Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Hey Jim, congrats on getting into Book of the Month:) Well done! Another lovely chapter here and getting more exciting as the prototype is tested out by Claire with everything going very well. Obviously caution now has to be taken given the value of the suit and I can only hope it remains safe.... But this remarkably original story is gathering momentum. Thanks for sharing, Jim. Debbie

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023

Thanks, Debbie. You've probably picked up some clues that it may not go so smoothly. We'll see what the next chapter on Friday has in store for it.

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Uh-oh. Per the last exchange, someone is going to lose the suit. I feel something bad afoot.
The balls should go perhaps 45 yards." - I don't mean to be over-critical, but to an average person, wouldn't someone use round numbers, like 50 yards?
Best wishes.

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 Comment Written 04-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023

Good instincts, Wayne.

You're probably right about 50 vs 45. I was just thinking how far I used to hit a pitching wedge, which was 110 yards, figuring 12-year-old Claire would be able to hit it 90 at most, therefore a half-swing would yield her 45. I may decide to change it, though.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

It's all going really well. Too well? Interesting to note that sweat doesn't interfere with the circuitry! Really interesting writing as usual, Jim. Well done. Can't wait for the next one.

John

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 Comment Written 04-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023

Thank you, John. Too well is right. Expect a little bit of trouble with the next posting on Friday.

reply by JSD on 04-Oct-2023

Thought so!