Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "White Legs"Young girl with special abilities.
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well, well... a friend who is a boy might not be so bad after all. And what 'is' it about Lucille Dixon anyway? What makes 'her' so special?
Nicely written chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Well, well... a friend who is a boy might not be so bad after all. And what 'is' it about Lucille Dixon anyway? What makes 'her' so special?
Nicely written chapter.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I had more boys as friends growing up. I was a tomboy (who secretly played with Barbies). I had a lot of Heddy's thoughts running through my head. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another chapter in which you've excelled, Gretchen, capturing all those simple pleasures and perplexing thoughts of childhood. Your scenes are so vivid and engaging I could read on forever. Love the rather quaint dialogue between the two children and the emerging bond. Also, the subtle humour and embracing descriptive detail. Small edit "arms length" could probably do with an apostrophe - arm(')s; "out grow" - outgrew? Thank you so much for an excellent read! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Another chapter in which you've excelled, Gretchen, capturing all those simple pleasures and perplexing thoughts of childhood. Your scenes are so vivid and engaging I could read on forever. Love the rather quaint dialogue between the two children and the emerging bond. Also, the subtle humour and embracing descriptive detail. Small edit "arms length" could probably do with an apostrophe - arm(')s; "out grow" - outgrew? Thank you so much for an excellent read! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you for this nice review and encouraging comments and the edits. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this story. Saying he was about as exciting as grass of buttermilk was creative an funny. I've never heard that one before. I like how she start wondering what's special about this boys girlfriend. It seems she didn't have the horrible time she thought she would.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed this story. Saying he was about as exciting as grass of buttermilk was creative an funny. I've never heard that one before. I like how she start wondering what's special about this boys girlfriend. It seems she didn't have the horrible time she thought she would.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this and I thought it would be natural for Heddy to wonder why a guy like Lester wouldn't want her as a girlfriend. Lol . Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I enjoyed this one, Gretchen. I'm glad Heddy is going to be nice to Lester, he desperately needs a friend, living with that awful aunt must be horrid. Let's hope that aunt lets him out to play with Heddy every day. Great chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed this one, Gretchen. I'm glad Heddy is going to be nice to Lester, he desperately needs a friend, living with that awful aunt must be horrid. Let's hope that aunt lets him out to play with Heddy every day. Great chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Sandra. I'm so happy you are still enjoying this. Thank you for such an encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
If she spends time with other people like she does with Lester, she will slowly outgro Nonni. Our reality is whatever we think it is. It sure surprises me that more people do not realize this. We create our own world, by the choices we make. The problem is, that we hide. We hide from the consequences of our choices. We refuse to see that our own bad behavior creates the hell we live in. And ,it is far easier to pretend we can do nothing, than rise up and face the mess we made. Boy, you sure made me think about things today. Karen
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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If she spends time with other people like she does with Lester, she will slowly outgro Nonni. Our reality is whatever we think it is. It sure surprises me that more people do not realize this. We create our own world, by the choices we make. The problem is, that we hide. We hide from the consequences of our choices. We refuse to see that our own bad behavior creates the hell we live in. And ,it is far easier to pretend we can do nothing, than rise up and face the mess we made. Boy, you sure made me think about things today. Karen
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Karen. I'm glad you are still enjoying this story. Thank you for this encouraging review. Gretchen
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Comment from royowen
What a lovely ending, it starts off with Heddy being fairly indifferent to Lester graduating to being a little contemptuous, and finally seemingly thinking it could be an asset to a boy as a friend well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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What a lovely ending, it starts off with Heddy being fairly indifferent to Lester graduating to being a little contemptuous, and finally seemingly thinking it could be an asset to a boy as a friend well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. Heddy will come to treasure her friendship with Lester. She will need it. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like these two have made a fine connection and you brought the scene to life with your skilful descriptions here Gretchen, it is always a pleasure to read your work. We have an odd climate in Tenerife and it disintegrates shoes! I put on a pair of sandals I hadn't worn in a while and went shopping. As I walked, bits were dropping off my shoes in a trail of debris. By the time I got to the shopping mall the soles had dropped off and the straps were barely holding the sandals together. I had to buy myself a new pair of sandals to get myself home! Only leather shoes stand the test of time. So I can understand your humorous comment about those steaming trainers. A fine post, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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It sounds like these two have made a fine connection and you brought the scene to life with your skilful descriptions here Gretchen, it is always a pleasure to read your work. We have an odd climate in Tenerife and it disintegrates shoes! I put on a pair of sandals I hadn't worn in a while and went shopping. As I walked, bits were dropping off my shoes in a trail of debris. By the time I got to the shopping mall the soles had dropped off and the straps were barely holding the sandals together. I had to buy myself a new pair of sandals to get myself home! Only leather shoes stand the test of time. So I can understand your humorous comment about those steaming trainers. A fine post, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I've melted the soles here in the height of summer. And we have killer humidity. Lol. But it's home. Thank you for the awesome and encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Lester's aunt is a real bag. I loved the elevator saying, I'd never heard it before. I may have to put it aside and use it myself sometime. I can imagine poor Lester is going to get burnt to a crisp before the summer is over. The story about the shoes melting was priceless. You're a great story teller. Are you going to sell this story to a magazine? I think it would do well.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Lester's aunt is a real bag. I loved the elevator saying, I'd never heard it before. I may have to put it aside and use it myself sometime. I can imagine poor Lester is going to get burnt to a crisp before the summer is over. The story about the shoes melting was priceless. You're a great story teller. Are you going to sell this story to a magazine? I think it would do well.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Hopefully, once Saltwater Ghosts is done I'll publish it. Thank you so much for this awesome review and your continued encouragement. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
That's so good. I am sure that having a boy around will be good for her - and she will be good for him, far better than his aunt. Your story is very engaging, and I always look forward to reading more. Well done!
Wendy
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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That's so good. I am sure that having a boy around will be good for her - and she will be good for him, far better than his aunt. Your story is very engaging, and I always look forward to reading more. Well done!
Wendy
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy. I appreciate your encouraging comments. Gretchen
