Lord Buckingham and The Lady
painting is Thinking Monkey by Banksy37 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, I was hoping they were run away! But, the monkey was right, men like that idiotic doctor would have had a field day with him, he would have lived a live of pure torture. That says a lot about humans. I really enjoyed your story, just sad he had to die. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Aww, I was hoping they were run away! But, the monkey was right, men like that idiotic doctor would have had a field day with him, he would have lived a live of pure torture. That says a lot about humans. I really enjoyed your story, just sad he had to die. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Death is always sad, especially the death of a hero. In this case, Moira was no hero and allowed herself to be bullied by the doctor. Moira was compassionate, however. The monkey was the hero, sacrificing himself for the greater good.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I'm not sure what it was that Lord Buckingham (Chip) did, but it was a nice touch.
You certainly satisfied the club challenge requirements. Good work.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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I'm not sure what it was that Lord Buckingham (Chip) did, but it was a nice touch.
You certainly satisfied the club challenge requirements. Good work.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Thank you. Chip did not want to be a living freak, and he loved Moira enough to not see her career maligned by Dr. Price.
Comment from BethShelby
This was a sad story. I 'm not sure how what the monkey did could have been for someone who loved him because since he wouldn't save himself, he caused her much deeper grief. The story could have had a more logical ending where the last line would make sense.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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This was a sad story. I 'm not sure how what the monkey did could have been for someone who loved him because since he wouldn't save himself, he caused her much deeper grief. The story could have had a more logical ending where the last line would make sense.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Actually, the monkey did do it for Moira, as he knew Dr. Price would not want to be upstaged by Moira's communications with Chip. This was flash fiction, so I couldn't write everything out in detail.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Wow! That is a sad story, one of the ultimate sacrifice for another. But if he understood that the doctor would get rid of her also, what did his sacrifice mean, beyond that humans are not good at accepting intelligence in any other species.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Wow! That is a sad story, one of the ultimate sacrifice for another. But if he understood that the doctor would get rid of her also, what did his sacrifice mean, beyond that humans are not good at accepting intelligence in any other species.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Chip felt since Moira had let out the monkey spoke, Dr. Price would be jealous of her and try to oust her from the lab. This was flash fiction. I had to be brief.
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That is the problem with flash.
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Yes. It's a trade off. When I and others write works that are too long, fewer people seem to want to read it.
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That's true and I never noticed it until I did a very short story and had twice as many readings as my book chapters. To me the longer stories and chapters are more interesting.
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To me, also. It's always difficult when you try to compromise.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is an enjoyable read, Jim.
It contains a message that there are things out there we don't understand and that in the name of science is not always the way to learn. Perhaps kindness is the better way to eke out what possibilities lie beyond our understanding.
I loved this! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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This is an enjoyable read, Jim.
It contains a message that there are things out there we don't understand and that in the name of science is not always the way to learn. Perhaps kindness is the better way to eke out what possibilities lie beyond our understanding.
I loved this! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Amen to that, and thanks!
Comment from Sabrina H.
What a tearjerker of a short story. I enjoyed the dialogue and flow of your sad story. It reminds of a movie, I think it was called Project X.
Good luck with your entry.
Keep writing:)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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What a tearjerker of a short story. I enjoyed the dialogue and flow of your sad story. It reminds of a movie, I think it was called Project X.
Good luck with your entry.
Keep writing:)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Another reviewer mentioned that, too. I am sorry because I am a movie buff, but I missed that one. I definitely will see it in the future.
Comment from Teri7
Jim, This is a great story you have penned. That last line was great and the song that you picked to go with it made it! Thank you for sharing my friend! Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Jim, This is a great story you have penned. That last line was great and the song that you picked to go with it made it! Thank you for sharing my friend! Blessings, teri
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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I appreciate this very kind review!
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Hope you have a great nite! Blessings, Teri
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Thanks! Enjoy what's left of the week end!
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Thank you, my friend. I hope you enjoy it too! Blessings, Teri
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It's Monday now, and I hope you are well!
Comment from Julie Helms
Oh my gosh that was sad! Your story was a very imaginative backstory for the painting. Excellent emotional build up.
I think you may have entered it into the wrong category for the club though. It says club entry for "missing star", but I'm pretty sure this is the backstory for the painting entry. Not that it really matters.
Great creative work! Thanks for sharing. Julie
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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Oh my gosh that was sad! Your story was a very imaginative backstory for the painting. Excellent emotional build up.
I think you may have entered it into the wrong category for the club though. It says club entry for "missing star", but I'm pretty sure this is the backstory for the painting entry. Not that it really matters.
Great creative work! Thanks for sharing. Julie
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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I spoke to the club director about that. It does not matter, because there really are no prizes. It's just to write a topic in different forms.
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Yep, that makes sense!
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Thanks again. Keep writing and keep in touch anytime!
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Thanks! :-)
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Hope to hear from you soon!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
An interesting and thought-provoking poem, Jim.
Chip is more intelligent than his human torturers. Admittedly, I was not too crazy about the ending. However, your dialogue and character development are perfect.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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An interesting and thought-provoking poem, Jim.
Chip is more intelligent than his human torturers. Admittedly, I was not too crazy about the ending. However, your dialogue and character development are perfect.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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I could have added more, but this was flash fiction so I could not use too many words.
Comment from tfawcus
A powerful story, Jim. The business of experimentation on animals is emotive to say the least. The way you contrast the humanism of Moira with the cold-blooded approach of the scientist brings the ethics into sharp focus. A thought provoking tale.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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A powerful story, Jim. The business of experimentation on animals is emotive to say the least. The way you contrast the humanism of Moira with the cold-blooded approach of the scientist brings the ethics into sharp focus. A thought provoking tale.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
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I appreciate your very kind words!
