Cassie Is Missing
A Detective's family is threatened.14 total reviews
Comment from Alison Greenwood
I have never really read a story that condensed a thriller into such a short exercise. It definitely made me want to keep reading and engaged me. But I was a bit confused by the point of view...it seemed to switch from first person to third person. I would have liked to see more emotion from Sullivan, but I suppose that all comes from writing a longer piece.
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I have never really read a story that condensed a thriller into such a short exercise. It definitely made me want to keep reading and engaged me. But I was a bit confused by the point of view...it seemed to switch from first person to third person. I would have liked to see more emotion from Sullivan, but I suppose that all comes from writing a longer piece.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
Comment from lancellot
This is a face paced story, maybe a bit to fast considering the leads, and distances between scenes, it makes it hard to get a since of time. But, I understand the realistic word limits of a story on Fanstory. What should be three thousand words as to be a third to get readers.
Good work.
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This is a face paced story, maybe a bit to fast considering the leads, and distances between scenes, it makes it hard to get a since of time. But, I understand the realistic word limits of a story on Fanstory. What should be three thousand words as to be a third to get readers.
Good work.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This was hard for me to read due to the topic. But you did this well. My favorite things to read are mystery and suspense with comedy. When I watch it's usually from BritBox channel Right now, I am watching "Death in Paradise". Good Work. Karen
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This was hard for me to read due to the topic. But you did this well. My favorite things to read are mystery and suspense with comedy. When I watch it's usually from BritBox channel Right now, I am watching "Death in Paradise". Good Work. Karen
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
That's an excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery and authentic dialogues, which will engage readers. Very well written. Thank you for sharing this!
Best wishes.
Alex
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That's an excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery and authentic dialogues, which will engage readers. Very well written. Thank you for sharing this!
Best wishes.
Alex
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
