What We See
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Things are looking up for David/Alan. I am curious about the change in Tina. I have a feeling the truth will eventually come out. This is a good write. I am enjoying the story.
Want to meet me here at the store? (I think it reads smoother without 'here')
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Things are looking up for David/Alan. I am curious about the change in Tina. I have a feeling the truth will eventually come out. This is a good write. I am enjoying the story.
Want to meet me here at the store? (I think it reads smoother without 'here')
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, Barbara. Any ideas about that change in Tina? It will be significant when they meet again in a few chapters.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well, that seemed easy enough.
Nicely written.
Alan's Electrical Equipment Repair? Do people actually repair things anymore? Ah, but alas, it's just a story. Of course Alan can make a living.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Well, that seemed easy enough.
Nicely written.
Alan's Electrical Equipment Repair? Do people actually repair things anymore? Ah, but alas, it's just a story. Of course Alan can make a living.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Today, you're correct in this disposable society of ours. Fix a printer? Forget it; buy a new one. This was 1985, however, so they still tended to fix things then. Not for much longer, though.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I do hope Bobby proves to be a genuine friend to David/allan. I enjoyed the chapter Jim and it sounds like David is getting on with life.
Well written, Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I do hope Bobby proves to be a genuine friend to David/allan. I enjoyed the chapter Jim and it sounds like David is getting on with life.
Well written, Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Valda. Good thing he had something to fall back on.
Comment from Navada
Well, I'm pleased he's been able to make a fresh start. He deserves to be happy and be able to make his own way successfully. I'm just so sad he's not teaching. But maybe he'll get another shot? :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Well, I'm pleased he's been able to make a fresh start. He deserves to be happy and be able to make his own way successfully. I'm just so sad he's not teaching. But maybe he'll get another shot? :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Maybe he will. All kinds of ways to be a teacher.
Comment from royowen
It seems Bobby at least thinks and trusts that David is ridgee didge. (Aussie slang) for a Mexican meal, but he shares with Bobby his name is now Alan and not David, and of course Bobby says how hard it will be to remember the change. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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It seems Bobby at least thinks and trusts that David is ridgee didge. (Aussie slang) for a Mexican meal, but he shares with Bobby his name is now Alan and not David, and of course Bobby says how hard it will be to remember the change. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Roy. It's certainly nice to have someone believe you and be on your side. Very difficult to go it alone.
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Yes it is Jim
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! David works fast! How in the world did he move from a house in just two weeks? I guess he paid some movers and he knows a lot about running a business for such a young teacher. But what I really liked about this chapter was his good longtime friend. We all need someone who really trusts and believes in us.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Wow! David works fast! How in the world did he move from a house in just two weeks? I guess he paid some movers and he knows a lot about running a business for such a young teacher. But what I really liked about this chapter was his good longtime friend. We all need someone who really trusts and believes in us.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Well, it's two months, not two weeks, but even that is moving pretty fast to get out on one house and into another. I had to speed up the timeline for a reason that will become clear a bit later.
Yes, Bobby is a godsend for Alan (I'm going to start calling him that now.) Nice to have someone in your court.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good chapter that tells a lot about Alan's plans, although it doesn't quite tell what he will be selling. It is good to know that Bobby has total faith in his innocence. The sentence: The last time I talked . . . is too much like the previous sentence.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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This is a good chapter that tells a lot about Alan's plans, although it doesn't quite tell what he will be selling. It is good to know that Bobby has total faith in his innocence. The sentence: The last time I talked . . . is too much like the previous sentence.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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He won't be selling anything except repair services. I agree with you about the two sentences and condensed them into one. Thanks for that, Carol.
Comment from Wendy G
Things are working out well for him, on the outside at least, and up till now. Tina may be having second thoughts about what she did perhaps - one would hope so. But she probably won't admit it, anyway. An excellent chapter, and a nice way to bring the reader up to date by a catch-up conversation.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Things are working out well for him, on the outside at least, and up till now. Tina may be having second thoughts about what she did perhaps - one would hope so. But she probably won't admit it, anyway. An excellent chapter, and a nice way to bring the reader up to date by a catch-up conversation.
Wendy
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Perceptive, Wendy. Alan (I'll be calling him that from now on) and Tina will meet again down the road, and that meeting should prove very interesting.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Fortunate lad in that he had a trade to rely on making a living. Leaving all that trauma behind was surely better than a thicket of thorny roses, meaning false accusations.
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Fortunate lad in that he had a trade to rely on making a living. Leaving all that trauma behind was surely better than a thicket of thorny roses, meaning false accusations.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Agreed. Not everyone could just become self-employed in a new field like that, but he's a talented guy who could leave that "thicket of thorny roses" (I like that) aside for another endeavor.
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Maybe ... never mind, but if you want to use "a thicket of thorny roses," feel free.
Always yours ... and my wife's.