Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "The Noose"Biography/Supernatural
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh God, this deserves so much more than I can give. I'm so sorry and feel genuinely emotional about this. It's utterly horrible, Lea, and makes me weep. I don't think it could be more vivid if I'd actually been there and only wish I had been to protect you. No wonder your computer was reacting too! Your amazing ability to capture that traumatic experience stuns me and it seems absolutely trivial but I must just draw attention to some edits perhaps: "...drop my pants and be(n)d over the bed;"It was carried (what?) anyway knowing what was in store." Did he actually walk on your back? Your description: "Only the fire on my backside registered life" is superbly evocative. This is an exceptional write that chills to the bone. Well done for feeling able to express so powerfully this horror. Take care Lea, Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Oh God, this deserves so much more than I can give. I'm so sorry and feel genuinely emotional about this. It's utterly horrible, Lea, and makes me weep. I don't think it could be more vivid if I'd actually been there and only wish I had been to protect you. No wonder your computer was reacting too! Your amazing ability to capture that traumatic experience stuns me and it seems absolutely trivial but I must just draw attention to some edits perhaps: "...drop my pants and be(n)d over the bed;"It was carried (what?) anyway knowing what was in store." Did he actually walk on your back? Your description: "Only the fire on my backside registered life" is superbly evocative. This is an exceptional write that chills to the bone. Well done for feeling able to express so powerfully this horror. Take care Lea, Debbie
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I thank you again, Debbie. I'm so glad that you are reading on and can relate, your comments and suggestions for edit are welcome. All are really good. Thank you. I really appreciate you having awesome day!
Comment from Jim Wile
Your stepfather was one sick fuck. Only a perverted psychopath makes his 16-year-old stepdaughter pull her pants down so he can strike her bare bottom with a belt. There's a special place in hell for people like him, and if he's not already there, he's sure to be one day.
The pain and humiliation you had to bear is very hard to imagine, but your account of this was fabulous. I also loved how you sandwiched it between the sort of idyllic, calm, and beautiful autumn evening you were experiencing in the present. That made what happened to you all the more horrible yet compelling. Great piece of writing, Lea. - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Your stepfather was one sick fuck. Only a perverted psychopath makes his 16-year-old stepdaughter pull her pants down so he can strike her bare bottom with a belt. There's a special place in hell for people like him, and if he's not already there, he's sure to be one day.
The pain and humiliation you had to bear is very hard to imagine, but your account of this was fabulous. I also loved how you sandwiched it between the sort of idyllic, calm, and beautiful autumn evening you were experiencing in the present. That made what happened to you all the more horrible yet compelling. Great piece of writing, Lea. - Jim
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you again, my friend for this amazing review and the fine rating thanks so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh Lea, this is such a painful read as the violence inflicted on you is beyond my comprehension and what you suffered should never be suffered by any child by someone who is meant to care.
It is a pity you did not just leave and go straight to the Police station and show them what he did. Has he never been remorseful since? Although this experience is difficult to read, this story has to be told, not just for you as a cathartic exercise but for others to know how badly you were treated.
Did your Mother not feel for you in your suffering? It is so very sad Lea. The contrast of the peace in Autumn you write about at the beginning and the horror that you faced is a stark contrast in life. I am so sorry to hear you suffered like this and your Stepfather has never been punished for his deed. Your Stepfather is capable of inflicting terrible injuries and one day he will go too far if he is not stopped.
Just one suggestion for this line:
(pants and (bend) over the bed).
Another fine chapter in your life story Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Oh Lea, this is such a painful read as the violence inflicted on you is beyond my comprehension and what you suffered should never be suffered by any child by someone who is meant to care.
It is a pity you did not just leave and go straight to the Police station and show them what he did. Has he never been remorseful since? Although this experience is difficult to read, this story has to be told, not just for you as a cathartic exercise but for others to know how badly you were treated.
Did your Mother not feel for you in your suffering? It is so very sad Lea. The contrast of the peace in Autumn you write about at the beginning and the horror that you faced is a stark contrast in life. I am so sorry to hear you suffered like this and your Stepfather has never been punished for his deed. Your Stepfather is capable of inflicting terrible injuries and one day he will go too far if he is not stopped.
Just one suggestion for this line:
(pants and (bend) over the bed).
