Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Flowers"Miranda tries to find Dougie.
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Comment from JSD
Great writing as usual. The characters are starting to infiltrate my brain now - or am I infiltrating their lives through your writing skills. Excellent stuff. And a bit of a cliffhanger too. X
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Great writing as usual. The characters are starting to infiltrate my brain now - or am I infiltrating their lives through your writing skills. Excellent stuff. And a bit of a cliffhanger too. X
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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They've taken me over so, why not you too. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I like the way you write: descriptive but not too overbearing. The scenes are believable and the characters seem real. It's always fun to read you work. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Hello Gretchen,
I like the way you write: descriptive but not too overbearing. The scenes are believable and the characters seem real. It's always fun to read you work. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Tom. You just made my day. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I love your description of Preston and immediately look forward to seeing more of him. Mr. Starling is rather interesting also. How is she ever going to tell Rita her husband is a hound dog?
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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I love your description of Preston and immediately look forward to seeing more of him. Mr. Starling is rather interesting also. How is she ever going to tell Rita her husband is a hound dog?
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Shes got more to investigate Rita's husband. No stone left unturned. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your story is moving along with great pace. Miranda is doing a bit of self-talk to try and recover her equilibrium and all is going quite well. The carnations are a surprise ( note "Did they put the (?) in the cup or did you?") and Preston is not as much of a pain as anticipated and even quite astute when he points out the suspicious man by the dumpster. We end on a note of suspense with Miranda still in the dark as to what's going on. Nicely done, Gretchen. Looking forward to the next chapter. Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Your story is moving along with great pace. Miranda is doing a bit of self-talk to try and recover her equilibrium and all is going quite well. The carnations are a surprise ( note "Did they put the (?) in the cup or did you?") and Preston is not as much of a pain as anticipated and even quite astute when he points out the suspicious man by the dumpster. We end on a note of suspense with Miranda still in the dark as to what's going on. Nicely done, Gretchen. Looking forward to the next chapter. Debbie
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Debbie. Your kind review is appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Ahh now what is going on? It sounds like there's a little stalking going on at the moment. Miranda is behaving all tough, but really she's been shaken by the developments Preston might be useful after all, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Ahh now what is going on? It sounds like there's a little stalking going on at the moment. Miranda is behaving all tough, but really she's been shaken by the developments Preston might be useful after all, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Preston will at the very least be a comical diversion. Thank you so much for this awesome review. Gretchen
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written.
"Did they put the in the cup or did you?" - (them?)
Don't be so quick to dismiss boogeymen. They are out there for sure.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Nicely written.
"Did they put the in the cup or did you?" - (them?)
Don't be so quick to dismiss boogeymen. They are out there for sure.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Thanks for catching that. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
Ooooo, that's creepy. I felt a tingle down my spine as I read it. This doesn't bode well, and I'm glad she has Preston with her. Maybe his basketball will come in handy.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Ooooo, that's creepy. I felt a tingle down my spine as I read it. This doesn't bode well, and I'm glad she has Preston with her. Maybe his basketball will come in handy.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
All that freaking out over having to have Preston there when she working and she decided he's a cute kid and they will get along just fine. It is obvious she doesn't want anything thinking she has a soft side. The guy by the dumpster is something left hanging the air to make us want to know more.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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All that freaking out over having to have Preston there when she working and she decided he's a cute kid and they will get along just fine. It is obvious she doesn't want anything thinking she has a soft side. The guy by the dumpster is something left hanging the air to make us want to know more.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Thanks, Beth. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Scary as it might sound, there is someone watching all of most of the time. Many times it's innocent, but on that rare occasion when it isn't, we need to stay aware. We live in a weird world. :-) Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Scary as it might sound, there is someone watching all of most of the time. Many times it's innocent, but on that rare occasion when it isn't, we need to stay aware. We live in a weird world. :-) Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Indeed we do live in a weird world. It does seem a little unsettling when you catch someone staring at you. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
"No, Miranda there are boogeyman!!!!!" I am screaming this at her. I am glad Preston is there with her. I do with Mitch would do a drive by. I really like this story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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"No, Miranda there are boogeyman!!!!!" I am screaming this at her. I am glad Preston is there with her. I do with Mitch would do a drive by. I really like this story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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I promise Mitch will be back. Lol. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen