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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "New Beginnings"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is good how you are already presenting the occurrence of nightmares as a result of her PTSD, Post Trauma Syndome Disorder. Has she really talked about what went on when she was alone needing rescue. There's more to comment on but this is enough.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is good how you are already presenting the occurrence of nightmares as a result of her PTSD, Post Trauma Syndome Disorder. Has she really talked about what went on when she was alone needing rescue. There's more to comment on but this is enough.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Hi Liz, thank you for the spoken and unspoken thoughts on the chapter!
Take care,
Rhonda
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***Smile***
Comment from Daylily
This is a wonderful story...very imaginative and I like the inclusion of a lot of animals. You have concluded with some interesting questions that leave readers eager for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is a wonderful story...very imaginative and I like the inclusion of a lot of animals. You have concluded with some interesting questions that leave readers eager for the next chapter.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your review, Lily! Your time and effort are quite appreciated!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda----and there be some things there that would take some adjustment but something tells me Echo will be just fine. The pictured cat is beautiful.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda----and there be some things there that would take some adjustment but something tells me Echo will be just fine. The pictured cat is beautiful.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Mike, echo will, eventually, work things out.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love this story and can't wait to see what else Echo needs to learn about Theo and his family or life. I know it'll be different and I know she'll need to be open minded.
"Of your clothing or dance?" He asked back. (lower case 'h' on 'he')
"He's the son of my father's horse Eternal, and my mother's mare Champion." (about 90% sure you need a comma after 'horse' and one after 'mare')
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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I love this story and can't wait to see what else Echo needs to learn about Theo and his family or life. I know it'll be different and I know she'll need to be open minded.
"Of your clothing or dance?" He asked back. (lower case 'h' on 'he')
"He's the son of my father's horse Eternal, and my mother's mare Champion." (about 90% sure you need a comma after 'horse' and one after 'mare')
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Hi Barbara. Thanks so much for the review! You are spot on with the Spaghetti. I missed the commas and had wondered about the capitalization.
Take care, and Happy New Year!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Sally Law
Love this chapter and added developments and new horse, Magnificent. I think I'll assign that name to my husband. I still think there's romance between Theo a and Echo and a possible union coming. I'm staying tuned, my friend. Exceptional writing without any spags I can see. Beautifully written and illustrated as always.
Sending you my best today as always and love across the bridge,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Love this chapter and added developments and new horse, Magnificent. I think I'll assign that name to my husband. I still think there's romance between Theo a and Echo and a possible union coming. I'm staying tuned, my friend. Exceptional writing without any spags I can see. Beautifully written and illustrated as always.
Sending you my best today as always and love across the bridge,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Sally, dear, thank you for the lovely six star rating!
I?m pretty sure you?re right about Echo and Theo, but they?ll have an obstacle or two ahead. All is not completely well in Paradise!
Love across the bridge! Texas and Florida united!
Rhonda
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Nothing is ever perfect but as we know, love can perfect us! I so enjoyed this chapter, my friend. Love and blessings,
Sal Xos
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Awww, good thought, my dear lady!!
Love back at you,
Rhonda
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A beautifully expressed chapter in this continuing fantasy story that so successfully blends reality with mysticism. Your dialogue, as ever, excellently captures this growing relationship between the protagonists and the enchantment that has brought Echo so seductively into Theo's world. A bit confused by the reference to Anthos and kept looking further up the page for an explanation. But I understand now from your notes. Well done, Rhonda, for this continuation of a magical read. Happy New Year! Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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A beautifully expressed chapter in this continuing fantasy story that so successfully blends reality with mysticism. Your dialogue, as ever, excellently captures this growing relationship between the protagonists and the enchantment that has brought Echo so seductively into Theo's world. A bit confused by the reference to Anthos and kept looking further up the page for an explanation. But I understand now from your notes. Well done, Rhonda, for this continuation of a magical read. Happy New Year! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Hi Debbie!
Thank you for the generous 6 stars! I appreciate them and the time you took on the review.
Sorry for the mishap on Theo/Anthos. I am rewriting a book I wrote years ago, but was full of a lot of flaws. I take some passages from the old and build and rebuild. In that version, I would switch back and forth between his name and nickname, which was annoying. I?m usually better at catching them. I think I?ve got it resolved now. Thank you for pointing it out!
Thank you for commenting on the blending of real and fantasy. As you know, it?s a delicate balance.
Thanks aging,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Ah good ending Rhonda, in that you've shown us how a writer should end a chapter, with a deep drug induced desire to read the next. I must admit that I like a departure from the normal human jungle and journey into the difference of the mystic, well done Rhonda, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Ah good ending Rhonda, in that you've shown us how a writer should end a chapter, with a deep drug induced desire to read the next. I must admit that I like a departure from the normal human jungle and journey into the difference of the mystic, well done Rhonda, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you, so much, for the lovely review! Happy New Year,
Rhonda
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Glad you had time to get back to this book! I like the idyllic setting and the way the people seem to live in harmony with the animals, even communicating with them.
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The name "Anthos" is used interchangeably here with Theo and it got rather confusing until I realized it's the same person.
infactuation born of circumstance? (infatuation)
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Glad you had time to get back to this book! I like the idyllic setting and the way the people seem to live in harmony with the animals, even communicating with them.
Comments:
The name "Anthos" is used interchangeably here with Theo and it got rather confusing until I realized it's the same person.
infactuation born of circumstance? (infatuation)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Hi Helen,
Thank you so much for the generous 6 stars!
I?m glad to post as well. It?s been about 3 weeks! I?m going to work harder to stay caught up!
Thanks for catching the Theo/Anthos issue. I?ve fixed it now.
It is an Idyllic world, but they often have to fight to keep it that way, but that is a story for another day, lol.
Thanks again, dear friend!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Sabrina H.
Wonderful chapter, wish I read from the beginning though. I love the name Echo, it's not something you hear all the time. I love fantasy stories and will have to love up you story to read from the beginning. Happy New Years!
Keep writing:)
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Wonderful chapter, wish I read from the beginning though. I love the name Echo, it's not something you hear all the time. I love fantasy stories and will have to love up you story to read from the beginning. Happy New Years!
Keep writing:)
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you for stopping by to review! I?ll try to come up with a summary of the earlier chapters to help out.
Have a happy and prosperous New Year,
Rhonda
Comment from Navada
This is my first contact with your story and it seems fascinating! I particularly love the idea of a beautiful young man of godly origins who can - wait for it - talk to cats. Sold!! :)
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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This is my first contact with your story and it seems fascinating! I particularly love the idea of a beautiful young man of godly origins who can - wait for it - talk to cats. Sold!! :)
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Hi Navada! I'm so glad you took the time to review my chapter. I would love it if you follow. I need to go back and write a good summary to help people catch up. Yeah, Theo talks to cats, lol.
Take care,
and Happy New Year,
Rhonda