Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Life's Twisted Road"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent first chapter. You have pulled me into the story. I am looking for the next chapter. I have missed you on FanStory. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent first chapter. You have pulled me into the story. I am looking for the next chapter. I have missed you on FanStory. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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The reason I always find my way back to Fanstory, is the support and kindness I find among my small circle of friends. Like the title of the story, life is filled with pitfalls and the road is twisted, I pray I can draw from this and maybe touch someone along the way. Thank you -- Hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Great beginning chapter! You had me hooked from the first few words. I'm so glad you're writing again. Looking forward to reading what has happened between Isabella and her granddaughter, and her lying friend. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Great beginning chapter! You had me hooked from the first few words. I'm so glad you're writing again. Looking forward to reading what has happened between Isabella and her granddaughter, and her lying friend. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Hugs and thank you's from the deepest spot of this ole battered heart. I hope I can be deserving of all the kindness I've received and that I will be blessed to deliver a worthy story. Thank you always, Carol
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So glad you're back, and with a great story! Have a wonderful week.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi, a great first book chapter entry. You have me from the very first sentence. You set these two girls up to seem like kind of normal teenagers that have some secret to hide. Because we don't know what it is, and because you've already drawn us into the story, we will be anxious to see what happens next.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Hi, a great first book chapter entry. You have me from the very first sentence. You set these two girls up to seem like kind of normal teenagers that have some secret to hide. Because we don't know what it is, and because you've already drawn us into the story, we will be anxious to see what happens next.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Rhonda. I pray I can continue to offer a story worthy of your time and reviews. My pleasure comes from knowing others enjoy what I write. I appreciate your time and words. Hugs, Carol
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I'm looking forward to your next chapter!!
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Chap. 2 is posted and I hope you enjoy it Rhonda. This story is not my usual detective thriller but I believe it has its share of drama. Thank you again.
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Great, thank you. I'm very behind, but I'll catch up to it. We had grades due this week, and I'm dealing with custody issues with a toddler living with us.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, this is a great entry yo to the contest. It's great to seeing you back again and as always in good form. Good luck with this first and well written chapter. Can't wait to reading on. That granddaughter is up to no good. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Hi Carol, this is a great entry yo to the contest. It's great to seeing you back again and as always in good form. Good luck with this first and well written chapter. Can't wait to reading on. That granddaughter is up to no good. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Hello, Ulla.... It's been a long while, hasn't it? Your words are so kind but exactly what I need to push forward with my writing again. Confidence is a funny thing. It slips away so easily when self doubt from different directions influences one's self esteem. I know that you and other friends on FanStory will be a shoulder to lean on. Thanks again.
Hugs, Carol
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It is a long time, Carol. But it's good you're back. Hugs :)))
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Welcome back. I hope I get to read the continuation of this contest entry. You have a wonderful beginning here. I can't wait to read more. Please return soon. My prayers continue to be with you. Good luck with the contest.
Nat spat the words into the air. "Hope you're satisfied!" (comma after 'air')
Jeremy's over and we're kinda busy." (comma after 'over' you switched subjects.)
purposely raised her voice before she continued. "It's not your fault. (comma after 'continued,')
Becky interrupted. "Her mom's already on her way. (comma after 'interrupted,')
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Welcome back. I hope I get to read the continuation of this contest entry. You have a wonderful beginning here. I can't wait to read more. Please return soon. My prayers continue to be with you. Good luck with the contest.
Nat spat the words into the air. "Hope you're satisfied!" (comma after 'air')
Jeremy's over and we're kinda busy." (comma after 'over' you switched subjects.)
purposely raised her voice before she continued. "It's not your fault. (comma after 'continued,')
Becky interrupted. "Her mom's already on her way. (comma after 'interrupted,')
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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That you as always for your assistance and for the kind words. It's an ongoing struggle but that's to be expected with my family. The lies and hatred have to turn somewhere and this time I won the spin of the wheel I guess. Thanks to my son, Matthew's encouragement, I finally sat down and tried to focus on writing. It was and is a lot tougher than I thought it would be. Part of that comes from my loss of confidence, but as always my Fanstory friends are quick to offer me a shoulder to lean on. I've finished Chapter 2 but for some reason I can't get it to post correctly. I might have to ask Tom or somebody. The copy keeps making a long narrow section to the far right of the page. I've deleted and copied over and over but no luck so far. Tried the far left alignment but nothing happens. I must have hit something wrong but no idea what. Thanks again Barbara for the much needed prayers, the encouragement, and the corrections. Awesome! Hugs, Carol
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I'm sure Tom will help.
