2023 Gypsy's Tanka
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Gypsy Queen,
I use my pen name for you this time around, as I feel the true hot blooded Gypsy running through these words... and even the blood red font added to that presentation.
A seamless story told In what is becoming one of my favorite forms that you compose. There is a depth of pure emotion that comes alive in the eyes of this reader. The seamless construct from verse to verse gives power to the credentials of this very fine poem.
Trapped, mesmerised in the want and questioning the commitment to an forever understanding... knowing, feeling, longing in memory of what that kind of love tasted like... how it consumed, captured in love within a one-sided devotion. Why do people play with others hearts like they are a disposable commodity? So cruel!
'With heart and soul
dipped in trust'... love that!
But trust is a lonely street walking down a one-way pavement littered with deception.
What a sad ending... to feel someone waiting in an illusion of what yesterday's truth held and what lies we tell ourselves
to keep all our today's stunted in unrealistic possibilities.
There is such a uniqueness within your construction... silent screams within a veiled apparition of someone physically alive, yet fading and dying inside.
Truly stunning MariVal... it stopped me in my tracks and demanded me to look within. There is no way one could pass over this poem with one mere read!
With our thoughts we create...
an alternate existence.
Warmest regards,
James
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Hi Gypsy Queen,
I use my pen name for you this time around, as I feel the true hot blooded Gypsy running through these words... and even the blood red font added to that presentation.
A seamless story told In what is becoming one of my favorite forms that you compose. There is a depth of pure emotion that comes alive in the eyes of this reader. The seamless construct from verse to verse gives power to the credentials of this very fine poem.
Trapped, mesmerised in the want and questioning the commitment to an forever understanding... knowing, feeling, longing in memory of what that kind of love tasted like... how it consumed, captured in love within a one-sided devotion. Why do people play with others hearts like they are a disposable commodity? So cruel!
'With heart and soul
dipped in trust'... love that!
But trust is a lonely street walking down a one-way pavement littered with deception.
What a sad ending... to feel someone waiting in an illusion of what yesterday's truth held and what lies we tell ourselves
to keep all our today's stunted in unrealistic possibilities.
There is such a uniqueness within your construction... silent screams within a veiled apparition of someone physically alive, yet fading and dying inside.
Truly stunning MariVal... it stopped me in my tracks and demanded me to look within. There is no way one could pass over this poem with one mere read!
With our thoughts we create...
an alternate existence.
Warmest regards,
James
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Hello, James,
Eventhough it has been 13 years since my husband, Robert, left me, the grief is still alive in my heart but is bury deep in my heart. I hardly ever think of him anymore but yesterday I read Barbara's love story chapter and it made me very sad. It's not just the grief of what we had at the beginning of our marriage, it's also the grief of being in love. I was so inlove with him. And he was very cruel after he left me, coming back for two weeks to leave me again over and over. For five years I couldn't even hear his name without breaking down and wanting to die.
I yearn for true love, I'm never going to have it in this life...what a waste of time and heartache.
Anyway... sorry about that. You really understand the meaning of my poem. I tried to convey the way I felt.
Thank you very much for the exceptional six stars review.
Con cariņo,
Marival
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Never allow the belief in your heart that true love will not resurface in this life... I wish that love for you!
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Thank you, James, you are very kind. I'm lucky we are friends.
Cariņo
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You may be lucky, I'm blessed!
gracias
Gracias querida dulce amiga.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent gogyohka poem Gypsy, certainly in the style of the original form, with articulation that's spot on, and the language you express is quite wonderful, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent gogyohka poem Gypsy, certainly in the style of the original form, with articulation that's spot on, and the language you express is quite wonderful, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words . Happy holidays!
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from patcelaw
This is a lovely poem for contest I wish you a very best in the contest. May you have a lovely Christmas and may God richly bless you with all the good things that he can give me.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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This is a lovely poem for contest I wish you a very best in the contest. May you have a lovely Christmas and may God richly bless you with all the good things that he can give me.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words . Happy holidays!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Nicki Nance
This is a poignant tale told in what seems to be a challenging format. You truly conquered it. Your presentation it perfect
The sentiment, sadly, is universally relatable.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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This is a poignant tale told in what seems to be a challenging format. You truly conquered it. Your presentation it perfect
The sentiment, sadly, is universally relatable.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words . Happy holidays!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----and a sad reminder of how I felt, fooling myself the she'd suddenly remember what we had and come back, that false hope lasted for about a year and a half, thinking every time the phone rang it'd be her. Deep inside I knew the truth, but it's less painful to pretend
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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----and a sad reminder of how I felt, fooling myself the she'd suddenly remember what we had and come back, that false hope lasted for about a year and a half, thinking every time the phone rang it'd be her. Deep inside I knew the truth, but it's less painful to pretend
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Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words . Happy holidays!
Gypsy hugs
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Merry Christmas, Gypsy
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ah, the old "it's not you" BS.
Made me smile. I really liked the color scheme on this one.
It had more of a bitter sting, showing a different side to your talent.
Almost as fun as discovering your horror side.
Great. Six for me. Merry Christmas!!!
Douglas
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Ah, the old "it's not you" BS.
Made me smile. I really liked the color scheme on this one.
It had more of a bitter sting, showing a different side to your talent.
Almost as fun as discovering your horror side.
Great. Six for me. Merry Christmas!!!
Douglas
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much, Douglas, for your exceptional six stars review and kind words . Happy holidays!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
aw this was so sad...
"men - can't live with 'em - sure can live without 'em" LOL!
a great gogyohka suite!
excellent imagery
and smooth flow -
cool pic, too
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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aw this was so sad...
"men - can't live with 'em - sure can live without 'em" LOL!
a great gogyohka suite!
excellent imagery
and smooth flow -
cool pic, too
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words . Happy holidays!
Gypsy hugs