Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Other World Pt2"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from Chuck Keller
Discovering the world outside the horror can be fun and occasionally dangerous.
Sounds like you were lucky to have people around to take care of you.
That's always helpful.
At least you're finally free of the main danger.
Thanks again for sharing this
Hopefully it will help others
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Discovering the world outside the horror can be fun and occasionally dangerous.
Sounds like you were lucky to have people around to take care of you.
That's always helpful.
At least you're finally free of the main danger.
Thanks again for sharing this
Hopefully it will help others
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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I hope it will help others too. My journey is far from over.
I think I'll join you never ends until we leave this world. Thank you so much. You're care and your kind comments mean the world to me. Thank you again have an awesome day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Still so vulnerable and child-like on the one hand but emerging into a butterfly on the other. I loved it when you giggled and when you ate like a horse and when someone seemed to be looking after you. It felt a bit like a coming of age. You were on the cusp of something. But hopefully it doesn't get too dark for you as you have yet to reveal. There are some small edits and it would help to have another proofread. "We (?) around the corner..."; We reach(ed) the door; "taking my cloth(e)s off etc. But another excellent chapter as your story moves on. Debbie x
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Still so vulnerable and child-like on the one hand but emerging into a butterfly on the other. I loved it when you giggled and when you ate like a horse and when someone seemed to be looking after you. It felt a bit like a coming of age. You were on the cusp of something. But hopefully it doesn't get too dark for you as you have yet to reveal. There are some small edits and it would help to have another proofread. "We (?) around the corner..."; We reach(ed) the door; "taking my cloth(e)s off etc. But another excellent chapter as your story moves on. Debbie x
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie once again yes I Our mutual friend is looking at it. I'm so grateful for everyone here. Truly, I am . Too many great writers like yourself. And really just a small person in the world of giants. There's no doubt about it. You're a current person you're compassion. Help stand me up and I appreciate it so much have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear Lea, I thought something like this was about to happen. So young, you and your friend and so vulnerable with men about. You were under age and the law will be broken here, but will anyone care and with those to blame be prosecuted? Another fine chapter Lea, just one small edit:
(taking my (clothes) off).
Love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Oh dear Lea, I thought something like this was about to happen. So young, you and your friend and so vulnerable with men about. You were under age and the law will be broken here, but will anyone care and with those to blame be prosecuted? Another fine chapter Lea, just one small edit:
(taking my (clothes) off).
Love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Hi Dolly and good morning! Unfortunately, these things are hard to prove my word against his blah. Blah blah wow in my experience at that time I was generally a loser. I went through a few things definitely. I was so unprepared for anything outside of the home. I figured pay the bills go to work you're good. So much more to it than that. Thank you so much for your fine review and your fine rating. I hoping you're having a great day!
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I hope you got over all this and moved on without letting it linger Lea, love Dolly x
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Writing about it has made me cry quite a bit. Probably because it's a wound that's been hard to heal. But it must be told cause these are the repercussions. Bad parents who are not knowing the world around me. But I know how to survive. But it's okay. It's good to cry. It takes some of the power away. Let's go some of the pain. Thank you my friend I appreciate you very much. This too shall pass. Thank you for your review. I very much appreciate it your inside and you empty are amazing. As are you thank you very much have a great day!
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I admire your strength of character Lea x x x
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Thank you!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You're doing a great job telling this story. The reader can feel the emotion of the situation.
Cmon baby," The creep said. (lower case 't' on 'the)
"I told you to back off." Said the sandy (off, " said the I'm not noting any more dialogue, but there's more to fix))
a little touchy feely but there showing me interest. (there???)
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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You're doing a great job telling this story. The reader can feel the emotion of the situation.
Cmon baby," The creep said. (lower case 't' on 'the)
"I told you to back off." Said the sandy (off, " said the I'm not noting any more dialogue, but there's more to fix))
a little touchy feely but there showing me interest. (there???)
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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I thank you again really. I'm so happy to see you're like number one on the list. So what you have to say is genuine and gold appreciated by me! Thank you again for your fine rating and review. I hope you have an awesome day!