Another fine chapter in your life story Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Once again Dolly I appreciate this very much thank you my friend!
Comment from Lisasview
Good morning dear Lea,
Had a bit of time to read this newest part of your story...
I did a bit of editing....
It was carried at the same time knowing what was in store.
The above sentence is not clear...What was carried?
With the buckle out the long, thin prong of buckle sticking out,
The above sentence would read better if you wrote....
With the buckle out, the long thin prong was sticking out,
So you need a comma after out and you do not need to repeat buckle.
he began to walk on my back,
Was he walking on your back? or did you mean something else here?
His face is close to mine.
Here Lea you mixed up your tenses... it should read His face WAS close to mine .... not IS close to mine...
past tense as the rest of your story reads...
Bye for now,
Lisa
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Good morning dear Lea,
Had a bit of time to read this newest part of your story...
I did a bit of editing....
It was carried at the same time knowing what was in store.
The above sentence is not clear...What was carried?
With the buckle out the long, thin prong of buckle sticking out,
The above sentence would read better if you wrote....
With the buckle out, the long thin prong was sticking out,
So you need a comma after out and you do not need to repeat buckle.
he began to walk on my back,
Was he walking on your back? or did you mean something else here?
His face is close to mine.
Here Lea you mixed up your tenses... it should read His face WAS close to mine .... not IS close to mine...
past tense as the rest of your story reads...
Bye for now,
Lisa
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Lisa, thank you so very much without you and your Eagle eye. I would probably walk right past it Thank you, I know you're a busy woman and a talented woman to boot. I appreciate your comments. Thank You again I have read your work it's really good and I did comment Have an amazing day out in that beautiful country you live in!
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Thank you again Lea... just love being able to help.
Lisa
Comment from Chuck Keller
My mother handled the punishment in our house. Southern tradition was the rule.
"Go get me a switch!" Was the speech my sister and I dreaded.
"And it better not break or you'll get a stronger one!"
Sounds mild compared to your trauma.
I enjoy reading these every time but being able to relate, even in a small way, makes it more painful.
I appreciate your talent. Keep going and purge this horror.
ð???ð?¤?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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My mother handled the punishment in our house. Southern tradition was the rule.
"Go get me a switch!" Was the speech my sister and I dreaded.
"And it better not break or you'll get a stronger one!"
Sounds mild compared to your trauma.
I enjoy reading these every time but being able to relate, even in a small way, makes it more painful.
I appreciate your talent. Keep going and purge this horror.
ð???ð?¤?
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Abuse of any kind is terrible for a child. Whether it's Verbal or all the way up to a beating. I'm sorry you went through what you went through on the one hand I have the selfish thought of knowing that yourself understands what i'm saying and has been through part of that. Fear is fear anyway. You slice it and it's the most powerful motivator any child controlled by that no matter what the reason is going to have the same pain. I feel for you. And I hope that you're well and that you have moved beyond this. Thank you again appreciate you!
Comment from damommy
That was quite a brutal beating! I'm surprised you survived it. It finally set your resolve to get away, so some good came of it. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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That was quite a brutal beating! I'm surprised you survived it. It finally set your resolve to get away, so some good came of it. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Again I thank you so much for hanging in with me and for reading and offering your comments so happy for your interest and that what I'm saying is coming across as I hoped it would thank you again. I hope your day's great!
Comment from hassan nasrallah
This biography is an evocative and deeply personal journey through the author's life, skillfully blending poetic descriptions of moments and stark recollections of harrowing experiences. It's an exploration of the duality of simplicity and beauty coexisting with pain and trauma.It's a testament to the human spirit's capacity to endure and seek solace in the simple, beautiful moments of life, even after enduring great suffering. great read!
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This biography is an evocative and deeply personal journey through the author's life, skillfully blending poetic descriptions of moments and stark recollections of harrowing experiences. It's an exploration of the duality of simplicity and beauty coexisting with pain and trauma.It's a testament to the human spirit's capacity to endure and seek solace in the simple, beautiful moments of life, even after enduring great suffering. great read!
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for reading for offering your very insightful and kind review.
I'm glad you were able to read one of my chapters and offer some thoughts for which I am grateful. It's an auto bio, it can be found in my portfolio. Its called Ghost. Please note some chapters are difficult to read. Is reader discretion is advised. Thank you again!