Life's Twisted Road
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Well, I guess that means Dion will get picked up when Bobby calls the law on him. Why does Bobby have so much money? Why didn't the girl use her brains and get an abortion" She has no job, no help from the father of the baby, and a demented Dad. Don't answer me just write! hahaha Karen
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Well, I guess that means Dion will get picked up when Bobby calls the law on him. Why does Bobby have so much money? Why didn't the girl use her brains and get an abortion" She has no job, no help from the father of the baby, and a demented Dad. Don't answer me just write! hahaha Karen
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Hello, Karen I guess like this old woman she tends to follow her heart regardless of the consequences and difficulties she'll face. Bobby uses his paycheck on booze, not bills. The next two chapters will change some lives forever.
Smiles, Carol
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No Spoilers please. I will keep reading.
Comment from karenina
Well, I see Jason's (lack of) character hasn't changed. Life's all about him and he's not going to "go down" for some girl whose baby may not even be his, according to him. (Conveniently)
Predictable no brain-Bobby is still using alcohol math and putting Dion in the center of this paternity "mystery" --
Easy to see the cope will be on Dion's tale in two shakes of a lambs' tail!
Now you have your trademark multiple/braided plots going. Bobby, Dion, Gabby, Jason... and more.
Loving this!
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Well, I see Jason's (lack of) character hasn't changed. Life's all about him and he's not going to "go down" for some girl whose baby may not even be his, according to him. (Conveniently)
Predictable no brain-Bobby is still using alcohol math and putting Dion in the center of this paternity "mystery" --
Easy to see the cope will be on Dion's tale in two shakes of a lambs' tail!
Now you have your trademark multiple/braided plots going. Bobby, Dion, Gabby, Jason... and more.
Loving this!
Karenina
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Just like my life...too many things going crazy at once. LOL I have been really enjoying the last two days of writing. It felt like the old days....rolling off my fingers faster than I could type. It felt good. Doubt that it will last because I have to be able to post and that takes those mighty $$$. I'll do my best!
Thanks as always for your kind thoughts and support. Encouragement is the fuel for my efforts.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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If I could help promote one chapter, which would you like?
#1 to hook new readers?
#13 because b it's most current?
I'm going to do it, so you might as well choose!
PM me!
Comment from royowen
What an absolute rotter Bobby is, and now Dion isn't so sure about his best friend Jason is anymore, I had friends like Jason and Dion in my youth, and Bobby drop kick too, we inherit what we sow, although God had mercy on me, God looks at the potential in a person, not the sinner. You're hero is Dion, my sweet 7 year old grandson is Dion, and only seven Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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What an absolute rotter Bobby is, and now Dion isn't so sure about his best friend Jason is anymore, I had friends like Jason and Dion in my youth, and Bobby drop kick too, we inherit what we sow, although God had mercy on me, God looks at the potential in a person, not the sinner. You're hero is Dion, my sweet 7 year old grandson is Dion, and only seven Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Wow, Roy...You really stunned me with the six. Posting on a Saturday, I never expected one. Thank you so very much. Bobby is going to make a big mistake and cost him more than he counted on. Too bad he always drags others down with him. Thank you for the review and making my day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Well, I alread know what lays ahead isn't good. Of course you know right whre to stop it so we'll be back waiting to see the worst of it. Bobby is bad news for everyone. He doesn't seem to care whose like he ruins. Great story. The dialogue seems real.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Well, I alread know what lays ahead isn't good. Of course you know right whre to stop it so we'll be back waiting to see the worst of it. Bobby is bad news for everyone. He doesn't seem to care whose like he ruins. Great story. The dialogue seems real.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you as always Beth. I appreciate your comments. Tomorrow should prove interesting. LOL I hope I did the story line justice. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written chapter, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It moves along well. Your sentence structure in your paragraphing is wonderful. I wish you the very best with this book and I wish you the very best in life. May you have an excellent weekend. Pat
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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This is a very well written chapter, and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It moves along well. Your sentence structure in your paragraphing is wonderful. I wish you the very best with this book and I wish you the very best in life. May you have an excellent weekend. Pat
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Pat. I truly appreciate your time and the review. I am glad you enjoyed the chapter and hope you will continue to follow. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My heart goes out to Dion. He doesn't need a drug charge. I'm glad Gabby is doing better. I'm also glad she's in a safe place. I can't wait for more.
That's not going to look with the scouts." (Missing a word.)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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My heart goes out to Dion. He doesn't need a drug charge. I'm glad Gabby is doing better. I'm also glad she's in a safe place. I can't wait for more.
That's not going to look with the scouts." (Missing a word.)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Fixed and thank you for catching it!
Thanks, Barbara for the review. I managed more $$$ so hopefully I'll get more readership. It's been falling off. Tomorrows post (hopefully) will be a page turner!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very interesting story. The interaction between Juan and Bobby starts the story off well. The story continues to read and flow well. I am curious about Judy and Bobby's interaction. Overall, a very interesting story. Nice job.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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This is a very interesting story. The interaction between Juan and Bobby starts the story off well. The story continues to read and flow well. I am curious about Judy and Bobby's interaction. Overall, a very interesting story. Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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This is the thirteenth chapter so it's difficult to connect to all the characters, but I appreciate you reading and commenting. Hopefully, you might continue following. The next chapter is explosive!
Smiles, Carol
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gunner Lil
I enjoyed reading your post. An easy read and fast paced. Excellent dialogue with good tags when used.
After each break this reader would have liked to know where the action was taking place.
Thank you!
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed reading your post. An easy read and fast paced. Excellent dialogue with good tags when used.
After each break this reader would have liked to know where the action was taking place.
Thank you!
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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All roads lead to trouble.....LOL Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this chapter. I realize its difficult to follow when you are jumping into an ongoing story. I appreciate your thoughts.
Smiles. Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The interactions between Dion and Jason offer insight into the complexities of friendship and loyalty, as they navigate the fallout from Gabby's tumultuous situation. As the chapter draws to a close, the stage is set for what promises to be a gripping continuation of the story.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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The interactions between Dion and Jason offer insight into the complexities of friendship and loyalty, as they navigate the fallout from Gabby's tumultuous situation. As the chapter draws to a close, the stage is set for what promises to be a gripping continuation of the story.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Well done.
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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It's written and nervously waiting for the "author"' namely me to get enough money to post. I hope that it comes across the way I planned.... Thanks for reading and enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
