Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I'm wondering now how her mother is going to take the fact she has had a stray living under her stairs, but I'm glad you ran away from the guy your friend set you up with. Apparently her mother must have raised a slut because she does seem to mind sleeping with guys for extra money.
Apparently you like in Western Canada. I had pictured you in East Canada. I did a Canadian Rocky tour once and I loved western Canada. It is beautiful.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023

Oh, I'm so glad you liked it. Canada, especially the West Coast. What's called? The Southern West Coast is called the at Florida of Canada. It is the warmest spot in the entire country. But we also have a chunk of desert arid land as they call it right in what we call the okanagan. Yes, she was pimping me out. Alright, got that right? My rage was over the top. I am happy to say that my would be pinned. Got out of the business and she's the postal lady delivers the mail every day. Hope for everyone I guess eh? Thank you again, my friend.
I'm late to see you here i'm i'm always unhappy for your comments. I hope you enjoyed your thanksgiving!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Those mountains sound wonderful Lea.

This girl is no friend of yours and what would her Mother think if she knew what she was doing at night? Oh my goodness Lea, she is a pimp! I am glad you refused to let yourself into this murky world, but with nowhere to live and no money, I fear for you. Another great chapter, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023

Yeah, unfortunately, I've been in that spot before. Why it's fine because I knew how to survive. But I didn't know how to fit into the real world. Thank you Dolly, I'm so happy you're hanging reading these chapters. I know they're tough some of them. But as usual, you understand me. You always have valuable things to say thank you so much!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Your story is a powerful and confronting one, and yes, I can see that some chapters will indeed be filled with horror and despair. A few points to edit, as below. Best wishes for your books.
Wendy
Edit: Bird's (birds)
We are nestled in the Valley (valley)
Such (So) much so, it gives me peace.
"Hey man, I tried to help you." She said. ("Hey man, I tried to help you," she said.

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 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023

I really appreciate the easy corrections that you've seen and your suggestions for edit. Those are like gold to me as far as much I need to learn. I'm a new writer and When I write, I just tend to shoot from the hit. Sometimes my fingers don't cool as fast as my mouth. Lol. Thank you again so much. I appreciate your fine review and your evening and I hope your holiday was grand!

Comment from Jacob1395

Excellent

I was really interested to know what happened after you left E and the men behind. I can't believe how E treated you as well, and how she blamed you for running away. I don't blame you at all for reacting in the way that you did. Another powerful, brilliantly told chapter, Lea.

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 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023

Thank you again Jacob. You have some really good way of thinking about you. That's what I like about men, there practical thinkers and don't beat around the bush. Your words are kind and thoughtful and right to the meat of the matter. I'very much appreciate that. Thank you again my friend. Hope you have a great evening!