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Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "the deer"keep your hope alive....
18 total reviews
Comment from Lisasview
Oh gosh.... well, you really did follow your poems writing prompt.
The meat looks gross... but then again I never eat meat or chicken. ( 40 years so far...
I never heard of Lowku, so thank you so much for sharing,
Lisasview
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Oh gosh.... well, you really did follow your poems writing prompt.
The meat looks gross... but then again I never eat meat or chicken. ( 40 years so far...
I never heard of Lowku, so thank you so much for sharing,
Lisasview
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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i like cows... they taste very good medium on a bun with pickles and onions lol! thank you lisa :-)
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Oh well, I remember that from many years ago,
Lisa
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Okay, we may already be friends! This is funny to me as I appreciate every angle, with barbecuing Bambi steaks; drinking beer! Nice job with the before and after artwork. I'm hungry now!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Okay, we may already be friends! This is funny to me as I appreciate every angle, with barbecuing Bambi steaks; drinking beer! Nice job with the before and after artwork. I'm hungry now!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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LOL!! thank you king :-)
Comment from Gloria ....
This definitely fit the bill for a lowku. All the rules were followed with precision and that little deer turned out to be PETA, (people who eat tasty animals), friendly.
Wishing you all the best with the voters.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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This definitely fit the bill for a lowku. All the rules were followed with precision and that little deer turned out to be PETA, (people who eat tasty animals), friendly.
Wishing you all the best with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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LOL!! thank you gloria :-)
Comment from June Sargent
OK. With lowku there is never a happy ending. But he's so cute! You did a great though job describing exactly what would happen to road kill. In three short lines. A contender.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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OK. With lowku there is never a happy ending. But he's so cute! You did a great though job describing exactly what would happen to road kill. In three short lines. A contender.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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lol thank you june! :-)
Comment from Julie Helms
Oh, this is a good one! I was scrolling down slowly as I read it, so I didn't see the meat on the grill until the last minute!
I am only counting six syllables in your second line?
Best of luck in the contest! Julie
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Oh, this is a good one! I was scrolling down slowly as I read it, so I didn't see the meat on the grill until the last minute!
I am only counting six syllables in your second line?
Best of luck in the contest! Julie
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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eek! all fixed! thank you julie :-)
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You're welcome!
Comment from artisart4u
Yep, your lowku is written like it is suppose to be. I never heard of this kind before and I looked online for the meaning. Believe it or not, I found it in Fanstory and it is "something gross, nasty, or disgusting we find in everyday life." I have had deer bologna sandwich before.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Yep, your lowku is written like it is suppose to be. I never heard of this kind before and I looked online for the meaning. Believe it or not, I found it in Fanstory and it is "something gross, nasty, or disgusting we find in everyday life." I have had deer bologna sandwich before.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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lol thank you arti :-)
Comment from zanya
Yes - Ouch - this Lowku certainly does have an impact on the reader -with its juxtaposition of 'brown-eyed deer' and 'bbq dinner'- short format works can be very effective
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Yes - Ouch - this Lowku certainly does have an impact on the reader -with its juxtaposition of 'brown-eyed deer' and 'bbq dinner'- short format works can be very effective
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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lol thank you zanya :-)
Comment from Julie G1
So well written. This poem presents an apt and expressive response to the prompt. The imagery used is apt, and vivid. The graphics also worked well. Overall, a terrific verse. Keep on writing.
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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So well written. This poem presents an apt and expressive response to the prompt. The imagery used is apt, and vivid. The graphics also worked well. Overall, a terrific verse. Keep on writing.
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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thank you julie! :-)