Girls like Us
A woman returns to her former home on Halloween20 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
This is a great Halloween story. The pumpkin in the picture looks rather sinister. I did not realize the narrator was a ghost; it was a good surprise. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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This is a great Halloween story. The pumpkin in the picture looks rather sinister. I did not realize the narrator was a ghost; it was a good surprise. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Thank you, I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from gramalot8
Great story for Halloween! I was totally surprised with the turn of events! I loved how we walked down memory lane with her... totally thinking of the revenge she was about to accomplish!
But... what a fantastic twist of fate!
Wish there were some way they could all relish the revenge they seek.
Thanks for sharing your awesome story with us!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Great story for Halloween! I was totally surprised with the turn of events! I loved how we walked down memory lane with her... totally thinking of the revenge she was about to accomplish!
But... what a fantastic twist of fate!
Wish there were some way they could all relish the revenge they seek.
Thanks for sharing your awesome story with us!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Thank you. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
With the exception of cleaned plate, (I think cleansed would be better, I found the entire story wonderfully well told, especially in light that in a few nights the night of the dread arrives. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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With the exception of cleaned plate, (I think cleansed would be better, I found the entire story wonderfully well told, especially in light that in a few nights the night of the dread arrives. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Thank you. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it, and thank you for the six stars.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice story, if 'nice' is the right word for terrible.
(smiley face here)
Well written.
I hope Georgina gets her revenge soon, before next Halloween.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Nice story, if 'nice' is the right word for terrible.
(smiley face here)
Well written.
I hope Georgina gets her revenge soon, before next Halloween.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Thank you and for the six stars as well. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent Halloween story for the contest. I think you will do well on this site. I see you just joined FanStory the month. Probably most of the people will be older than you. That doesn't matter. Writers of all ages are welcome.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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This is an excellent Halloween story for the contest. I think you will do well on this site. I see you just joined FanStory the month. Probably most of the people will be older than you. That doesn't matter. Writers of all ages are welcome.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you Beth. I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Halloween contest entry with us. It definitely is a Halloween one. You told a good story. I enjoyed reading.
curled up next to him on the sofa. (curled up beside him)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you for sharing this Halloween contest entry with us. It definitely is a Halloween one. You told a good story. I enjoyed reading.
curled up next to him on the sofa. (curled up beside him)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you Barbara, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a very scary, creative story. You also leave a little space for readers to think he will be killed but they stay away from him. A reader can imagine what will happen next. The natural feeling is to hold that eventually one of the new sister will kill him, and all of it will come to be known. Excellent writing and story for the challenge.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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This is a very scary, creative story. You also leave a little space for readers to think he will be killed but they stay away from him. A reader can imagine what will happen next. The natural feeling is to hold that eventually one of the new sister will kill him, and all of it will come to be known. Excellent writing and story for the challenge.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you. I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I wish I had a six, your story is clearly a winner, the plot is so intense and deceiving, first you think there is a jealous girlfriend until is not... Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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I wish I had a six, your story is clearly a winner, the plot is so intense and deceiving, first you think there is a jealous girlfriend until is not... Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Lisasview
Hi Jacob,
Just found another one of yours to read... Really well written and moved along at a very good pace...
So exciting that I wanted to read the very next sentence..
I wish you the very best in the halloween Story contest...
Lisasview
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Hi Jacob,
Just found another one of yours to read... Really well written and moved along at a very good pace...
So exciting that I wanted to read the very next sentence..
I wish you the very best in the halloween Story contest...
Lisasview
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you Lisa. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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You are so welcome,
Lisa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I don't know where you are, but it sounds like you are somewhere hot for Halloween as you are having a scorching hot spell, Halloween always reminds me of misty dank damp nights when it gets dark early, but maybe you are somewhere hot.
This story has progressed into something quite spooky and I reckon this is a good post for the Halloween story contest. If only ghosts really existed, this is a fun post Jacob, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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I don't know where you are, but it sounds like you are somewhere hot for Halloween as you are having a scorching hot spell, Halloween always reminds me of misty dank damp nights when it gets dark early, but maybe you are somewhere hot.
This story has progressed into something quite spooky and I reckon this is a good post for the Halloween story contest. If only ghosts really existed, this is a fun post Jacob, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you Dolly. The reference to the hot spell was just in the character's memory, it's definitely not hot where I am in the UK. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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I understand now x x x
