2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an ambient and sad post and I felt the sorrow in this fine presentation. We are all touched by grief at some time in our lives and it is hard to cope with it, well chosen words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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This is an ambient and sad post and I felt the sorrow in this fine presentation. We are all touched by grief at some time in our lives and it is hard to cope with it, well chosen words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
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Comment from lyenochka
You captured that grief well with the dusk (the end of a day) that "seeps through the abandoned home" and while the home is empty, the boat is "full" of grief. We don't know what happened to the people but some tragedy occurred.
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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You captured that grief well with the dusk (the end of a day) that "seeps through the abandoned home" and while the home is empty, the boat is "full" of grief. We don't know what happened to the people but some tragedy occurred.
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Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Yes! That's what happened... but we don't know what. It's different for each reader.
Thank you very much, big sister.
Love
Marival
Comment from L. Kalere
I had an immediate physical reaction to this haiku. The image is absolutely stunning, a poem in itself. "Misty amber dusk" is beautiful imagery, and your interpretation of grief pulls it all together and gives it meaning. I love it.
Linda
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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I had an immediate physical reaction to this haiku. The image is absolutely stunning, a poem in itself. "Misty amber dusk" is beautiful imagery, and your interpretation of grief pulls it all together and gives it meaning. I love it.
Linda
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words, Linda.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Marival,
this is so relatable. The hues you painted fitted perfectly into the intent of feeling the emotion created while reading. And of course, it does help when the presentation you always achieve it so perfectly matched as to attain not only a mental picture, but an aesthetic one also.
I guess I related especially to the colour translation and the way you expanded the feeling so well by the thought 'seeps through'... the emptiness and void left by grief... and in saying that, there are many different levels of what grief may mean to each individual and what it actually pertains to.
So much emotion created in such a short form... that's mastery in my books!
With our thoughts we create...
a level of emotion.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Hi Marival,
this is so relatable. The hues you painted fitted perfectly into the intent of feeling the emotion created while reading. And of course, it does help when the presentation you always achieve it so perfectly matched as to attain not only a mental picture, but an aesthetic one also.
I guess I related especially to the colour translation and the way you expanded the feeling so well by the thought 'seeps through'... the emptiness and void left by grief... and in saying that, there are many different levels of what grief may mean to each individual and what it actually pertains to.
So much emotion created in such a short form... that's mastery in my books!
With our thoughts we create...
a level of emotion.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much, James. You got it. I lifted open ended for each reader fills their own type of grief.
Have a wonderful day (*÷*)
MariVal
"You cannot protect yourself from sadness without protecting yourself from happiness" - Jonathan Safran Foer
Comment from GWHARGIS
This really painted a picture. I could see a harbor shrouded in mist and sun trying to burn it off. Beautiful feel to this. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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This really painted a picture. I could see a harbor shrouded in mist and sun trying to burn it off. Beautiful feel to this. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
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Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words, Gretchen.
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