2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 82 "the Full Moon and the Leaf"-
26 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
oooh nice... love the last leaf falling - so much one can do with it!
great imagery and smooth flow
good tanka form - love the lonesome tree line!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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oooh nice... love the last leaf falling - so much one can do with it!
great imagery and smooth flow
good tanka form - love the lonesome tree line!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Shelley
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Daylily
This is another fine example of your Japanese short forms. Tanka is my favorite and it is lovely the way you combine just the right artwork to accent your messages. Beautifully presented, my friend. X Lily
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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This is another fine example of your Japanese short forms. Tanka is my favorite and it is lovely the way you combine just the right artwork to accent your messages. Beautifully presented, my friend. X Lily
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Lily
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Lisasview
What a beautiful poem dear Gypsy. You have such a lovely soothing poetic voice that comes out in all your poetry.
Really so very special to read........
Lisa, sick...so using the day to read and review
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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What a beautiful poem dear Gypsy. You have such a lovely soothing poetic voice that comes out in all your poetry.
Really so very special to read........
Lisa, sick...so using the day to read and review
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Lisa
Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. I hope you feel better soon.
Gypsy hugs
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Already on my 6th day and better... Thank goodness..
Thank you,
Lisa
Comment from zanya
Evocative and wistful as Nature's ways unfold unerringly beneath the haunting lunar light and seasons change while we humans gaze in awe( if we remember to look skyward!!)
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Evocative and wistful as Nature's ways unfold unerringly beneath the haunting lunar light and seasons change while we humans gaze in awe( if we remember to look skyward!!)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Zantac
Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jacob1395
This was so well thought out and so well written. I loved your choice of words in this piece which really made your poem flow well. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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This was so well thought out and so well written. I loved your choice of words in this piece which really made your poem flow well. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Jacob
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Yesterday I got out out both parts of "Morris Steinmetz Saw Something". Good responses so far. I think it is my best short story yet. I had a very hard time cutting my story in half to be read here. How do you trim down a poem that is fully formed in your head, and then contest rules require it to be smaller?Good poem here, and the pictures are lovely. Karen
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Yesterday I got out out both parts of "Morris Steinmetz Saw Something". Good responses so far. I think it is my best short story yet. I had a very hard time cutting my story in half to be read here. How do you trim down a poem that is fully formed in your head, and then contest rules require it to be smaller?Good poem here, and the pictures are lovely. Karen
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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The art of Japanese poetry it's to be succinct making every word count, like a concentrated orange juice. It just takes learning the rules and practice.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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I am getting good at the little ones and need the branch out, tanka is next. :-)
Comment from Paul Manton
I loved this tanka, Gypsy. I rarely get to review your work, but I would have done so even for 2¢ this time. The two opposed images of the moon balanced on the bough and the surrender of the falling leaves as a dual love offering is a beautiful idea.
Thank you for this lovely picture.
Paul
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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I loved this tanka, Gypsy. I rarely get to review your work, but I would have done so even for 2¢ this time. The two opposed images of the moon balanced on the bough and the surrender of the falling leaves as a dual love offering is a beautiful idea.
Thank you for this lovely picture.
Paul
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Paul
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Welcome Gypsy. It was a lovely poem.
Paul
Comment from royowen
I think this is an excellent tanka, and certainly, the narrative fits the rather seductive theme, and leads it to the beginning seduction and leads to the final climax of the poem, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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I think this is an excellent tanka, and certainly, the narrative fits the rather seductive theme, and leads it to the beginning seduction and leads to the final climax of the poem, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Roy
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Welcome
Comment from Navada
What a beautiful exploration of the relationship between the moon and the lonesome tree. I really enjoyed your use of imagery, especially the juxtaposition of "balanced" and "complete surrender". Lovely work!
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What a beautiful exploration of the relationship between the moon and the lonesome tree. I really enjoyed your use of imagery, especially the juxtaposition of "balanced" and "complete surrender". Lovely work!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
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Nevada
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from karenina
It does seem as if all of nature is interconnected..m
Nobody expresses that better than you--and with elegant presentation!
Love vibrates throughout the universe, and, more specifically, through your verse!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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It does seem as if all of nature is interconnected..m
Nobody expresses that better than you--and with elegant presentation!
Love vibrates throughout the universe, and, more specifically, through your verse!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you, sister,
I also believe everything is interconnected... the moon, the tree, karenina, marival, a potato.... lol. Seriously, it's true.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my Tanka. I hope you and your family are well.
Love you
Marival
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I'm POSITIVE about "Karenina and Potato!"
(Oh my, I'm laughing so hard!)
:)