Front Line Runner
In World War 1 European battlefields were ferocious.24 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Wise is the leader who has been blessed with the ability to listen to, show respect for, and accept the wisdom of those under his command. The maturity of such a leader can be not only life saving, it may very well serve to turn the tide in battle.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
Wise is the leader who has been blessed with the ability to listen to, show respect for, and accept the wisdom of those under his command. The maturity of such a leader can be not only life saving, it may very well serve to turn the tide in battle.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. So very true about a leader who can listen and respect those under his command. There are probably not enough of them. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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I was fortunate tow follow two outstanding leaders. Unfortunately they were not the only ones I had to follow.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What a beautiful way to honor your grandfather's memory. You created believable dialogue that flows naturally while giving us a sense of the bigger picture. Well Done!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
What a beautiful way to honor your grandfather's memory. You created believable dialogue that flows naturally while giving us a sense of the bigger picture. Well Done!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Ginda,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the story/tribute. He was a great man. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
World War l was more horrible than any other war because there were so many new ways to kill soldiers. This is a good dialogue and makes it clear who is who. It might have been nice if you could explain a bit more about how a front line runner survived, but it isn't necessary. I'm just curious if your grandfather left something to explain that.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
World War l was more horrible than any other war because there were so many new ways to kill soldiers. This is a good dialogue and makes it clear who is who. It might have been nice if you could explain a bit more about how a front line runner survived, but it isn't necessary. I'm just curious if your grandfather left something to explain that.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thanks Carol for your review. My grandfather when he did speak about the War always said " I couldn't even catch a cold" when referring to his luck. Whilst he was gassed,, he never suffered a gunshot wound. Quite remarkable.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is so familiar with war vets that they rarely speak of their amazingly brave achievements! You captured this courage so well in your dialogue only contest entry and the last punch line is superb in its matter-of-fact response. Flawless content. Well done, Barry, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
This is so familiar with war vets that they rarely speak of their amazingly brave achievements! You captured this courage so well in your dialogue only contest entry and the last punch line is superb in its matter-of-fact response. Flawless content. Well done, Barry, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Debbie,
Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, war veterans rarely talk about their bravery. But brave they were. I was lucky, my grandfather came home. Many did not.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am terrible at dialogue. I mess up the quotes, change tenses, it is hard for me. You did this well. Kudos to your grandfather, they did miraculous things without all the severe trauma we see in our military.
We train them to maim and kill, then send them home to their families without untraining shakedown time.Karen
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
I am terrible at dialogue. I mess up the quotes, change tenses, it is hard for me. You did this well. Kudos to your grandfather, they did miraculous things without all the severe trauma we see in our military.
We train them to maim and kill, then send them home to their families without untraining shakedown time.Karen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Karen,
Thanks for your review and I am glad you enjoyed the story. No real twist in this one. I was lucky that he came home. Many did not. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry
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You are welcome. Karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very well written.
Good way to avoid being shot is to be fast.
A better way is to enjoy Divine favor and protection.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
Very well written.
Good way to avoid being shot is to be fast.
A better way is to enjoy Divine favor and protection.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Wayne,
Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, grandad had both fast feet and divine protection. He was sort of made for the job. Most importantly he came back.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.;
Comment from Heather Bagley
This is a very nice story, and very comprehensively told given the limitations. I spotted a few times where there was a space between the quotation mark and the opening word, and "You do." Should have a question mark instead of a period (5th paragraph). Lastly, there's a point in the 8th paragraph where it says "Although,there" where it's missing a space (after the comma).
Don't feel too bad about it, absolutely nothing wrong with the storytelling, just occasional typos. I make them plenty.
Good luck in your contest!
~Heather
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
This is a very nice story, and very comprehensively told given the limitations. I spotted a few times where there was a space between the quotation mark and the opening word, and "You do." Should have a question mark instead of a period (5th paragraph). Lastly, there's a point in the 8th paragraph where it says "Although,there" where it's missing a space (after the comma).
Don't feel too bad about it, absolutely nothing wrong with the storytelling, just occasional typos. I make them plenty.
Good luck in your contest!
~Heather
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Heather,
Thanks for your review and your noting of some punctuation errors. I appreciate it very much. Glad you enjoyed the story. Have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Begin Again
Most infantry that faced the daily horrors in our wars rarely speak of it. It's a dark place they would rather not relive again. To them, their bravery was nothing to brag about, taking lives. Your dialogue entry was superb and painted a picture of how things were. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
Most infantry that faced the daily horrors in our wars rarely speak of it. It's a dark place they would rather not relive again. To them, their bravery was nothing to brag about, taking lives. Your dialogue entry was superb and painted a picture of how things were. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Carol,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. My grandfather typified those who returned. A lot of dark memories, rarely spoken about.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I was amazed to know this is a true story about your grandfather. All of the dialogue is realistic and includes adequate background descriptions that allows the reader to envision the era, scenes, and danger. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
I was amazed to know this is a true story about your grandfather. All of the dialogue is realistic and includes adequate background descriptions that allows the reader to envision the era, scenes, and danger. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, my grandfather survived a horrific war. God was certainly by his side. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Julie Helms
This is an excellent entry for the dialogue only contest. And I learned something, I never knew of Frontline runners. In fact, World War I in general is just not known by many anymore. It seems overshadowed by World War II. Your story gave an excellent flavor of what it was like to be involved at the front lines and was easy to follow who was saying what. Thanks so much for sharing! Julie.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
This is an excellent entry for the dialogue only contest. And I learned something, I never knew of Frontline runners. In fact, World War I in general is just not known by many anymore. It seems overshadowed by World War II. Your story gave an excellent flavor of what it was like to be involved at the front lines and was easy to follow who was saying what. Thanks so much for sharing! Julie.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Julie,
Thanks for your review. I am glad you enjoyed the story, My grandfather was a quiet man. He faced many horrific scenes but he retained an easy going nature and humor. I am glad he made it back.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry