What We See
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "What We See - Chapter 10B"A wrongly accused teacher reinvents his life
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You cover everything here before I can even raise it. I was worried about the complete absence of mention regarding your teaching career because these things are always likely to spread. But you refer to it in the end in your methodical way as Alan, the man who's gaining more and more control over his life. Faultless, Jim! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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You cover everything here before I can even raise it. I was worried about the complete absence of mention regarding your teaching career because these things are always likely to spread. But you refer to it in the end in your methodical way as Alan, the man who's gaining more and more control over his life. Faultless, Jim! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Debbie. He definitely runs a risk by not telling her now, but he fears that may scare her off because she doesn't know him very well yet to take the news on complete faith. Many people who knew him well didn't believe him, so what might a virtual stranger think?
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Absolutely understandable. It would have finished off this budding relationship. A calculated risk which was the right one.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good plot movement. Nicely written.
to have a catch - I first heard/saw this in 'Field of Dreams' or 'Shoeless Joe Jackson' or something like one of those and thought it odd since I always said 'play catch'.
Yeah, I've still got my mitt. - Was he a catcher? We always called them fielders' gloves and catcher's mitt.
Kirby Puckett was a great player.
Hmmm - an excellent first day making no money??? (smiley face here)
Hmmm - a relationship based on a lie????? Might be really hard to get past that.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Good plot movement. Nicely written.
to have a catch - I first heard/saw this in 'Field of Dreams' or 'Shoeless Joe Jackson' or something like one of those and thought it odd since I always said 'play catch'.
Yeah, I've still got my mitt. - Was he a catcher? We always called them fielders' gloves and catcher's mitt.
Kirby Puckett was a great player.
Hmmm - an excellent first day making no money??? (smiley face here)
Hmmm - a relationship based on a lie????? Might be really hard to get past that.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. Both your Hmmms are good ones. Wait til the second day!
I guess different parts of the country call them different things. To me it was always "have a catch" and "a mitt" for any type of glove.
Comment from Wendy G
I am feeling uncomfortable about the fact that he was not more open with her. It is understandable, but if she finds out through someone else she'll never trust him again. Guess this will be one of the coming dramas. Very well written. Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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I am feeling uncomfortable about the fact that he was not more open with her. It is understandable, but if she finds out through someone else she'll never trust him again. Guess this will be one of the coming dramas. Very well written. Wendy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks very much, Wendy. Good instincts. I think he's planning to eventually tell her, but only after she knows him well enough to believe him. It could be a mistake if she finds out first. We'll see.
Comment from tfawcus
It seems like all is going well for Alan at the moment and the prospect of cementing a closer relationship with Tommy and Ginnie must be appealing to him. However, I have a feeling that his secrecy about what happened at the school will come back to bite him eventually.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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It seems like all is going well for Alan at the moment and the prospect of cementing a closer relationship with Tommy and Ginnie must be appealing to him. However, I have a feeling that his secrecy about what happened at the school will come back to bite him eventually.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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His judgment at this point is to hold off telling about that episode until he's built up his credibility with her, but there's always that risk that she'll find out some other way. Perhaps poor judgment. Time will tell.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Alan seems to have found a potential future and a ready-made family but telling her a lie was probably a very bad idea. Lies always seem to catch up with you when you are most vulnerable.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Alan seems to have found a potential future and a ready-made family but telling her a lie was probably a very bad idea. Lies always seem to catch up with you when you are most vulnerable.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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They certainly do have a tendency to do that. It's risky what he's doing by waiting to tell her. We'll see how it all washes out.
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter. I like that Alan made the first move; it was tame but a good start. It's always a positive sign when a woman doesn't reject contact.
I was surprised he lied. That was unnecessary and will come back to bite him. Build a foundation with lies is like building one with cracks. One doesn't just leave out graduating from college and teaching. He could've said, "the teaching didn't pan out, so I went back to my first love, electrical repair."
I would like to see him learn something from his ordeal.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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A well written chapter. I like that Alan made the first move; it was tame but a good start. It's always a positive sign when a woman doesn't reject contact.
I was surprised he lied. That was unnecessary and will come back to bite him. Build a foundation with lies is like building one with cracks. One doesn't just leave out graduating from college and teaching. He could've said, "the teaching didn't pan out, so I went back to my first love, electrical repair."
I would like to see him learn something from his ordeal.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks very much for this astute review and for the 6 stars. Absolutely right you are, Lance. Poor judgment on his part. Sometimes mistakes are the best teacher, though sometimes they can lead to irreparable results. I guess his experience with most folks not believing in him enough to suspend their judgment until further facts arose has led to his fear of revealing the truth too early. I think he plans to tell her everything down the road, but that's risky.
Comment from PENofFIRE
Very good, Jim. I enjoyed reading Chapter 10B. I haven't read Chapters 1 through 10 B but I would like to. It is a pleasant story that has the possibility of becoming a great book. Best wishes for your future endeavors.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Very good, Jim. I enjoyed reading Chapter 10B. I haven't read Chapters 1 through 10 B but I would like to. It is a pleasant story that has the possibility of becoming a great book. Best wishes for your future endeavors.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. I appreciate that.
If you are really interested in catching up, here is the blurb for the story as it might appear on Amazon if I decide to put it there:
David Phelps is a mild-mannered, somewhat timid High School Physics teacher who is suddenly charged with the sexual assault of one of his students. Unable to prove a negative?that he didn?t do it?and after having made a dreadful slip-of-the-tongue due to his dyslexia, he is asked to resign. Without the resources or the will to fight this charge and unwilling to live under a cloud of suspicion, he resigns and must now decide what to do with the rest of his life.
His dyslexia plays a key role in the story as he befriends a young man much like himself as a youth, and together they develop an important new tool in the battle against this incurable disability. But this endeavor is fraught with problems of its own. With the help of the woman he loves, will David be able to battle the forces arrayed against him this time and fight for his new invention?
A quick way to catch up would also be to read the recaps of the previous chapter, which are at the beginning of each new chapter. We're only perhaps 1/4 the way into the story now.
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You wrote Chapter 13. What happened to Chapters 11 & 12? Jim, I am 90 and I have a little trouble getting from here to there. How do I get Chapters 2 through 10B?
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Do you see the little numbers at the top of the posting? If you click on the small right-facing arrows at the end of them, it brings you to a list of all the chapters starting with chapter 1. You can click on each one. Simply return to this page by clicking those little arrows each time after reading what you do on the page.
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-written story. Alan does have a lot to consider. The story flows well. Good details about his interaction with Ginnie and Tommy. The decision that Alan is contemplating leaves the reader in suspense, wondering how much time he has. Nice story.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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This is a well-written story. Alan does have a lot to consider. The story flows well. Good details about his interaction with Ginnie and Tommy. The decision that Alan is contemplating leaves the reader in suspense, wondering how much time he has. Nice story.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks very much, B B. What he's doing at this point is risky. He's hoping to build up her trust in him first before telling her about it because he's only known her for one day at this point, but of course, that may backfire on him.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no, he didn't tell her the real reason and I sure hope he tells her before someone identifies him. It's always like that when characters keep secrets and then some antagonist ruins the happiness of the protagonist. But I can see it was too early to share about the false accusation.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Oh no, he didn't tell her the real reason and I sure hope he tells her before someone identifies him. It's always like that when characters keep secrets and then some antagonist ruins the happiness of the protagonist. But I can see it was too early to share about the false accusation.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Yeah, that's his reasoning. Is it worth the risk to build up his credibility with her first before telling her about it? I'm not sure what I would do in that situation. Probably what he did.