Guided by Faith
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Comment from Sankey
Wow! What a revealing chapter and so much drama. Who was the creep who sought to kill Emma? Or whatever he intended? Was he the Crown driver? This deserves a SEVEN but we don't have those. Excellent work. Hope Seth is ok.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Wow! What a revealing chapter and so much drama. Who was the creep who sought to kill Emma? Or whatever he intended? Was he the Crown driver? This deserves a SEVEN but we don't have those. Excellent work. Hope Seth is ok.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the support. The answers will come out slowly starting next Sunday.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a great chapter you have penned. It is so full of excitement and wondering for me. I hope Seth comes to his senses with Emma. Thank you for sharing with us. It is nice to see Emma coming around a little bit. I look forward to the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Barbara, This is a great chapter you have penned. It is so full of excitement and wondering for me. I hope Seth comes to his senses with Emma. Thank you for sharing with us. It is nice to see Emma coming around a little bit. I look forward to the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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I think Seth is beginning understand exactly what Emma means to him. Now, will Emma feel the same. Thank you for the kind reveiw.
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It seems Emma has kept a lot of secrets of her past, almost to her self. I hope somehow it all works out good for them both; little Molly and Ace too!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, where in the world did all those mean exchanges, crack talk, and shootings come from in this chapter. You've certainly ramped things up, and as for me, I always like a little walk on the wild side. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Wow, where in the world did all those mean exchanges, crack talk, and shootings come from in this chapter. You've certainly ramped things up, and as for me, I always like a little walk on the wild side. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement. I appreciate it, especially coming from you.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
So she's adopted that's interesting. Your story develops really well your character's Emma Keith susan et cetera Are all believable characters because of the way you've written it. Things that could happen everyday or not at all. That to me is the mark of a great writer and I appreciate this one. I've read a couple of the chapters. I like it quite a mark please keep writing and have yourself a great day!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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So she's adopted that's interesting. Your story develops really well your character's Emma Keith susan et cetera Are all believable characters because of the way you've written it. Things that could happen everyday or not at all. That to me is the mark of a great writer and I appreciate this one. I've read a couple of the chapters. I like it quite a mark please keep writing and have yourself a great day!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
There's a lot of action here, Barbara, and I'm still reeling a bit from it all. After the steady pace at the start, we had the contrast of the lone gunman and the threat to poor Emma who seems to be targeted on a regular basis. Then Seth was shot but, hopefully not seriously as he was wearing his bulletproof vest. Emma then dispatches the gunman very efficiently and the level of tension subsides (and I can breathe again!). Maybe, at this point, we might have concluded the chapter on a bit of a cliff-hanger as I found the adoption details perhaps rather overshadowed by previous events. I'm not sure about the thoughts in italics, for me, a little unnecessary and slightly jarring. But what a story, Barbara! You know how to keep your reader fully engaged and on the edge of their seat. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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There's a lot of action here, Barbara, and I'm still reeling a bit from it all. After the steady pace at the start, we had the contrast of the lone gunman and the threat to poor Emma who seems to be targeted on a regular basis. Then Seth was shot but, hopefully not seriously as he was wearing his bulletproof vest. Emma then dispatches the gunman very efficiently and the level of tension subsides (and I can breathe again!). Maybe, at this point, we might have concluded the chapter on a bit of a cliff-hanger as I found the adoption details perhaps rather overshadowed by previous events. I'm not sure about the thoughts in italics, for me, a little unnecessary and slightly jarring. But what a story, Barbara! You know how to keep your reader fully engaged and on the edge of their seat. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Standards of writing state thought should be in italics. Thank you for the kind review. Seth does not have the bullet proof vest on any longer. That happened in the morning the shooting happened at night after his workout. The next chapter is slower and explains some things.
Comment from Jacob1395
This was a really engaging and tense chapter Barbara. I could feel the tension especially when the gunman opened fire and I hope Seth is going to be okay. I really enjoyed it, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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This was a really engaging and tense chapter Barbara. I could feel the tension especially when the gunman opened fire and I hope Seth is going to be okay. I really enjoyed it, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Emma watched him WALK away - instead of walked
At Emma's, Seth opened the cruiser door - add the comma
At first, they sat in silence with only the sound of her crying - eliminate "the"
I don't want you to - instead of too
Wow! A lot happened in this chapter! I want Emma to forgive her parents (although she has every right to be angry), but the hug when she gets out of the car makes me feel she is forgiving them too quickly. Emma has a wall between her and Seth that is just coming down, and she still won't stand up to Peggy. I wonder why she is so quick to embrace the people who kept a monumental secret from her all these years. Especially since the whole town knew.