Comment from prettybluebirds
It's good to hear from you again. I have thought of you often in the last few months and wondered what had become of you. You still have your writing skills. This chapter is excellent. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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It's good to hear from you again. I have thought of you often in the last few months and wondered what had become of you. You still have your writing skills. This chapter is excellent. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you for stopping by to read, review and bolster my sagging confidence. It's a struggle to write again but as my name says...It's time to Begin Again. I am thrilled that you enjoyed it. Hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
Great to see you posting! The muse has been generally cantankerous, so I post maybe once a month.
Life refuses to cooperate doesn't it? I do think writing has always been not only a great therapeutic outlet for you but a wonderful gift to us!
You have not lost your touch, Carol!
More please!
Karenina
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Great to see you posting! The muse has been generally cantankerous, so I post maybe once a month.
Life refuses to cooperate doesn't it? I do think writing has always been not only a great therapeutic outlet for you but a wonderful gift to us!
You have not lost your touch, Carol!
More please!
Karenina
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Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I thank you with every fiber in my being, my dear friend. I never thought writing would be such a struggle, but I too understand how therapeutic it is for me. Life's an avalanche of sorts and the keyboard my shovel. I appreciate your kindness. It's taken me what seems like forever but I do have a chapter 2. Hurrah! Have a blessed day.
Hugs, Carol
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It's ALWAYS been a great outlet for you...and me! Keep pushing! Do it for YOU and to hell with what others are demanding of your time!
Comment from lyenochka
So good to see you back! Hope great dramatic opening and we feel a lot is suspicious and you show us that Isabella is much more aware of what's going on that the hysterical relatives and friend know. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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So good to see you back! Hope great dramatic opening and we feel a lot is suspicious and you show us that Isabella is much more aware of what's going on that the hysterical relatives and friend know. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Good morning, Helen! Thank you for the wishes and the kind review. It's a struggle to write again, but I hope I continue to put forth a story that is entertaining to all. Thank you.
Have a blessed day!
Carol
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I'm sure you can do it! And it will give you some other things to think about. Don't forget to be good to yourself! 💖
Comment from BethShelby
Carol, I've been thinking about you and wondering if and when you were going to began again. I know there was a lot of family drama and trama going on with one of your granddaughters just before you suddenly quite writing and I'm hoping things have settled down in that area. Since this story is about a granddaughter and her grandmother I'm wonder how much you are drawing on real life. It sound like the beginning of something that will make an excellent novel. I'm glad you are writing again.
Beth
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Carol, I've been thinking about you and wondering if and when you were going to began again. I know there was a lot of family drama and trama going on with one of your granddaughters just before you suddenly quite writing and I'm hoping things have settled down in that area. Since this story is about a granddaughter and her grandmother I'm wonder how much you are drawing on real life. It sound like the beginning of something that will make an excellent novel. I'm glad you are writing again.
Beth
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you with all my heart, Beth. It's been a terrible journey and not one I am able to see the end of yet. Writing has been my lifeblood, but sometimes I fear it has withered away. It has been a struggle to write, but then as you so well know, nothing in this world seems to come easy. The days of sitting at my keyboard and thoughts spilling out are gone. The fact that I have one chapter and another almost written strikes me as being a miracle in itself. My friends, like you and so many others on FanStory, have always been my supporting factor, a soft landing, so to speak. I am blessed by your gift of six stars. You've offered a beacon and I will give it my best shot to be worthy of it. Thank you. Hugs and wishes for a blessed day. Carol
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You're in my thoughts and prayers. You're a strong lady who won't give up.
You've proved it too many times.