Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a delightful poem that you have written for the contest that I wish you the very best of the contest. May you have a wonderful, wonderful week and may God richly bless you.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024

Thanks so much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed... And sending my best to you, too, for a wonderful and blessed week!

Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

Very cute. At this line:
"Is not just gas-and-go"
I hadn't figured it out yet and I thought, oh, it must be an electric vehicle. Ha ha! I didn't realize yet it was a hay-fed vehicle.
Cleverly done! Julie

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024

Thanks so much, Julie, for your fun review! I was trying to keep the secret of who the "boss" was until the end, so tried to be a little sneaky there! LOL! So glad it surprised you! Thanks again and have a beautiful day!

Comment from patricia dillon

Excellent

This was quite amusing. I did not foresee the twist at the end. So your boss is Santa Claus! It would make an excellent Christmas poem. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024

Thanks so much, Patricia! I had started this poem a couple of years ago and the writing prompt made me remember to pull it up and finish it! So glad you enjoyed and thanks again for the great review!

reply by patricia dillon on 15-Feb-2024

You're welcome

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem full of hard work and dedication. I loved the humour, the perfect rhymes and metre too, you poem sung to me and the last stanza is magical. I have just one suggestion:

Finally has 3 syllables and you need it to just have two in this line.

(The man is fin'lly out the door)

A fine post for the contest and a winner for me.

Love Dolly x x x

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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024

Thanks so much for the great feedback and suggestion - I definitely missed that syllable count!
Have a lovely evening!