I Didn't Write This!
Marvin did20 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well done. The rhyming rhymes well, and the rhythm is a 1 and a 2, reminding me of Lawrence Welk, a famous accordionist and bandleader of the sixties. So what? Why am I telling you? I need 150 characters, is why.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Well done. The rhyming rhymes well, and the rhythm is a 1 and a 2, reminding me of Lawrence Welk, a famous accordionist and bandleader of the sixties. So what? Why am I telling you? I need 150 characters, is why.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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I loved Lawrence Welk! Well done Tom...thanks for the review. :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent writing and rhyming. It is full of good emotion and imagery. Very cute! The photo image supports your words well. Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes!
Alex
Just some advice:
He wrote it through the night.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Excellent writing and rhyming. It is full of good emotion and imagery. Very cute! The photo image supports your words well. Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes!
Alex
Just some advice:
He wrote it through the night.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much for this great review. :)
Comment from Jeano
I think this is what they were looking for when they said silly. I've seen others on here that were cute or funny but this stands out as silly. Good luck with the competition, this might be the winner.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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I think this is what they were looking for when they said silly. I've seen others on here that were cute or funny but this stands out as silly. Good luck with the competition, this might be the winner.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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I appreciate this terrfic review. :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
what a clever poem to write about Marvin Clumsy~
I like the rhyming within your poem~
Good luck with this condensed poem you wrote~
Well written and silly~
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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what a clever poem to write about Marvin Clumsy~
I like the rhyming within your poem~
Good luck with this condensed poem you wrote~
Well written and silly~
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, l'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I enjoyed your poem it was silly and fun. Good luck on the contest, this is quite funny. I hope you and your family and friends have a nice and accident free time. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed your poem it was silly and fun. Good luck on the contest, this is quite funny. I hope you and your family and friends have a nice and accident free time. Karen
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you, it's very appreciated. :)
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Comment from SimianSavant
I'm not sure whether to give this one a four or a five because it's unclear whether the awkwardness in the meter was intentional! I'm going to assume it WAS, and if so you can ignore the following suggestions for meter improvements:
=> he tripped all the time <= try "tripping all the time" for flow
=> the words flew in the air. <= try it with just "words flew in the air" for better meter
=> just what am I to do? <= same as above; omit "just"
=> Marvin Rumsy, who's very clumsy, <= omit "who's"
=> Then vowed to make things right. <= omit "Then"
=> it took Marvin all night! <= syllable accents are off meter. Maybe "kept him up all night"?
=> It's not me, believe it!
Marvin's two left feet took aim! <= I think this could be improved to be funnier and click a bit more
Yeah, I didn't get the joke until the end, so now it's on me. Oh well. Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,
Harambe (for President)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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I'm not sure whether to give this one a four or a five because it's unclear whether the awkwardness in the meter was intentional! I'm going to assume it WAS, and if so you can ignore the following suggestions for meter improvements:
=> he tripped all the time <= try "tripping all the time" for flow
=> the words flew in the air. <= try it with just "words flew in the air" for better meter
=> just what am I to do? <= same as above; omit "just"
=> Marvin Rumsy, who's very clumsy, <= omit "who's"
=> Then vowed to make things right. <= omit "Then"
=> it took Marvin all night! <= syllable accents are off meter. Maybe "kept him up all night"?
=> It's not me, believe it!
Marvin's two left feet took aim! <= I think this could be improved to be funnier and click a bit more
Yeah, I didn't get the joke until the end, so now it's on me. Oh well. Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,
Harambe (for President)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you for this great review and for taking time to read my poem. I appreciate it very much. :)
Comment from QC Poet
Silly Marvin was so confused he he left you with his funny poem that you used. Humorous with a great laughable photo included and I Wish you Good Luck in the Silly poem contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Silly Marvin was so confused he he left you with his funny poem that you used. Humorous with a great laughable photo included and I Wish you Good Luck in the Silly poem contest.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you, that's very kind. :)
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent silly poem for the contest
with Marvin doing a great job of messing up all your work.
I guess if Marvin wins, you'll have to give him the prize.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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This is an excellent silly poem for the contest
with Marvin doing a great job of messing up all your work.
I guess if Marvin wins, you'll have to give him the prize.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, l appreciate this nice review. :)
Comment from lancellot
This is well crafted, and the humor is nice and good. The alternate rhyme scheme works well for this little poetic tale.
I also like the presentation of Marvin. The visual adds to the creating the right atmosphere for the entry.
Good luck in the voting. This should do well.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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This is well crafted, and the humor is nice and good. The alternate rhyme scheme works well for this little poetic tale.
I also like the presentation of Marvin. The visual adds to the creating the right atmosphere for the entry.
Good luck in the voting. This should do well.
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you, this great review means a lot to me. :) :)
Comment from Julie Helms
This silly poem is humorous and original! I think Marvin may be your muse, so treat him right! There's no rule that says muses must be sexy goddesses, ha ha. I enjoyed this, best of luck in the contest. Julie
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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This silly poem is humorous and original! I think Marvin may be your muse, so treat him right! There's no rule that says muses must be sexy goddesses, ha ha. I enjoyed this, best of luck in the contest. Julie
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you, that's an excellent point you're making. :)
