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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Doug,
This free verse uses Lind breaks and ellipses well.
It seems here that for love to be truly endless each of the partners had to bend and change a little.
Keep writing and stay happy.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Hi Doug,
This free verse uses Lind breaks and ellipses well.
It seems here that for love to be truly endless each of the partners had to bend and change a little.
Keep writing and stay happy.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Joan.
You?re right, as usual.
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Don't mention it, Doug.
Joan
Comment from BenThrone
Thank you for sharing this interesting poem. I understand that in your use of ellipses you are juxtaposing the finite with the infinite. It also creates a pause while reading, however, that trips up the flow of the poem. The same effect could be achieved by placing "less" in parentheses, thereby avoiding any interruption in flow. But you may have intended for the pause to be part of the poem?
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing this interesting poem. I understand that in your use of ellipses you are juxtaposing the finite with the infinite. It also creates a pause while reading, however, that trips up the flow of the poem. The same effect could be achieved by placing "less" in parentheses, thereby avoiding any interruption in flow. But you may have intended for the pause to be part of the poem?
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I did so intend.
Smiling. Thank you.
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But every once in a while I like to break away from my favored prose and take in a few melodic verses. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But every once in a while I like to break away from my favored prose and take in a few melodic verses. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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And thank you for stopping by.
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, you're just a man as you say having difficulty expressing your inner feelings. Well, that at least is how I read this poem which is a love declaration of sorts. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Oh dear, you're just a man as you say having difficulty expressing your inner feelings. Well, that at least is how I read this poem which is a love declaration of sorts. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Ulla.
I do appreciate your kind thoughts.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Pride and not willing to compromise is problem for all humans. Of course, in compromise there need to both parties involved willing to compromise. I enjoyed this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Pride and not willing to compromise is problem for all humans. Of course, in compromise there need to both parties involved willing to compromise. I enjoyed this poem.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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So true.
Thank you, Barbara.
Comment from John Ciarmello
You got me with the one last vacation, Victor.
That was completely relatable. As you state in your piece, it does not matter how much time passes. We always have that glimmer of love and hope that things will work as planned. Whether we realize it or not, time has no structure, and we must go with the flow. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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You got me with the one last vacation, Victor.
That was completely relatable. As you state in your piece, it does not matter how much time passes. We always have that glimmer of love and hope that things will work as planned. Whether we realize it or not, time has no structure, and we must go with the flow. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you, John.
Very nice review.
Doug
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Sorry, Doug! I assumed your name.
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Hey, no problem.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Doug.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem that has
a lot to think about.
-I like how you write end...less,
because the first reaction is to
think the end, but it isn't.
-What I come away with is your
are trying to figure out this relationship.
-I think at different stages in our lives,
especially as we age, there are different
emotions to deal with.
-That's my take away from this, trying
to adjust to things that are different
and perhaps not knowing why they are different.
-I hope things are okay with you!
-I always enjoy your writing.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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-Nice image and presentation, Doug.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem that has
a lot to think about.
-I like how you write end...less,
because the first reaction is to
think the end, but it isn't.
-What I come away with is your
are trying to figure out this relationship.
-I think at different stages in our lives,
especially as we age, there are different
emotions to deal with.
-That's my take away from this, trying
to adjust to things that are different
and perhaps not knowing why they are different.
-I hope things are okay with you!
-I always enjoy your writing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Pam.
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You are very welcome, Doug.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, not everyone is a man, but I get your point. Every one of us has dreams and a bit of foolishness in us. Thanks for the beautiful image of the walk hand in hand on the beach with someone we love. We all need that. We all need to examine our thoughts and feelings. I like the use of the word emote. It is so quaint.
It is well-written and straight to the point.
Jesse
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Well, not everyone is a man, but I get your point. Every one of us has dreams and a bit of foolishness in us. Thanks for the beautiful image of the walk hand in hand on the beach with someone we love. We all need that. We all need to examine our thoughts and feelings. I like the use of the word emote. It is so quaint.
It is well-written and straight to the point.
Jesse
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Jesse.
I really do appreciate your support.
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Glad to hear it. You are worth supporting, my friend.
Comment from Jacob1395
There is a lot of emotion in this piece which comes through strongly in the writing. I can see his yearning for the woman he loves and his frustration that she doesn't seem to share his feelings. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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There is a lot of emotion in this piece which comes through strongly in the writing. I can see his yearning for the woman he loves and his frustration that she doesn't seem to share his feelings. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much.
I?m glad you understood thoroughly.
Comment from Judith Ann
A favorite line for today:
Is pride still
a problem o' mine?
Don't even polish it
much anymore.
Pride does get in the way, doesn't it. I am still trying to digest your words, what they mean. But then, poetry is very personal isn't it. Good luck in the contest. -- Judy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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A favorite line for today:
Is pride still
a problem o' mine?
Don't even polish it
much anymore.
Pride does get in the way, doesn't it. I am still trying to digest your words, what they mean. But then, poetry is very personal isn't it. Good luck in the contest. -- Judy
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you.
I liked that stanza as well.
Sometimes, I?m amazed at what comes to mind.
