Saving Mr. Calvin
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow this story just gets better better every chapter I read i'm totally curious whats happening next! The suit, the aliens All the funky things going around with that weird technology! Wouldn't mind sitting down with those folks and having to beer myself l o l! This is a fun, entertaining, believable story with vibrant characters Great dialogue and a fun storyline too!
Having said that, your story is grammatically perfect? I have no issues with spelling sentence structure subject matter. I think you've done a great job. A fine submission keep writing because I like it!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Wow this story just gets better better every chapter I read i'm totally curious whats happening next! The suit, the aliens All the funky things going around with that weird technology! Wouldn't mind sitting down with those folks and having to beer myself l o l! This is a fun, entertaining, believable story with vibrant characters Great dialogue and a fun storyline too!
Having said that, your story is grammatically perfect? I have no issues with spelling sentence structure subject matter. I think you've done a great job. A fine submission keep writing because I like it!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Thanks so much, Lea. I'm so glad you found the story. Let me know when you'd like the synopsis of Part 2 and Part 3, and I can send them to you like I did for Part 1 to catch you up. Part 4, coming up quite soon, will make more sense to you with that background.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I think everyone will want some consequences more than a so sorry from Dana. Yes, they found out good information about the suit, but she committed Propriority Trespass which is illegal, and cheated at the games, and stole the champoinship. Foul! She should stand up at the banquet and confess. Karen
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I think everyone will want some consequences more than a so sorry from Dana. Yes, they found out good information about the suit, but she committed Propriority Trespass which is illegal, and cheated at the games, and stole the champoinship. Foul! She should stand up at the banquet and confess. Karen
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Perhaps, but in the long run, maybe it would be better to stay and have the constant reminder of her name on the plaque on the wall be her penance to help keep her from regressing. That was Abby's thinking in the previous story because she felt sorry for this lost soul.
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Ooooh, that is so twisted. I love it. But after a while that could turn to hate. Be careful.
:-) Karen
Comment from Paul Manton
You are getting almost as good as Agatha Christie at leaving significant hints - though you usually make them easy to pick up by putting them at the end, instead of embedding them in the center of the story.
This week's clue? THREE GLASSES. The waitress does not see one of your Coors drinkers - because he's not really there. Art is, presumably, a ghost of a famous golfer, who died long ago. Don't worry, Jim - your secret is safe! It will be interesting to see who else gets it - or whether I am speaking from a nether orifice!
Good for wise and kind Abby to rehabilitate the school bully and cheat. Salvation (as I said previously) has come to Dana's house. Nice ideas over making sure Abby gets the reward she deserves - and then . . .
Back to the Future! Great explanations to help newcomers to the story - and this lovely enigmatic ending.
When I was a 5th grader, there was a famous boys' comic strip called 'Roy of the Rovers' - and one of the running serials had a legendary goalkeeper called 'Wilson' (I think) - no one knew how old he was or where he came from - he was the best goalie ever. I read his final story; when he died on the pitch, his body suddenly aged and began to disintegrate. It transpired that he was well over 100 years old!
Will Art do that - or just fade away (I hope I won't hear 'Old golfers never die, they just lose . . .') Oh dear!
Paul
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You are getting almost as good as Agatha Christie at leaving significant hints - though you usually make them easy to pick up by putting them at the end, instead of embedding them in the center of the story.
This week's clue? THREE GLASSES. The waitress does not see one of your Coors drinkers - because he's not really there. Art is, presumably, a ghost of a famous golfer, who died long ago. Don't worry, Jim - your secret is safe! It will be interesting to see who else gets it - or whether I am speaking from a nether orifice!
Good for wise and kind Abby to rehabilitate the school bully and cheat. Salvation (as I said previously) has come to Dana's house. Nice ideas over making sure Abby gets the reward she deserves - and then . . .
Back to the Future! Great explanations to help newcomers to the story - and this lovely enigmatic ending.
When I was a 5th grader, there was a famous boys' comic strip called 'Roy of the Rovers' - and one of the running serials had a legendary goalkeeper called 'Wilson' (I think) - no one knew how old he was or where he came from - he was the best goalie ever. I read his final story; when he died on the pitch, his body suddenly aged and began to disintegrate. It transpired that he was well over 100 years old!
Will Art do that - or just fade away (I hope I won't hear 'Old golfers never die, they just lose . . .') Oh dear!
Paul
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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You are very perceptive, Paul. You picked up on that 3 glasses bit (which only came at the end because I broke the chapter up; otherwise, next Monday's chapter would have been too long, which I'm sure you would complain about!) I think you might be surprised, however, when you see what I have in store for Art Calvin. We're not quite done with him yet.
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I think Art Calvin is a brilliant invention of yours, Jim. Well, some reads are very long, but I am following just a few story writers, so the truth is, I would review it even if I have breakfast half way through!
My final Charlie Christmas story will be nearly 4000 words - and no one has ever read one of my big stories here! It's also the best I ever wrote, so I hope people will bring coffee and donuts to the party!
Look forward to the next!
Paul
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Now I'm looking forward to that, Paul. I really don't mind long stories as long as they are interesting, which I'm sure yours will be.