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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Georgios"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda----and it started Like a bad acid trip but the effects eventually wore off for poor Echo, at least until the next chapter
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda----and it started Like a bad acid trip but the effects eventually wore off for poor Echo, at least until the next chapter
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hahaha! Love it, Mike!
Comment from Sally Law
I absolutely love this chapter! Wow! It was worth the wait. With the new twist and Junior taken care of, we press on in the story. Georgio is a (hunky) new addition to the story with spiritual insight and familial connections to Theo. This book just keeps getting better, my friend! Love, love, love it! Can't wait for more!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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I absolutely love this chapter! Wow! It was worth the wait. With the new twist and Junior taken care of, we press on in the story. Georgio is a (hunky) new addition to the story with spiritual insight and familial connections to Theo. This book just keeps getting better, my friend! Love, love, love it! Can't wait for more!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Wow, thank you Sally! I appreciate the stars and accolades!
I told you I kept making changes on the chapter. I started to make Georgios a minor character, but decided to build him up, then bring him back once they get to Concorde Valley. I had to do some rewriting to work it in. Thanks for the confirmation!
Many hugs,
Rhonda
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Most welcome, my dear! My sincere pleasure. A delight to read. Blessings,
Sal XOs
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wish I could walk in trees, that must be fun. This is really gripping, Rhonda, a lot of action, and thankfully, she was saved by Theo's half-brother from, Junior. He said something that has left me wondering. Why do they want her? It can't be nice, whatever it is. I'm glad Theo is back with her, and now Georgios as well. You set the scene really well, there is some wonderful imagery coming through from your words. It also sets the imagination alight. I'm really enjoying your story. Great writing, my friend. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
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I wish I could walk in trees, that must be fun. This is really gripping, Rhonda, a lot of action, and thankfully, she was saved by Theo's half-brother from, Junior. He said something that has left me wondering. Why do they want her? It can't be nice, whatever it is. I'm glad Theo is back with her, and now Georgios as well. You set the scene really well, there is some wonderful imagery coming through from your words. It also sets the imagination alight. I'm really enjoying your story. Great writing, my friend. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for the six stars and the helpful comments, Sandra!
I wish I could walk in trees, too. Maybe if they were short, as I have a bit of a height issue, lol.
You were right, there?s a real reason they want Echo, but she won?t find out for a bit. There are just some things Theo and his family are going to make her work through. I?m guessing that?s how it went for Maggie in your first book.
I?m glad the imagery is working. It?s something I have to work on as I have a tendency to lean too much on dialogue.
Thanks again, my friend,
Hugs,
Rhonda
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Thank you so much for the six stars and the helpful comments, Sandra!
I wish I could walk in trees, too. Maybe if they were short, as I have a bit of a height issue, lol.
You were right, there?s a real reason they want Echo, but she won?t find out for a bit. There are just some things Theo and his family are going to make her work through. I?m guessing that?s how it went for Maggie in your first book.
I?m glad the imagery is working. It?s something I have to work on as I have a tendency to lean too much on dialogue.
Thanks again, my friend,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from JSD
Such a cool story. Well done. I am really enjoying the fantasy and legend aspects of this. You describe them as if they are natural and it is most effective. I'm getting to know these great characters too.
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Such a cool story. Well done. I am really enjoying the fantasy and legend aspects of this. You describe them as if they are natural and it is most effective. I'm getting to know these great characters too.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hi John, thanks for the supportive review. I?m so glad you?re following the story. I?m glad the characters seem authentic. I?m trying to make them relatable in spite of their obvious differences.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from BethShelby
This is another creative and interesting chapter. It is as everyone pretends to be a friend and then turns out to be the enemy in disguise. I'm glad the horseman whe rescued Echo was one of the good guys. You leave Echo traveling though the trees but I'm not sure where she is going. I would think she would stay in the forest until Theo finds her.
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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This is another creative and interesting chapter. It is as everyone pretends to be a friend and then turns out to be the enemy in disguise. I'm glad the horseman whe rescued Echo was one of the good guys. You leave Echo traveling though the trees but I'm not sure where she is going. I would think she would stay in the forest until Theo finds her.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hi Beth, thanks for the review! Yes, Echo has faced some deception, but not in the people who are her true friends.
I?ll go back and clarify what Echo?s plans are in the trees.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from Sarah Robin
Wow! What a great imagination you have! I enjoyed reading this chapter in your book. Now, I am trying to work out who the killer is. Thanks for sharing this story. I look forward to the next chapter. Sarah
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Wow! What a great imagination you have! I enjoyed reading this chapter in your book. Now, I am trying to work out who the killer is. Thanks for sharing this story. I look forward to the next chapter. Sarah
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hi Sarah, thank you for reading the chapter, and for the lovely 6 stars!
The killer was actually a group of three men, including Junior. They were all Specters, which are human-like servants of the enemy, and are all in the fight to try and capture Echo and take her to the enemy?s household.
In a later chapter, you?ll learn who the enemy is.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow, you have got one heck of a book going here! That's very neat. Wow, What a cool idea for a story, and you got these specters there, too. Wow, that's totally creepy.
I hope Echo kicks butt and takes care of the bad guy! I very much enjoyed this, and it's a good read from beginning to ask and interesting too. For me. If a writing doesn't grab me bread off the hop, I'll get bored, and we want to something else. That was not the case with this so great job. Great submission. I wish you best luck and have an awesome night!
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Wow, you have got one heck of a book going here! That's very neat. Wow, What a cool idea for a story, and you got these specters there, too. Wow, that's totally creepy.
I hope Echo kicks butt and takes care of the bad guy! I very much enjoyed this, and it's a good read from beginning to ask and interesting too. For me. If a writing doesn't grab me bread off the hop, I'll get bored, and we want to something else. That was not the case with this so great job. Great submission. I wish you best luck and have an awesome night!
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Lea, thank you so much for your exceptional review. I?m so glad you stumbled on it and decided to review. I?m equally glad you felt engaged in it. Like you, I have a short attention when it comes to long pieces, and it has to grip me.
Thanks again, hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
I'm just loving your story Rhonda, it seems that Theo has connections, and a great shot with a bow to boot. She certainly saved her from the spectre Junior, who doesn't seem to be terribly affected by an arrow in the shoulder, however she is rescued by Theo's half brother. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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I'm just loving your story Rhonda, it seems that Theo has connections, and a great shot with a bow to boot. She certainly saved her from the spectre Junior, who doesn't seem to be terribly affected by an arrow in the shoulder, however she is rescued by Theo's half brother. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review and the six stars, Roy! I appreciate your attention to detail, and for pulling out the main points.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Most welcome Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
Great rescue! And you always keep your reader guessing as we didn't know who Junior was this time - whether he was a good guy. But he isn't!
In Echo's situation, knowing whom to trust is critical.
One question: where is the cat when she is tree-walking? Sunny was in the backpack on her lap before.
Minor nit:
"Fly little sparrow. ("Fly, little sparrow.)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Great rescue! And you always keep your reader guessing as we didn't know who Junior was this time - whether he was a good guy. But he isn't!
In Echo's situation, knowing whom to trust is critical.
One question: where is the cat when she is tree-walking? Sunny was in the backpack on her lap before.
Minor nit:
"Fly little sparrow. ("Fly, little sparrow.)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thanks for the six stars, Helen, they are a lovely gift!
Thank you for taking time on the details. I?ll go back and fix the comma. I?ll, also mention the cat in the backpack. Good point on it.
Thanks again,
Much love,
Rhonda
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Love the chapter, and all these warriors that are coming to her rescue. That mystical Theo hides so much care and concern for the little "sparrow". Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Love the chapter, and all these warriors that are coming to her rescue. That mystical Theo hides so much care and concern for the little "sparrow". Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Iza, for the generous six star review, and for your comments. Theo has Echo at the heart of everything he does, lol.
Hugs,
Rhonda