Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023

Thanks Gypsy!

I do appreciate your remarks.

Mark

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a serene scene reflected well in your 5-7-5 verse. I can feel the calm and poignancy of this family's visit and I like the idea of memories being "sketched in stone." A very atmospheric and thoughtful post! Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023

Thank you Debbie!

Pleased my imagery worked for you.

Mark

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This seems to be quite a well written poem in haiku style. I like the idea of "Mem'ries sketched in stone." I wish you good luck in the poetry contest.

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023

Wendy,

Thanks for your kind words for my Haiku entry.

I typically use this format for my poems. Longer ones are just not in my poetry wheelhouse.

Mark

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5, Trees Shade Our Loved Ones, has the proper formatting and creates a scene where family can spend time with the deceased for an extended amount of time. Nice.

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 Comment Written 17-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023

Bill,

THANKS! Always appreciate your spin on my poems,

Mark