Life's Twisted Road
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Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad that Audrey and Jackson are getting back together. I was confused by the "secretly crossing her fingers" because I know sometimes people lie while crossing their fingers to somehow negate the lie. I hope she's sincere because Jackson is a good guy.
Now Nat is not a good person but she might a have a smidge of conscience. I like how you structured the storyline to bring us back to where this started and how Isabella ended up in the hospital.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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I'm glad that Audrey and Jackson are getting back together. I was confused by the "secretly crossing her fingers" because I know sometimes people lie while crossing their fingers to somehow negate the lie. I hope she's sincere because Jackson is a good guy.
Now Nat is not a good person but she might a have a smidge of conscience. I like how you structured the storyline to bring us back to where this started and how Isabella ended up in the hospital.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Helen
In this case, crossing her fingers meant she was hoping for the best....which is what she got.
I hoped that people would catch on that the story was and is coming full circle. I don't know if that was the right way to do it, but it seems to have worked. Two final chapters are written and waiting and then it's all over. Guess that means since my writing therapy has taken hold, I will be looking for another crime to solve. LOL
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
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I'm glad you are giving people warning. Novelists tend to give a heads up of how many more chapters as reviewers save their sixes for the final chapter. You did a great job with this book, Carol! I'll be busy with grandchildren this weekend so my reviewing will be slow.
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Oh have fun and enjoy the time you have together. You've been great and the story will be waiting for you. Thanks so much, Helen.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
This is another well written chapter in your book, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. Your sentence structure and your paragraphing is very well done and it makes it for an easy read. May you have a very blessed day and God bless. Patricia .
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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This is another well written chapter in your book, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. Your sentence structure and your paragraphing is very well done and it makes it for an easy read. May you have a very blessed day and God bless. Patricia .
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Patricia, I thank you for the rave review, but did you mean to give me a four. It's okay if you did, but I would appreciate knowing what you feel I need to fix. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I hope Isabella will be alright. Maybe, Natasha does love her in her own way. It seems she's showing a little regret. I sure hope so. I do like this story and can't wait to read more.
treasures to the floor as she continued to berate her. "Don't you die, you ugly old bitch. (comma after 'her,')
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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I hope Isabella will be alright. Maybe, Natasha does love her in her own way. It seems she's showing a little regret. I sure hope so. I do like this story and can't wait to read more.
treasures to the floor as she continued to berate her. "Don't you die, you ugly old bitch. (comma after 'her,')
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Punctuation adjusted. Thank you!
Two more chapters to go...written and waiting. I hope people will be satisfied with the ending. I know I am. It was good therapy to write again. Thanks for all your support, Barbara, It's always appreciated.
Smiles, Carol
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You are talented. Have you given up on by buddy, Garth??
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Oh my goodness.... that's funny, because I was thinking about joining the contest about writing a book and the thought of a cowboy passed through my mind. Of course, I though, "Barbara would like that one." Honest to goodness and thirty minutes later you are asking me about him. I need to finish the one I started before I disappeared, but I'm not ready yet. It needs to be something different... not to say our cowboy couldn't be in something different. LOL
Love it! You're the best, Barbara! Thanks for making me smile.
Always, Carol
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I've missed my favorite Cowboy. You know I had a crush on him. LOL
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I know! That's why when I think of Garth, I think of you. LOL
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, now she'd done it. It's not so good when you think you might have killed someone. Now she has her father and grandmother on her concience, that's if she has one, of course! The social services aren't interested in whether her father is inocent or not. What a terrible place to put herself in. Great chapter, Carol. Well done, Love and hugs Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Oh, now she'd done it. It's not so good when you think you might have killed someone. Now she has her father and grandmother on her concience, that's if she has one, of course! The social services aren't interested in whether her father is inocent or not. What a terrible place to put herself in. Great chapter, Carol. Well done, Love and hugs Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Sandra.
Hope this March 1st finds you doing well. I've wrapped up the story and will post one chapter tomorrow and the finale on Sunday. I have to earn some more money in order to post...or use my own. I'm anxious to bring closure to this, but it's been good therapy. I hope the ending is appreciated and enjoyed.
