, Locust. The irony felt when the sky is blue and bright, the sadness at the ending of a relationship, a friendship comes through well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you friend!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem for the challenge. You use good imagery words and emotion. Many readers will relate to this. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This is an excellent poem for the challenge. You use good imagery words and emotion. Many readers will relate to this. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Colorado Owl
This feels and sounds like ballads from centuries ago, and the reader can feel the pall of pain, intensified because the writer feels the pain is self-inflicted. The only thing that seems not to fit is the phrase "oddly grief ". Was this a misprint or did the author intend to use an adverb to modify the noun?
The writer does an excellent job of conveying the pain, and that a lesson that was learned. Well done.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This feels and sounds like ballads from centuries ago, and the reader can feel the pall of pain, intensified because the writer feels the pain is self-inflicted. The only thing that seems not to fit is the phrase "oddly grief ". Was this a misprint or did the author intend to use an adverb to modify the noun?
The writer does an excellent job of conveying the pain, and that a lesson that was learned. Well done.
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review! "Oddly grief" was intentional. It's not 'proper grammar' I admit lol. I was trying to convey how sometimes grief doesn't make sense, and I felt the clear inaccuracy of the word choice mirrored that. But it may not work that way when being read so thank you for your feedback!
Comment from royowen
Yes, I sometimes wonder if these collective reasons for the detestation within could be overcome by the centring of out thoughts on the misfortune of others, they tell me that's a great way to overcome, beautifully written, good luck, good entry, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Yes, I sometimes wonder if these collective reasons for the detestation within could be overcome by the centring of out thoughts on the misfortune of others, they tell me that's a great way to overcome, beautifully written, good luck, good entry, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your thoughts! :)
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Most welcome
