Just a Small Sip
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Comment from jake cosmos aller
fun poem about someone getting drunk on spiked lemonade at a church-sponsored function. I like the lines about "it gave the party quite a kick
the joke that had been played
lo at the this adult church picnic
who spiked the lemonade?
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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fun poem about someone getting drunk on spiked lemonade at a church-sponsored function. I like the lines about "it gave the party quite a kick
the joke that had been played
lo at the this adult church picnic
who spiked the lemonade?
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Thanks so much Jake! You are always so kind! I appreciate your thoughtful
Comments, dear friend!
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Comment from nomi338
Who ever did it, you just know the Devil made him do it. Encouraged him, and tempted him, then led him right up to it. Despite the devilment, the embarrassment of what this trickster has done. You just have to admit, in the thick of it, you had yourself some fun.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Who ever did it, you just know the Devil made him do it. Encouraged him, and tempted him, then led him right up to it. Despite the devilment, the embarrassment of what this trickster has done. You just have to admit, in the thick of it, you had yourself some fun.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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OMGosh, Nomi, that is a poem for you to write. Why don't you do a sequel to mine. That would be hilarious. I could feel the flow the whole time of reading your review to me. It had meter, rhyme, detail and flow. That would be fun to do something like that together anyway. You are awesome, my sweet BBB!!!
Please think about at least putting that towards your own poem. I absolutely love it! I guess brothers and sisters truly inspire each other. Lol...
I thank you most kindly for the lovely poetic review, along with your awesome poetic comments and your beautiful poetic six stars. And it was all so beautiful that it made me think of this question for you? So would you like to swing on six stars? Carry moonbeams home in six jars? You'd be better off than you are..... or would you like to be a ????? Finish that word. Hehehehehehe!!
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an elf on a shelf with the power to transition into somebody else. If and when the opportunity to change presented itself.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a really funny poem and is perfect for the prompt. I can imagine the repercussions if someone actually spiked the lemonade at a church party. I'm sure there would be some serious investigating going regardless of how much fun the party goers had.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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This is a really funny poem and is perfect for the prompt. I can imagine the repercussions if someone actually spiked the lemonade at a church party. I'm sure there would be some serious investigating going regardless of how much fun the party goers had.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Hey Beth, thanks for the fun comments! Of course this is just a silly fiction poem, so to go with the flow of the prompt. No I can't imagine that ever being a real scenario. But as a poem, it was all in fun. Thanks my sweet friend,
Comment from Jim Wile
Aha! Nice surprise. I had been wondering how those non-alcoholic beverages had made everyone start feeling so good. This was a good, well rhymed poem with a good, flowing meter too.
Just be careful that the stressed syllable is the correct one for a word. For example, the line "What kept making the people laugh" would read more naturally if it said "Just what had made the people laugh."
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Aha! Nice surprise. I had been wondering how those non-alcoholic beverages had made everyone start feeling so good. This was a good, well rhymed poem with a good, flowing meter too.
Just be careful that the stressed syllable is the correct one for a word. For example, the line "What kept making the people laugh" would read more naturally if it said "Just what had made the people laugh."
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Are, thanks so much Jim... I took your suggestion as I'm always in store for some good feedback. I appreciate it very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
A funny story within the lines of your poem, which is very descriptive, using good pace and perfect rhyme to bring us to your conclusion. It would be interesting to see the effects of alcohol on a unsuspecting church community.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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A funny story within the lines of your poem, which is very descriptive, using good pace and perfect rhyme to bring us to your conclusion. It would be interesting to see the effects of alcohol on a unsuspecting church community.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Ginda, you are a gem. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.
Comment from Paul Manton
Well, this is fun! There is quite a famous 12 minute video called Dinner for One, in which an old lady and her butler sit at an empty (very posh) dinner table laid for maybe 20 guests. Trouble is, they are the last two left, so the butler toasts on behalf of each absentee, until he is paralytic. Recommended for the biggest laugh this year! You now present me with a similar scenario - and you tell it so well - first a little woozy, then worse and more outrageous as it goes on. First you wanted more, then you felt strangely amorous, then silly, then gymnastical (!) and then completely incapable.
These things happen at office parties - but a church picnic!!! Disgraceful.
You hope the pastor didn't do it! Hysterical.
Paul
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Well, this is fun! There is quite a famous 12 minute video called Dinner for One, in which an old lady and her butler sit at an empty (very posh) dinner table laid for maybe 20 guests. Trouble is, they are the last two left, so the butler toasts on behalf of each absentee, until he is paralytic. Recommended for the biggest laugh this year! You now present me with a similar scenario - and you tell it so well - first a little woozy, then worse and more outrageous as it goes on. First you wanted more, then you felt strangely amorous, then silly, then gymnastical (!) and then completely incapable.
These things happen at office parties - but a church picnic!!! Disgraceful.
You hope the pastor didn't do it! Hysterical.
Paul
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Paul, you are a gem. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest..
Thanks again, my wonderful friend.
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At YOUR church picnic???
Well, really!
Love from Paul
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Silly boy! All fiction
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I thought so. Your imagination is working well!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm sorry I don't have a six. This was a fun way to look at getting tipsy. You make the reader view the world through these liquored up glasses, then spring the setting on me. Hysterical. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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I'm sorry I don't have a six. This was a fun way to look at getting tipsy. You make the reader view the world through these liquored up glasses, then spring the setting on me. Hysterical. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Gretchen, you are a gem. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.
Comment from Wendy G
A clever poem, and it was well written - with an unexpected revelation that this spiked drink was at a church picnic. Shows how alcohol can play with the mind, and remove all reasoning. That's how so many accidents happen. A fun and light-hearted poem. Well done. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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A clever poem, and it was well written - with an unexpected revelation that this spiked drink was at a church picnic. Shows how alcohol can play with the mind, and remove all reasoning. That's how so many accidents happen. A fun and light-hearted poem. Well done. Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Wendy. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.
Comment from Barry Penfold
Clever and fun poem. Good rhyme scheme and all set on a yellow and happy backdrop. Good effort. Hope the contest goes well. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Clever and fun poem. Good rhyme scheme and all set on a yellow and happy backdrop. Good effort. Hope the contest goes well. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Barry. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Great poem l o l. Yeah, that alcohol starts off fun and games. But the next morning, holy smokes lookout! Especially crappy if someone has spiked the punch! I love the font and the color you used for this picture. I also think you have a really good rhyming scheme. Here and well, chosen words put together in fine sentences that make this a great poem! I wish you best of luck in the contest and I hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Great poem l o l. Yeah, that alcohol starts off fun and games. But the next morning, holy smokes lookout! Especially crappy if someone has spiked the punch! I love the font and the color you used for this picture. I also think you have a really good rhyming scheme. Here and well, chosen words put together in fine sentences that make this a great poem! I wish you best of luck in the contest and I hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Lea, you are a gem. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.