Behind The Fall
A free verse poem32 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
A fine poem in which you use the beaty of the waterfall as a metaphor for the facade we show the world to hide the truth that is concealed behind it. I loved that fourth stanza: "For concealed behind
the cascading cloak,
lies a sorrow unseen
dwelling in a deep,
dark reservoir,
bearing the weight
of every drop".
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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A fine poem in which you use the beaty of the waterfall as a metaphor for the facade we show the world to hide the truth that is concealed behind it. I loved that fourth stanza: "For concealed behind
the cascading cloak,
lies a sorrow unseen
dwelling in a deep,
dark reservoir,
bearing the weight
of every drop".
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you, that means a lot! Xo
Comment from BenThrone
There is a wry, almost sardonic tone to this poem that, much life the grief to which the poem alludes, lurks just behind the veil--until the last lines. Excellent writing. I especially enjoyed "falling with grace/to soft froth."
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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There is a wry, almost sardonic tone to this poem that, much life the grief to which the poem alludes, lurks just behind the veil--until the last lines. Excellent writing. I especially enjoyed "falling with grace/to soft froth."
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Ben! I'm honored!
Comment from Janet Foor
I lived in western North Carolina for several years where there are many waterfalls there. I had a few favorites that I would hike to and sit and listen to the rushing water, the gurgling sounds and splash of the falls into a pool of water at the bottom.
This lovely poem took me back to those wonderful memories.
Blu
Janet
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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I lived in western North Carolina for several years where there are many waterfalls there. I had a few favorites that I would hike to and sit and listen to the rushing water, the gurgling sounds and splash of the falls into a pool of water at the bottom.
This lovely poem took me back to those wonderful memories.
Blu
Janet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Janet! Truly appreciated! Xo
Comment from Sugarray77
This is very beautiful, Jessica. I enjoyed reading every word. The use of the receptive line that ends your poem captures, again, the feel and flow of the beauty and uninterrupted flow of words and water. Well done and good luck!
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is very beautiful, Jessica. I enjoyed reading every word. The use of the receptive line that ends your poem captures, again, the feel and flow of the beauty and uninterrupted flow of words and water. Well done and good luck!
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Melissa, thank you so much for your encouraging words, and this lovely review. I truly appreciate it! Xo
Comment from Sarah Sandison
I love a waterfall and love your poem about it. I could visualise everything that you were saying and the picture is perfect. I like to be able to 'feel' the words I am reading, and I felt yours. Thank you
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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I love a waterfall and love your poem about it. I could visualise everything that you were saying and the picture is perfect. I like to be able to 'feel' the words I am reading, and I felt yours. Thank you
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Sarah!
Comment from Yusita
Wow. Another splendid poem of yours! The imagery is brilliant, as usual... and I love how, beyond just describing the waterfall beautifully, you add an underlying message that can be applied to people... many people are pretty waterfalls, concealing some sorrow or heavy burden...
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Wow. Another splendid poem of yours! The imagery is brilliant, as usual... and I love how, beyond just describing the waterfall beautifully, you add an underlying message that can be applied to people... many people are pretty waterfalls, concealing some sorrow or heavy burden...
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Yusita, I truly appreciate that! Xo
Comment from mermaids
Your vivid use of words capture the emotions that arise when one is observing a waterfall. "A peaceful flow over jagged rocks" is a perfect line that creates a picture of the waterfall. Excellent free verse form about a part of nature that is worthy of poetic form. The beauty of waterfalls is unmatched.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Your vivid use of words capture the emotions that arise when one is observing a waterfall. "A peaceful flow over jagged rocks" is a perfect line that creates a picture of the waterfall. Excellent free verse form about a part of nature that is worthy of poetic form. The beauty of waterfalls is unmatched.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from lyenochka
Beautifully said! Yes, the waterfall is lovely to look at but what is happening behind it? You chose to use this as a metaphor for hurting people who put forward a strong and lovely facade for the sake of others. Hope this does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Beautifully said! Yes, the waterfall is lovely to look at but what is happening behind it? You chose to use this as a metaphor for hurting people who put forward a strong and lovely facade for the sake of others. Hope this does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen!
Comment from Dawn Munro
But oh, how lovely
the water
falls
First off -- I loved your presentation. Free form is often humdrum in how it is showcased. Next -- the ambiance created is wonderful, if sad... This poem is beautifully evocative.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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But oh, how lovely
the water
falls
First off -- I loved your presentation. Free form is often humdrum in how it is showcased. Next -- the ambiance created is wonderful, if sad... This poem is beautifully evocative.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Dawn! Xo
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You are very welcome!
Comment from RainbewLatte
Mmm. Jeez. The last lines hit! I bet just about anyone can appreciate a well written closing. It just FEELS complete. I just see the entire poem (though perhaps by intention perhaps just how the english language is written) but how it goes from top to bottom like a waterfall, like a body of water just slowly making its way down from left to right. Definitely captivating.
Love the description.
Thanks for this masterful write!
New Year to you!!!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Mmm. Jeez. The last lines hit! I bet just about anyone can appreciate a well written closing. It just FEELS complete. I just see the entire poem (though perhaps by intention perhaps just how the english language is written) but how it goes from top to bottom like a waterfall, like a body of water just slowly making its way down from left to right. Definitely captivating.
Love the description.
Thanks for this masterful write!
New Year to you!!!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review! Xo