Comment from
lyenochka
You can write about passion in such an artistic way. Without giving specific words, you say so much with "intimate clefts and curbs " and "tangled in satin scarves and sheets." Sounds like a passionate night!
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
Thank you very much for your reading and reviewing this one. I found that most reviewers don't care to read it, perhaps is too sensualfor them. Tanka uses the language of passion.
Love you big sister.
Marival
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Comment from
Douglas Goff
My goodness, that certainly is a spicy literary masterpiece.
Any poem that makes one need a cold shower gets a six star in my book.
Great work, my friend.
Douglas
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
Thank you very much, Douglas. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and funny response. I never know how people are going to respond when I write this kind of tanka.. the Japanesepoems of passion. Im glad you liked it.
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