Stories and Poems for the Holidays
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Personal Goals for the New Year"Holiday musings.
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Comment from Wendy G
That is a super Loop Poem, very relatable, and written with fine rhyme and metre. There is a sense of realism (making goals we know we can keep), but also optimism (achieving those goals we have put off for a while) before it's too late. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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That is a super Loop Poem, very relatable, and written with fine rhyme and metre. There is a sense of realism (making goals we know we can keep), but also optimism (achieving those goals we have put off for a while) before it's too late. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Wendy. I really appreciate your review. of my first loop poem. I hope I'll be able to overcome my tendancy to put off things during this coming year.
Comment from NanaGaye
This is a well written loop story. You are an amazing writer. Can't wait to review more of your writing. I'm new on Fanstory and really enjoying the contact with other writes around the World. Good luck with the loop contest, I also entered a poem
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This is a well written loop story. You are an amazing writer. Can't wait to review more of your writing. I'm new on Fanstory and really enjoying the contact with other writes around the World. Good luck with the loop contest, I also entered a poem
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for the nice review. I look forward to reading your work as well. I hope you enjoy FanStory as much as I do. Thank you so much for the lovely six stars.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A strong reminder for setting New Year goals, all skilfully accomplished in this challenging loop verse form! If I could add anything, Beth, it would be to say that, ideally, it might have had more flow (difficult to achieve, I know), rather than each line being a sentence which gives it a bit of a staccato feel. But, an excellent, strong and timely entry for the contest. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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A strong reminder for setting New Year goals, all skilfully accomplished in this challenging loop verse form! If I could add anything, Beth, it would be to say that, ideally, it might have had more flow (difficult to achieve, I know), rather than each line being a sentence which gives it a bit of a staccato feel. But, an excellent, strong and timely entry for the contest. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie. This is the first one of these I've ever tried and don't care for repetition. If I ever decide to do another one, I'll work on fewer sentences. I appreciate the review and suggestion.
Beth
Comment from Yusita
This is a very good poem and a great entry for the "Loop Poetry Contest". I tried writing a poem for this prompt but wasn't really getting somewhere I liked... but you have managed to do so and very well. Good job and good luck!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This is a very good poem and a great entry for the "Loop Poetry Contest". I tried writing a poem for this prompt but wasn't really getting somewhere I liked... but you have managed to do so and very well. Good job and good luck!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the review. I'm pleased that you feel this one works.
Beth
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Might reconsider in Stanza Five / Line Two, in order to keep the same word life making that line read "Life is too precious to waste any more."
Strong rhymes throughout.
Seems resolutions are always made, but most often broken.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Might reconsider in Stanza Five / Line Two, in order to keep the same word life making that line read "Life is too precious to waste any more."
Strong rhymes throughout.
Seems resolutions are always made, but most often broken.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you Brett. You are probably right about changing the line to make it like the other, so I did. I appreciate the review. Yes the resolutions are usually broken but one I made once to write daily in a journal lasted ten years. If I can just stop procrastinating I will be happy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this loop poem contest entry with us. I have been pondering about writing something as the New Year approaches and in the 3rd, I turn 70 years old. Not sure I'll get around to it. LOL I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you for sharing this loop poem contest entry with us. I have been pondering about writing something as the New Year approaches and in the 3rd, I turn 70 years old. Not sure I'll get around to it. LOL I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you Barbara, I appreciate the review. I'm not fond of loop poems but at least I have written one even though I'd never planned to .
Beth
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Happy New Year Beth. Very wise advice here in this well written loop poem. I was so interested in your words, I did not even notice the Loop.
I am one who never really has goals, but it is overdue to make
Plans. Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Happy New Year Beth. Very wise advice here in this well written loop poem. I was so interested in your words, I did not even notice the Loop.
I am one who never really has goals, but it is overdue to make
Plans. Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Mary. I find loop poem anoying and If you didn't notice the loop that is high praise. I really appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Navada
This is a very classy example of a tricky form to master. You explore your theme really well and it's deployed so deftly that it took me a few stanzas even to realise it was loop poetry! :)
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This is a very classy example of a tricky form to master. You explore your theme really well and it's deployed so deftly that it took me a few stanzas even to realise it was loop poetry! :)
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the review. It wasn't one of my favorite forms to write and I'm pleased you didn't realize it was a loop poeem at first.
Beth
Comment from Lea Tonin1
A fine entry for the loop poetry contest a wonderful job! You have followed the contest rules perfectly and created a little piece of magic. I see no issues with grammar subject matter aesthetics or sentence structure. A really nice entry very well done I hope you have the best day!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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A fine entry for the loop poetry contest a wonderful job! You have followed the contest rules perfectly and created a little piece of magic. I see no issues with grammar subject matter aesthetics or sentence structure. A really nice entry very well done I hope you have the best day!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lea. When you don't post every day, I really miss it but I do appreciate your reviewing of my posts.
Beth
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I've had terrible accident I'm running today though thank you my friend for I appreciate you!
Comment from patcelaw
This is so very well written that I didn't realize it was a loop or until I was over halfway through it. You have done a fantastic job with this and you are to be commended. I'm with you I think we need to set goals. I don't necessarily believe in resolutions, but I do believe in setting goals.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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This is so very well written that I didn't realize it was a loop or until I was over halfway through it. You have done a fantastic job with this and you are to be commended. I'm with you I think we need to set goals. I don't necessarily believe in resolutions, but I do believe in setting goals.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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I pleased you didn't recognize at first that it was a loop form. I'm so glad you consider it worthy of six stars.
Beth
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You?re so welcome