Dreams and Roots
Worth the wait32 total reviews
Comment from Jim Wile
This is lovely, Jess. Only 20 syllables, and you've stated with perfect rhyme and meter a dream that many probably have of spring gardens lying with dormant life beneath the snow, waiting to burst forth with the coming of spring. So it is that when life may be getting us down, we dream of better things to come, and that sustains us.
Not sure exactly what you mean by the title of the poem, "Dreams and Roots." I doubt the dreams are of the roots of the garden, but what appears above ground. Maybe it's that a garden in winter consists of just the roots of the plants because the tops have died, but that isn't necessarily the case with all plants in a garden because small shrubs in a garden would have dormant tops too. Plus gardens of all annual flowers wouldn't have any roots to lie dormant because they would either have been pulled out in the fall or are just dead.
Perhaps there is a deeper symbolism to it than what I imagine, but I think maybe something a little more obvious, like "Winter Dreams" would make a better title. - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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This is lovely, Jess. Only 20 syllables, and you've stated with perfect rhyme and meter a dream that many probably have of spring gardens lying with dormant life beneath the snow, waiting to burst forth with the coming of spring. So it is that when life may be getting us down, we dream of better things to come, and that sustains us.
Not sure exactly what you mean by the title of the poem, "Dreams and Roots." I doubt the dreams are of the roots of the garden, but what appears above ground. Maybe it's that a garden in winter consists of just the roots of the plants because the tops have died, but that isn't necessarily the case with all plants in a garden because small shrubs in a garden would have dormant tops too. Plus gardens of all annual flowers wouldn't have any roots to lie dormant because they would either have been pulled out in the fall or are just dead.
Perhaps there is a deeper symbolism to it than what I imagine, but I think maybe something a little more obvious, like "Winter Dreams" would make a better title. - Jim
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Jim, I really appreciate your feedback. Your critique is always on point. I made a last-minute change to the content, and I really should have revised the title as well. Originally, the second line implied that if a dream is first "grounded," it has a better chance of success. I believe I used the phrase "rest in roots," or something to that effect. I later realized that the limited syllables would not fully convey the concept lol! Thank you for pointing that out, I am definitely going to change the title.
Xo
Jess
Comment from jenintorre
I really like this 20 syllable poem. It is very profound. Your words are very thought provoking. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
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I really like this 20 syllable poem. It is very profound. Your words are very thought provoking. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
Comment from Lisasview
Good morning dear Jessica,
Yes, we wait patiently for Spring to arrive so that all the many, and I do mean many bulbs will pop out flowers. Because of the unusual weather here in Spain we do have some flowers showing their pretty colours already.
I love your poem...and image...
Good luck in the contest,
Lisa
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Good morning dear Jessica,
Yes, we wait patiently for Spring to arrive so that all the many, and I do mean many bulbs will pop out flowers. Because of the unusual weather here in Spain we do have some flowers showing their pretty colours already.
I love your poem...and image...
Good luck in the contest,
Lisa
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much Lisa!
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Always welcome dear Jessica,
Lisa
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Jessica, your poem is so sweet and endearing, and it is reminds us that the hope of spring is just around the corner. Lovely photo choice.
Well done. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Hi Jessica, your poem is so sweet and endearing, and it is reminds us that the hope of spring is just around the corner. Lovely photo choice.
Well done. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much!! Xo
Comment from Julie Helms
I love reading poems like this, because I long for spring always. Winter is a resting time for me and is necessary, but spring is hope and warmth and longer days. Enjoyed this quite a bit! Thanks for sharing! Julie
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I love reading poems like this, because I long for spring always. Winter is a resting time for me and is necessary, but spring is hope and warmth and longer days. Enjoyed this quite a bit! Thanks for sharing! Julie
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Julie! That means a lot!
Comment from QC Poet
I'm more of a Spring and Summer type of person myself, but I live in California so we've had little snow to fill the snow pack. Big storms are here now so I'm keeping my fingers crossed. You have a Great conforming entry for this 20 syllable contest.
Nice photo also. Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I'm more of a Spring and Summer type of person myself, but I live in California so we've had little snow to fill the snow pack. Big storms are here now so I'm keeping my fingers crossed. You have a Great conforming entry for this 20 syllable contest.
Nice photo also. Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much! Xo
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really attractive picture of a dandelion and a very lovely poem. If Phil the predictor is at all right, we should see the dandelions popping up predicting the warmer weather.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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This is a really attractive picture of a dandelion and a very lovely poem. If Phil the predictor is at all right, we should see the dandelions popping up predicting the warmer weather.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much! Xo
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jessica,
You've written an excellent poem for the twenty syllable contest
with two good rhymes and a theme of "growing"
that encompasses many things, flowers, dreams, children and more.
Nicely done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Hello Jessica,
You've written an excellent poem for the twenty syllable contest
with two good rhymes and a theme of "growing"
that encompasses many things, flowers, dreams, children and more.
Nicely done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Robert! Xo
Comment from Navada
I like the structure and storytelling of this piece within the syllabic structure and the incorporation of rhyme. I also like the hopefulness of the metaphor - that deeply embedded roots give the garden (and us) the resilience to survive the trials of winter and emerge unscathed in the spring to begin fulfilling our dormant dreams. :)
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I like the structure and storytelling of this piece within the syllabic structure and the incorporation of rhyme. I also like the hopefulness of the metaphor - that deeply embedded roots give the garden (and us) the resilience to survive the trials of winter and emerge unscathed in the spring to begin fulfilling our dormant dreams. :)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Navada! Xo
Comment from Janet Foor
A beautiful message in your 20 syllable poem for the contest. Excellent artwork and presentation that is perfect for your poem. Great imagery in your well written piece.
Blessings and good luck
Janet.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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A beautiful message in your 20 syllable poem for the contest. Excellent artwork and presentation that is perfect for your poem. Great imagery in your well written piece.
Blessings and good luck
Janet.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Janet! Xo