Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another excellent chapter with skilful dialogue and humour and, seemingly, eliminating Bill from any suspicion. I lok forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Debbie
Small edits: they move around ta(l)king and laughing; perhaps not repeat sorority a second time so close together (sisterhood?); Bill lets a half smile come to his face (no apostrophe with 'lets').
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Another excellent chapter with skilful dialogue and humour and, seemingly, eliminating Bill from any suspicion. I lok forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Debbie
Small edits: they move around ta(l)king and laughing; perhaps not repeat sorority a second time so close together (sisterhood?); Bill lets a half smile come to his face (no apostrophe with 'lets').
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Debbie. Thanks for the help. I'm glad you liked it. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice and interesting chapter. And nicely written. Good work.
Miranda didn't learn much about the case, though.
Best wishes and good luck with the book.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Very nice and interesting chapter. And nicely written. Good work.
Miranda didn't learn much about the case, though.
Best wishes and good luck with the book.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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It was the second part of the strip club chapter. It did help Rita though. LOL. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter and glad Miranda found Rita's hubby. Glad the cop had a good chat with the bouncer as well. I think you have another chapter up ahead?
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This was a great chapter and glad Miranda found Rita's hubby. Glad the cop had a good chat with the bouncer as well. I think you have another chapter up ahead?
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
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The second posting should have been disabled. The title shows a different heading. Don't bother reviewing. Thanks so much for this nice review. Gretchen
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It was disabled
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Miranda can be persuasive and it sounds like she always gets her own way. I'm not sure Mitch is equipped to deal with her. Another fine chapter Gretchen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
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Miranda can be persuasive and it sounds like she always gets her own way. I'm not sure Mitch is equipped to deal with her. Another fine chapter Gretchen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
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I believe that Mitch would agree with you most of the time. But he's in love. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This time of the week I don't have a single six left. But this was once again, a six deserving post. I really enjoyed reading this one. Both Miranda and Mitch had a surprise, Bill wasn't cheating, but just trying to earn a living to feed and cloth his family, and Mitch finds out the bouncer wants to be a cop. Excellent result for both of them. Loved it, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
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This time of the week I don't have a single six left. But this was once again, a six deserving post. I really enjoyed reading this one. Both Miranda and Mitch had a surprise, Bill wasn't cheating, but just trying to earn a living to feed and cloth his family, and Mitch finds out the bouncer wants to be a cop. Excellent result for both of them. Loved it, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much. It was a boring chapter to be honest but it needed to be. Thanks again for the virtual six. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
This post was amusing. Mitch wanted to anywhere but there and hated her revealing he was a cop. The bouncer wants to be a cop. Bill is afraid to tell his wife. I've noticed over the years men hate to admit to losing a job. They take it as an indication they are no longer valuable.
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This post was amusing. Mitch wanted to anywhere but there and hated her revealing he was a cop. The bouncer wants to be a cop. Bill is afraid to tell his wife. I've noticed over the years men hate to admit to losing a job. They take it as an indication they are no longer valuable.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
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A failure and invaluable. Being let go is a definite blow to the ego. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Miranda is such a good person, fancy finding where Bill works, discovering he works in a nightclub, which is a false world of makeup and adjusted boobs, I'm surprised anyone wants to work there, he's lost his job, and that's all he can do, Miranda tells him his wife thinks he doesn't love her anymore, just tell her he loves her. Beautifully written Gretchen blessings Roy
Typo: Wa(l)king and talking.
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Miranda is such a good person, fancy finding where Bill works, discovering he works in a nightclub, which is a false world of makeup and adjusted boobs, I'm surprised anyone wants to work there, he's lost his job, and that's all he can do, Miranda tells him his wife thinks he doesn't love her anymore, just tell her he loves her. Beautifully written Gretchen blessings Roy
Typo: Wa(l)king and talking.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Roy. Thanks for catching that spag. I can't imagine being immersed in that culture. Gretchen
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Nor me
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm not sure what's going on, but I just reviewed this post while you're posting this one. HMMM, it's still one of the best posts you've posted. I really like this story a lot.
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I'm not sure what's going on, but I just reviewed this post while you're posting this one. HMMM, it's still one of the best posts you've posted. I really like this story a lot.
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
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My internet was acting up and I wasn't sure if it saved. Then said I had already posted a chapter by that name. I went in and changed the title. I'm not good with technology. Lol. Thanks for reviewing twice. Gretchen
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me neither. I do understand.