Otherwise, we got a lot of story out of this chapter. I don't mind the longer chapter; breaking this up would have stopped the action in an action-packed scene.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Emma watched him WALK away - instead of walked
At Emma's, Seth opened the cruiser door - add the comma
At first, they sat in silence with only the sound of her crying - eliminate "the"
I don't want you to - instead of too
Wow! A lot happened in this chapter! I want Emma to forgive her parents (although she has every right to be angry), but the hug when she gets out of the car makes me feel she is forgiving them too quickly. Emma has a wall between her and Seth that is just coming down, and she still won't stand up to Peggy. I wonder why she is so quick to embrace the people who kept a monumental secret from her all these years. Especially since the whole town knew.
Otherwise, we got a lot of story out of this chapter. I don't mind the longer chapter; breaking this up would have stopped the action in an action-packed scene.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you for all the help. I have made the changes. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Wendy G
A lot of drama here, but it was a bit confusing at times. Emma seemed more upset about finding out that she was adopted than about the fact that she had shot someone, who started to molest her but in fact didn't get very far. It is probably different in the US but over here she would be in big trouble. Also she doesn't seem to ask who her molester is or why. Was it the guy in the car?
And in reality, if most of the town knew she was adopted it would be surprising that her parents didn't tell her, as she was bound to find out sooner or later. I hope I am not nit-picking, because I did enjoy the chapter with its drama.
Wendy
Edit: "After (being) given his room number, she hurried to him."
"I don't want you too." (to)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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A lot of drama here, but it was a bit confusing at times. Emma seemed more upset about finding out that she was adopted than about the fact that she had shot someone, who started to molest her but in fact didn't get very far. It is probably different in the US but over here she would be in big trouble. Also she doesn't seem to ask who her molester is or why. Was it the guy in the car?
And in reality, if most of the town knew she was adopted it would be surprising that her parents didn't tell her, as she was bound to find out sooner or later. I hope I am not nit-picking, because I did enjoy the chapter with its drama.
Wendy
Edit: "After (being) given his room number, she hurried to him."
"I don't want you too." (to)
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Sunday's post will go into a little more detail. Nobody at this point know who the guy she shot is. He's unnamed. More answers will come out in Sunday's post. Emma will not have problems. The guy broke into her house at gunpoint, held a knife on her, and was going to rape her. She had a good shoot. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
28 years ago, my eldest daughter brought a baby to us. This child was the mixed-race baby of a young prostitute who was badly in need of care. My wife and I got the approval of the mother and the court to raise this baby. We did not adopt her, but to this day she refers to my wife and me, as mom and dad. She is married and is raising two boys and an absolutely adorable little girl of her own. She is well-adapted and is successful as a fully functioning adult wife and mother.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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28 years ago, my eldest daughter brought a baby to us. This child was the mixed-race baby of a young prostitute who was badly in need of care. My wife and I got the approval of the mother and the court to raise this baby. We did not adopt her, but to this day she refers to my wife and me, as mom and dad. She is married and is raising two boys and an absolutely adorable little girl of her own. She is well-adapted and is successful as a fully functioning adult wife and mother.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you for sharing your story. A reviewer said it's unrealistic that Emma is so well off after the circumstances of her birth. I disagree. I know more situations that end up happy. Thank you for the kind review.
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Some people make asinine statements from their own suspicions, not from fact. They look and sound like fools.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Okay, this was full of a bunch of emotions. I'm glad you didn't cut it up. It would have list its velocity in two parts. All I want to know is, Who was it? Who attacked her and put Seth in the hospital. I was afraid the perp was going to hurt Ace. Scary chapter. I loved it. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Okay, this was full of a bunch of emotions. I'm glad you didn't cut it up. It would have list its velocity in two parts. All I want to know is, Who was it? Who attacked her and put Seth in the hospital. I was afraid the perp was going to hurt Ace. Scary chapter. I loved it. Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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All of the answers will come out Sunday. Thank you for the kind review.