Take care... Smiles, hugs, and much more love, Carol
Comment from Mrs. KT
Woah, Carol,
What a scene between Natasha and Isabella! So very painful to read of a young woman so unhinged, selfish, and angry to talk and treat her grandmother in the manner she did.
And of course, the cliff-hanger: Is Isabella now deceased?
Looking forward to the next chapter... I think! (Yikes!)
Much enjoyed,
Warmly,
diane
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Woah, Carol,
What a scene between Natasha and Isabella! So very painful to read of a young woman so unhinged, selfish, and angry to talk and treat her grandmother in the manner she did.
And of course, the cliff-hanger: Is Isabella now deceased?
Looking forward to the next chapter... I think! (Yikes!)
Much enjoyed,
Warmly,
diane
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Diane.... I've finished the book and there are two chapters. I'll post Chap 32 tomorrow and the ending on Sunday. I have to earn some more money first. The ending is spine chilling I think, but I hope everyone enjoys it and understand the emotions involved. I appreciate your comments. It means a lot to me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Well at least I know you didn't die. Of course I can't guarantee you won't let the fictitious Isabella die. Was you granddaughter really that disrespectable? There was a time my youngest daughter was almost that bad but she ourgrew and is my most loving daughter now. I think you indicated Gabby is like another grandaughter, but are they from the same family. I thought there was more than one child in the family, with the granddaughter that accusedf her father. This is great writing. I sorry you are cut off from this family but until things settle down, I would think it is best for you even though it hurts.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Well at least I know you didn't die. Of course I can't guarantee you won't let the fictitious Isabella die. Was you granddaughter really that disrespectable? There was a time my youngest daughter was almost that bad but she ourgrew and is my most loving daughter now. I think you indicated Gabby is like another grandaughter, but are they from the same family. I thought there was more than one child in the family, with the granddaughter that accusedf her father. This is great writing. I sorry you are cut off from this family but until things settle down, I would think it is best for you even though it hurts.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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The two girls are based on two different girls from two different families. Yes, there was a younger sister in the original family. And to answer your question about disrespect... it is much worse, but I couldn't make myself write all of it. One chapter of swearing was enough. I've put my heart into this story and shed a lot of tears, but it's helped me a lot. I've finished the book..Chap 32 (Sat.) and 33 (Sun). I hope people can see and feel the emotions entwined with the words. Thank you so very much, Beth.
Have a great day! Smiles, hugs, and much love, Carol
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I can certainly understand the tears. Those words were designed to hurt to the maximum. Surely someone uttering things like that to their grandmother such surely feel some shame and remorse. If they nothing they may have a mental problem. Where does that kind of anger come from?
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She's been in and out of hospitals for a week at a time. And she sees a therapist and a psychiatrist. In the beginning I went with them, but the appointments were a sham. The all treated her like they were her friends. Collecting money for what? I think the anger in her mom and dad have played a big part, but my daughter tells me it's only words and they don't mean anything. They do to me!
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Words have the power to do some serion damage. My dad cursed and swore and threated to kill people, and now I believe they were only word and he would never have been physically violent, but as child you believe what you hear and it is frightening.
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Amen!
Comment from derek campbell
Wow such an amazing writer you are I love everything about it your really good I Can't wait to see more of your amazing skills but next time try and express your feeling a bit more deeper on certain areas but other then that really good stuff can't wait to read more of your magic keep it up
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Wow such an amazing writer you are I love everything about it your really good I Can't wait to see more of your amazing skills but next time try and express your feeling a bit more deeper on certain areas but other then that really good stuff can't wait to read more of your magic keep it up
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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I think there was a communication error here, Derek. Thanks for trying to say something about my writing.
Comment from Julie Helms
Wow. An Itsy-bitsy piece of humanity shows up in Natasha, in the last sentence! Huge tension and great writing for this chapter. I'm glad Jackson and Audrey got their stuff sorted. Can't wait to find out how this ends with Natasha. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Wow. An Itsy-bitsy piece of humanity shows up in Natasha, in the last sentence! Huge tension and great writing for this chapter. I'm glad Jackson and Audrey got their stuff sorted. Can't wait to find out how this ends with Natasha. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Julie
The end is near...It's finished. Now I need to gather enough money to post. Chap 32 on Sat and Chap 33 on Sun. I am anxious to see what people think as it wraps up.
Smiles, Carol