Fed Up With Love
A tongue-in-cheek tribute to lovers of all kinds19 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I love you sense of humor, but your rich vocabulary colors this piece, making it a delight to read. I am glad that no harm was done to the lovers involved, regardless of their shortcomings. Well done, Navada. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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I love you sense of humor, but your rich vocabulary colors this piece, making it a delight to read. I am glad that no harm was done to the lovers involved, regardless of their shortcomings. Well done, Navada. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words and your very generous six stars! xx
Comment from Rachelle Allen
HAHAHAHAHAA. "No actual lovers were harmed in the creation of this tribute." HAHAHAHAAH.
What a COOL pattern to this poem!! What is its form? It was SO fun to read aloud, and you kept your meter so perfect, it sounded like music! Great job. (And truer words were never written. I second every part of your battlecry here!!) I hope this does well in the contest. xo
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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HAHAHAHAHAA. "No actual lovers were harmed in the creation of this tribute." HAHAHAHAAH.
What a COOL pattern to this poem!! What is its form? It was SO fun to read aloud, and you kept your meter so perfect, it sounded like music! Great job. (And truer words were never written. I second every part of your battlecry here!!) I hope this does well in the contest. xo
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you so very much, Rachelle! I'll admit I wasn't conscious of following a particular metre on the occasion - it just kind of flowed. I just tried to keep the later stanzas consistent with the first, :)
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Seriously? To me, that was so "professional," I thought it was a poetic form!! You talented wench, you! You must be a music teacher or something!! lol. Great job!! xo
Comment from JSD
Most entertaining and amusing. Obviously you don't mean a word of it .... do you? Although I can understand the fatigue one feels about schmaltzy love poems. Great piece of well-structured writing. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Most entertaining and amusing. Obviously you don't mean a word of it .... do you? Although I can understand the fatigue one feels about schmaltzy love poems. Great piece of well-structured writing. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much! (I think it's mostly for effect.) :)
Comment from BethShelby
This poem is so funny and because it is going to be different from the other love poems, I think it stand a great chance of being a winner. I don't my long marriage fits any of those catagories. Mine was a more realistic love to man who was caring and faithful and made a perfect partner for me.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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This poem is so funny and because it is going to be different from the other love poems, I think it stand a great chance of being a winner. I don't my long marriage fits any of those catagories. Mine was a more realistic love to man who was caring and faithful and made a perfect partner for me.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Beth! I really appreciate your kind words and the six stars! xx
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hiya!
I enjoyed the lighthearted touch here, enhanced by clever rhyming and an extremely bouncy meter which kept this thing swinging along at a great pace. I was a little puzzled that you changed the pattern with the final line of stanza 3 - the rhymes are still there but the meter is spoiled by the addition of extra syllables.
Still a lovely piece and the message rings out loud and clear. I particularly liked the verse about the Jane Austen types. Sometimes I wish those 'lovers' would pull the rod out of their ass and simply say what they feel.
Steve
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Hiya!
I enjoyed the lighthearted touch here, enhanced by clever rhyming and an extremely bouncy meter which kept this thing swinging along at a great pace. I was a little puzzled that you changed the pattern with the final line of stanza 3 - the rhymes are still there but the meter is spoiled by the addition of extra syllables.
Still a lovely piece and the message rings out loud and clear. I particularly liked the verse about the Jane Austen types. Sometimes I wish those 'lovers' would pull the rod out of their ass and simply say what they feel.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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HA! Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A humourous read Navada portraying some wimpy, boisterous, loud and emotionless lovers.
I particularly liked your ending lines in each verse, very clever. The answer to your final question, on second thoughts :)
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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A humourous read Navada portraying some wimpy, boisterous, loud and emotionless lovers.
I particularly liked your ending lines in each verse, very clever. The answer to your final question, on second thoughts :)
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is creative, well rhymed and metered and a joy to read. Talking of these kind of lovers. A couple at an airport recently shouted swear words at each other in an awful public scene. They were not embarrassed and their display was a tirade of hate that seemed to be the norm for them. It was shocking and also disgusting, but these two were attached at the hip. A skilful post from a talented pen and you earned by last sixth star of the week, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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This is creative, well rhymed and metered and a joy to read. Talking of these kind of lovers. A couple at an airport recently shouted swear words at each other in an awful public scene. They were not embarrassed and their display was a tirade of hate that seemed to be the norm for them. It was shocking and also disgusting, but these two were attached at the hip. A skilful post from a talented pen and you earned by last sixth star of the week, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Wow! Thank you so much, Dolly - I really appreciate that! xx
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You are most welcome x
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I like your humorous take on all those varying types of lovers as portrayed in film and literature. You took us from the prim Austen stories to the modern shock-language ones. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Lol. I like your humorous take on all those varying types of lovers as portrayed in film and literature. You took us from the prim Austen stories to the modern shock-language ones. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much! xx
Comment from jim vecchio
None of these writer know true relationships. People do not argue in a gentile manner or stomp and scream over sexuality. They sit, watch shows like 90 Dy Fiancée and yell about taking out the garbage.
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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None of these writer know true relationships. People do not argue in a gentile manner or stomp and scream over sexuality. They sit, watch shows like 90 Dy Fiancée and yell about taking out the garbage.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Too true! Real life and the ideal seldom overlap.
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Thank you for a great post!
